走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Good direct answer with clear reason and natural phrasing. To improve, vary sentence openings and add a brief linking phrase to connect ideas; avoid overly long single sentences by splitting into two concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I do. I usually use the treadmill for a brisk walk right after I get back from the office because it helps me relax and stay fit. This routine also helps me clear my mind, so I sleep better at night.

建議: The answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors, repetition and unclear phrases. To improve, correct sentence structure, remove redundant fragments, and give a specific brief example or reason. Keep within 2–3 clear sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

範例: No, I rarely walked outdoors as a child because we had a treadmill at home and my parents preferred I stay close to home for safety. As a result, most of my exercise was indoors rather than playing outside.

建議: Good points and relevant vocabulary, but one sentence is fragmented. Improve coherence by using linking phrases and completing the second idea. Add a brief specific example to make it more vivid.

範例: In my opinion, people like walking in parks because they offer a calm atmosphere and lots of greenery, which helps reduce stress. Moreover, parks are social spaces where you can see others exercising or chatting, so the experience feels more pleasant and safe.

建議: The answer is relevant but contains unclear fragments and small errors (typos like 're lakes'). Improve by correcting mistakes, using linking words, and adding a specific detail about what you would do on the walk. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

範例: I would like to take a long walk in the park near my dorm. I go there every two weeks with my best friend because it is peaceful, has many trees and friendly dogs, and it’s a great place to relax and talk for hours.

建議: Direct answer with reasons, but contains small grammar and word-choice errors ('for walk', 'nice pet'). Improve by fixing articles and plurals, and add a short specific detail (what you saw or did) to enrich the response.

範例: I went for a walk in the park near my dorm last weekend because it’s my favorite place. It’s quiet, has many trees and friendly dogs, and I enjoyed sitting by the small pond while watching ducks.

× Yes I do. I usually use the treadmill for a brisk walk right after I get back from the office because it helps me relax and stay fit.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually use the treadmill for a brisk walk right after I get back from the office because it helps me relax and stay fit.

Missing comma after introductory 'Yes' and need consistent punctuation. This is a punctuation and minor fluency issue within present tense context. Suggest adding a comma after 'Yes' and keeping present simple verbs 'use', 'get', 'helps' for habitual actions.

× I rarely went for walks outdoors when I was a child because we had a treadmill at home, so I usually exercise indoors.

✓ I rarely went for walks outdoors when I was a child because we had a treadmill at home, so I usually exercised indoors.

The first clause refers to the past ('went', 'was a child', 'had'), so 'exercise' should be in past tense 'exercised' to maintain tense consistency. Keep all verbs aligned to past when describing past habits.

× Also, my parents prepared the I stayed close to home for safety, which made out their walks less common.

✓ Also, my parents preferred that I stayed close to home for safety, which made their walks less common.

Original sentence is jumbled and has extra words ('prepared the', 'made out'). Corrected sentence uses 'preferred that I stayed' to express parents' preference in the past and removes extraneous words. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× In my opinion, people like walking in parks because they offer a calm atmosphere and lots of greenery which helps reduce stress.

✓ In my opinion, people like walking in parks because they offer a calm atmosphere and lots of greenery, which helps reduce stress.

Missing comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which helps reduce stress'. Adding the comma improves sentence structure and clarity. Tense and agreement are otherwise correct.

× Also part of our social space where you can see other people exercising or chatting which makes the experience more enjoyable.

✓ Also, they are part of our social space, where you can see other people exercising or chatting, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

Sentence fragment: lacks a clear subject and verb. Adding 'they are' supplies the subject and verb. Commas are added to set off the nonrestrictive clauses, improving readability.

× I would like to take a long walk in the park near my dorm. I usually go there every two weeks with my best friend because it is peaceful and has nice pets and trees so it is a great place to re lakes and talk.

✓ I would like to take a long walk in the park near my dorm. I usually go there every two weeks with my best friend because it is peaceful and has nice paths and trees, so it is a great place to relax and talk.

Multiple problems: 're lakes' appears to be a typo and unclear; likely intended 'relax'. 'pets' is odd for a park; 'paths' fits better. Also missing comma before 'so'. Maintain present simple 'go' for habitual action. Correction replaces unclear words and adds punctuation.

× I went for a walk in the park near my dorm last weekend because it is my favorite place to go for walk.

✓ I went for a walk in the park near my dorm last weekend because it is my favorite place to go for a walk.

Missing article 'a' before 'walk' at the end. The main clause uses past tense 'went' correctly; the reason clause uses present simple 'is' to state a general preference, which is acceptable. Add the article to fix the noun phrase.

× I like it there because it is quiet, has many trees and nice pet along a small pond.

✓ I like it there because it is quiet, has many trees and nice paths along a small pond.

'Nice pet' is incorrect and makes no sense in context; 'paths' or 'benches' are appropriate. Also add plural 'paths' to match 'many trees'. This fixes word choice (adjective/noun) to make the description coherent.