走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は意味が通じにくく、文法と語彙の誤りが多いです。まずはシンプルな主語＋動詞の構造で答えを作り、不要な語句や繰り返しを避けてください。現在の習慣を述べる際は現在形を使い、理由を述べるときは接続詞（because, soなど）を正しく用いて一文につなげる練習をしてください。例文は短く（最大5文）、明確なトピック文と1〜2の補足詳細を含めるようにしてください。

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk for about 30 minutes every evening because it helps me relax after work. Also, walking keeps me fit, so I try to do it most days.

建議: 時制の使い方が混乱しています（過去の質問には過去形で答える）。理由の説明は1〜2つに絞り、具体的な状況（例えば季節や場所）を付け加えると良いです。話の流れを明確にするために接続詞（because, so, when）を正しく使ってください。不要な躊躇語（ummなど）を減らす練習も必要です。

範例: No, I didn't go for walks much when I was a child. It was very hot where I lived and there were many insects, so my family preferred to stay indoors.

建議: 回答の意図は伝わりますが表現が不自然で冗長です。理由をいくつか挙げる場合は順序立てて、例や感情（relaxing, peacefulなど）を加えると説得力が増します。リンク語（for example, also, besides）を使って文を繋げ、名詞や形容詞（wildlife → insects, scenery → flowers）を適切に選んでください。

範例: Many people like walking in parks because the scenery is pleasant and there are flowers and trees. For example, parks are quiet and relaxing, and you can often see birds or insects, which makes the walk more interesting.

建議: 仮定法や未来の希望を表す表現が不正確です。'If I had the chance' に対しては条件に沿った明確な応答（I would... / I'd like to...）を使い、理由を簡潔に述べてください。また場所の表現（next city, nearby cityなど）を正確にし、不要な繰り返しを避けましょう。

範例: If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk in the countryside near the city. I usually travel by car or train, so walking there would be a nice change and let me explore quiet roads and local scenery.

建議: 過去の経験を述べる点は良いですが、文が散漫で繰り返しが多いです。まず行った場所を明確に述べ、その後で理由や感想（what you saw or wanted to see）を1〜2文で補足してください。具体的なディテール（street name, shops, sights）を入れるとより良いです。

範例: I went for a walk in Ginza recently, along Ginger Street which is near my home. I enjoyed the area, but I didn't have time to explore every side street, so next time I'd like to visit more shops and smaller alleys to see the local details.

× Yes, I like to working because when I I'm working, I don't think they're offend things. So I like to working and uh.

✓ Yes, I like working because when I'm working, I don't think about offensive things. So I like working.

The verb form after 'like' should be the gerund without 'to' ('like working') or the infinitive ('like to work'). 'Like to working' is incorrect. 'When I I'm working' contains an extra subject marker; use 'when I'm working'. 'Don't think they're offend things' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'don't think about offensive things' or 'don't get offended'. Suggestions: use 'like working' or 'like to work', remove duplicated words, and use 'think about' or 'get offended'.

× Now when I was a child, I don't like to working because umm, I don't like to go outside because outside is so hot and I don't like the insect outside. There is an insect in the.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't like working because I didn't like going outside; it was very hot and I didn't like the insects outside.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a child') so verbs must be in the past tense: 'don't like' should be 'didn't like'. 'Like to working' mixes 'to' and gerund; use 'like working' or 'like to work' and match tense: 'didn't like working' or 'didn't like to work'. 'Go outside' when used as gerund should be 'going outside'. 'Insect' must be plural 'insects' when speaking generally. Remove the incomplete fragment 'There is an insect in the.' and combine ideas for clarity.

× Umm, park there because there is a lot of things in the park and other, uh. They can see the flowers and the insect. So there is a lot of things they there they.

✓ Parks are popular because there are a lot of things to see in them. People can see flowers and insects, so there are many things to enjoy.

'Park there' is unnatural; use 'Parks are popular' or 'People go to parks'. 'There is a lot of things' uses singular 'is' with plural noun; use 'there are a lot of things'. 'Mistaken pronoun use: 'They can see...' is vague but acceptable; restructure to 'People can see...'. 'Repeated words 'they there they' indicate confusion; rewrite the sentence clearly. Use plural 'insects' for general reference.

× I walk to the next to the city in Mercy because when I move to the next city I use the car or train so I sometimes I want to walking.

✓ I would walk to the next city, Mercy, because when I travel to the next city I use a car or train, so sometimes I want to walk.

The original mixes tenses and incorrect verb forms. 'I walk to the next to the city in Mercy' is ungrammatical; use 'I would walk to the next city, Mercy' or 'I would like to walk to Mercy'. 'When I move to the next city I use the car or train' should be 'when I travel to the next city I use a car or train'. 'Want to walking' is incorrect: use 'want to walk' (infinitive) or 'like walking' (gerund). Maintain consistent tense and use 'a car' rather than 'the car' unless specific.

× I went to the Ginger St. because I live in the nearby Ginza so but I don't I didn't see the detailed street so I want to see the various place in Ginza.

✓ I went to Ginza Street because I live nearby in Ginza, but I didn't see all the side streets, so I want to see the different places in Ginza.

Combine consistent past tense: 'I went' and 'I didn't see' are correct, but 'I live in the nearby Ginza' mixes present and past; 'I live nearby in Ginza' is fine if present residence is current. Avoid 'so but' — choose one conjunction ('but' or 'so'). 'The detailed street' is unidiomatic; use 'side streets' or 'all the side streets'. 'Various place' should be plural 'various places'. Ensure article use and plurality match the intended meaning.