走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 質問に直接答えるようにしてください。ここでは「walk（歩く）」について尋ねられているので、まず歩く頻度や状況を明確に述べ、その後理由を付け加えると良いです。文法ミス（work→walk）や意味のずれを直し、簡潔で自然な表現を使ってください。例：頻度（often/sometimes/rarely）・時間帯・理由（天候・仕事量）を具体的に述べると効果的です。

範例: I don't walk very often because it's usually very hot in Malaysia. I only walk short distances, such as around my neighborhood in the early morning when it's cooler.

建議: 良い構成です：直接の肯定と理由を述べています。ただし繰り返し（I I）や時制・語順の細かいミスを直し、詳細を加えるとより良くなります。リンク語（for example, because）や具体的な例（通学距離、友達と一緒に歩いたこと、季節など）を追加して豊かにしてください。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I lived in Japan, so I usually walked to school every day. For example, it took me about 15 minutes to walk there with my friends, and we often stopped at a bakery on the way.

建議: ポイントは押さえていますが、文が断片的で不自然です。まず主旨の一文（People like to walk in parks because...）を使い、その後に具体的な理由を列挙すると流れが良くなります。接続語（for example, moreover, also）を使って論理的につなぎ、”work”はここでは誤用の可能性が高いので“walk”や“exercise”に直してください。

範例: People like to walk in parks because they can relax and enjoy the fresh air. Moreover, parks are safe and pleasant places to exercise, so many people jog or take their dogs for a walk there.

建議: 答えは意図が伝わりますが、構成が不明確で発話の間（uh）や文法ミスが多いです。まず直接に場所を述べ（I would like to...），その理由を明確にし、過去の推薦や計画については時制を整えてください。具体的な計画（when, with whom, how long）を加えると説得力が増します。

範例: I would like to hike Mount Fuji because it's the highest mountain in Japan and offers amazing views. A friend who likes hiking recommended it to me, and I hope to try it next summer with her.

建議: 質問は“最近どこに散歩に行ったか”なので、現在完了や過去の散歩について直接答えてください。ここでは“work”と“walk”の混同が目立ち、主語と動詞の一致（daughters is→daughters are）など文法ミスがあります。まず短く直接答え（I haven't gone for a long walk recently, but...）し、その後で近所の散歩や施設の説明に具体例を添えてください。

範例: I haven't gone for a long walk recently, but I often walk around my condominium grounds. For instance, I walk along the pool area while my daughters swim, which takes about 20 minutes each time.

× I don't work very much because it is too hot outside in Malaysia.

✓ I don't walk very much because it is too hot outside in Malaysia.

The student used 'work' instead of 'walk', which is a vocabulary error rather than a tense error. However it affects meaning in context of the question about walking. Use the present simple 'don't walk' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use the verb that matches the question (walk) and keep present simple for routines.

× Yes, I did. When I was a child I I lived in Japan so I usually walk to school.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child I lived in Japan, so I usually walked to school.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. 'When I was a child' signals past time, so actions in that period should be past tense: 'walked'. Also remove the duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: use past simple for habitual actions in the past (I usually walked).

× I think people relax and enjoy the fresh air in addition. Work and jog in the park.

✓ I think people relax and enjoy the fresh air. They also work and jog in the park.

The original has a sentence fragment 'Work and jog in the park' without a subject. Combine ideas into complete sentences or add a subject: 'They also work and jog'. Use connectors like 'also' instead of 'in addition' at sentence end. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and verb.

× I would like to hike uh, Mount Fuji is the highest mountain in Japan. My friend like uh hike very much and she recommended it to me. I tried it, it's someday.

✓ I would like to hike Mount Fuji because it is the highest mountain in Japan. My friend likes hiking very much and she recommended it to me. I hope to try it someday.

Multiple errors: run-on sentence and tense/person errors. 'My friend like' should be 'My friend likes' (third person singular). Use 'hiking' after 'likes' or 'likes to hike'. 'I tried it, it's someday' is incorrect: intended meaning is future desire, so 'I hope to try it someday.' Suggestion: break into sentences, use third person -s, and use 'someday' for future intention.

× I have not work recently, however my condominium has a nice work area so I often work while my daughters is swimming in the pool.

✓ I have not worked recently; however, my condominium has a nice work area, so I often work while my daughters are swimming in the pool.

Use present perfect 'have not worked' for an action not done recently. 'Work' as noun might be fine but 'work area' is okay. Subject-verb agreement error: 'my daughters is' should be 'my daughters are' (plural). Also comma/semicolon usage to join clauses. Suggestion: use present perfect for recent time frames and match plural subjects with 'are'.