走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and add a brief specific detail about frequency or purpose using a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk around my university and to nearby shops two or three times a day because it keeps me active and saves time.

建議: Good structure and relevant details; improve by using correct tense/grammar (sometimes), precise time phrases, and a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I often went for walks with my family or friends in the evenings, and sometimes we visited Navy Park for picnics.

建議: Clarify vocabulary and finish the thought: avoid filler words, correct 'working' to 'walking', and complete the idea (reduce stress). Use a linking word to list reasons. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: People like walking in parks because the air is fresh and the environment is peaceful, so it helps them relax and reduce stress.

建議: Improve grammar and coherence: remove fillers, correct subject-verb agreement ('it makes me feel'), and link reasons to the preference. Keep it concise with one topic sentence and one supporting reason.

範例: I would like to take a long walk on the beach or in a forest because I enjoy nature and it makes me feel relaxed after work.

建議: Fix grammar and unclear phrase: use past tense consistently, remove unclear word 'Latex' (probably 'relax'), and combine sentences with a linking word. Provide exact timing and purpose. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Recently I went for a walk in the park near my home. I walked for about 30 minutes to relax after studying.

× Yes I do, I usually walk around my university, uh to nearby places and I think walking is good for my health.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually walk around my university to nearby places, and I think walking is good for my health.

Comma splices and run-on: the original used commas where sentence boundaries or conjunction punctuation are needed. Add a comma after 'Yes' and replace the comma after 'do' with a period. Use a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. This keeps present tense and improves clarity.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Incorrect preposition collocation with 'have a walk'. 'Go outside for a walk' is the natural collocation in English when asking about an activity in the past. Tense is correct (past question form) so only preposition/verb choice needed.

× Yes, I did. I often went for a walk with my family or my friends in the evening. Sometime we also went to Navy Park.

✓ Yes, I did. I often went for a walk with my family or my friends in the evening. Sometimes we also went to Navy Park.

Spelling/word form: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate occasional actions in the past. Past tense 'went' is correct. Use 'sometimes' (adverb) to modify frequency.

× I think people like working in the park because, uh, the air is fresh and the environment is peaceful. Yeah, it helps them relax and reduce this.

✓ I think people like walking in the park because the air is fresh and the environment is peaceful. Yeah, it helps them relax and reduce stress.

Wrong verb choice and vague object: 'working in the park' conflicts with context; 'walking' fits the question. 'Reduce this' is vague and ungrammatical; use 'reduce stress' or 'reduce tension'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I would like to take a long walk on the beach or in the forest. Yeah, I enjoy nature because it's make me feel relaxed after working.

✓ I would like to take a long walk on the beach or in the forest. Yeah, I enjoy nature because it makes me feel relaxed after working.

Subject-verb agreement/present tense: 'it's make' is incorrect. Use 'it makes' (third-person singular) to agree with the subject 'it'. The conditional first sentence is fine; fix verb agreement in the explanation clause.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

Tense choice: 'lately' with a question about recent experience typically uses the present perfect in English. Use 'have you gone' instead of simple past 'did you go' to ask about recent activities continuing to the present.

× Recently I went for a walk in the park near my home. So I walk for about 30 minutes to Latex after studying.

✓ Recently I went for a walk in the park near my home. I walked for about 30 minutes to relax after studying.

Tense and word choice: 'I walk' should be past tense 'I walked' to match 'Recently I went'. 'Latex' is likely a misspelling of 'relax'; use 'relax'. Also remove 'So' at the start of the second sentence for clarity; keep consistent past tense for past events.