走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and reduce redundancy. Use one or two supporting details linked with a connector. Mention frequency and purpose briefly.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to and from school every day because I don’t have a car, and walking helps me clear my mind and feel more alert for studying.

建議: Remove filler words and state the routine clearly. Provide a concise supporting reason using a linking word (e.g., because). Keep it to two sentences max.

範例: Yes, I did. After dinner my family usually walked for about 30 minutes because we believed it helped digestion.

建議: Correct word choice and make a clear logical connection. Use linking words like 'because' and give a specific reason or example. Avoid repetition and keep it concise.

範例: People like walking in parks because city life often lacks green space; parks offer fresh air and a chance to relax away from busy streets.

建議: Fix pronunciation/word errors and streamline the answer. Start with a clear preference, then add one specific reason using a linking word. Avoid unclear words like 'Apple' and unnecessary phrases.

範例: I would like to hike in a national park because they offer marked trails and campsites, allowing me to spend several days enjoying nature.

建議: Be specific about location and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'park' not 'part', 'lake view' not 'lecture view'). Give one clear reason linked with 'because' and avoid repeating.

範例: I went for a walk in a park by the lake recently because it offers both peaceful water views and a skyline view of the city, which I find relaxing.

× Yes, I do work a lot so I have to commute to school and when I walking along the street I can feel the breeze and I can breathe fresh air that to keep my brain refreshing and it's better for study.

✓ Yes, I do work a lot so I have to commute to school, and when I walk along the street I can feel the breeze and breathe fresh air which keeps my mind refreshed and helps me study better.

The phrase 'when I walking' is incorrect because the verb after 'when' needs the base form for present simple context (or 'am walking' for present continuous). Use 'walk' to match the habitual action. Also 'that to keep my brain refreshing' is ungrammatical: use a relative clause 'which keeps my mind refreshed' and 'helps me study better' for clarity.

× Yes, I did umm, like usually after dinner my family, uh, went for a walk for like I said, 30 minutes, umm, that we believed that uh, it can help us to digest uh, food that we just had.

✓ Yes, usually after dinner my family went for a walk for about 30 minutes because we believed it could help us digest the food we had just eaten.

Mixed tenses and redundant words create errors. 'I did umm, like usually' is unnecessary; use simple past 'went'. 'We believed that it can help' mixes past belief with present modal 'can'—use 'could' to match past. Also reorder 'food we had just eaten' for correct past perfect sequencing.

× I think people love working in the parks because most people nowadays live in the cities instead of countryside where it's rare for people to experience a natural space, so that's why people go to park.

✓ I think people love walking in parks because most people nowadays live in cities rather than in the countryside, where it is rare to experience natural spaces, so that's why people go to parks.

Preposition and article errors: use 'walking in parks' not 'working in the parks' (wrong verb). Say 'in cities' and 'in the countryside' or 'the countryside'. Use 'rather than' instead of 'instead of' with parallel structure. 'Go to parks' needs plural or 'go to a park' for singular.

× I really enjoy hiking, so I would prefer some national parks, uh, Apple. They usually provide us place for you to uh, set up camps and then you can enjoy, umm, the nature in a long time.

✓ I really enjoy hiking, so I would prefer visiting some national parks. They usually provide places where you can set up camps and enjoy nature for a long time.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'provide us place for you' mixes pronouns and is ungrammatical. Use 'provide places where you can set up camps'. Remove extraneous words like 'Apple' and 'the' before 'nature'. Use 'for a long time' instead of 'in a long time'.

× Well, I think just a part along the lake, I enjoy the lecture view and also the city view. And so that part, it's a combination of both scenes. So that's why I love it.

✓ Well, I think just a park along the lake. I enjoy the lake view and also the city view. That park is a combination of both scenes, so that's why I love it.

Multiple article and word choice issues: 'a part' should be 'a park'. 'Lecture view' is a mispronunciation of 'lake view'. Use consistent article 'the lake view' or 'lake view' and 'the city view' or 'city view'. Rephrase sentences to be clearer and grammatically correct.