走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, correct tense/word choice (use 'walk' not 'work'), reduce redundancy and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, I walk quite often, especially when I was at college. In the evenings my friends and I would walk around the campus playground, chat and enjoy the cool air. It was a relaxing way to end the day and helped me unwind.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and tense, and add a specific detail or example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make it coherent.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because I was very outgoing. My parents and grandparents would take me to the park after they finished work, and we would spend an hour walking and talking together. Those walks were one of my favorite family activities.

建議: Answer directly, correct vocabulary (use 'walk' not 'work'), and make sentences concise. Provide specific reasons with linking words and a brief example to support your points.

範例: People like walking in parks because the atmosphere is relaxing and the air is fresher than in the city. In addition, parks have trees, grass and ponds which make walking more pleasant, so visitors can escape the noise and concrete of urban areas.

建議: Start with a direct statement, correct verb forms, and avoid mixing tenses. Give a specific reason and a short illustrative example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I would like to take a long walk along a river because the breeze and scenery are very calming. For example, when I lived in Hangzhou I often walked with friends beside the Yangtze River; the cool wind and watching people cycle made it enjoyable.

建議: Answer directly in past tense with complete sentences and clearer grammar. Provide a specific time and one brief reason. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Lately I went for walks in a park near my house. After a long day at work my mother needed to relax, so we usually went to the park after supper to walk and talk for about half an hour.

× Yes, I work a lot, especially when in my college.

✓ Yes, I work a lot, especially when I am at college.

Missing subject and incorrect preposition: 'when in my college' is ungrammatical. Use 'when I am at college' to show time and place; present simple 'work' is okay for habitual action but requires correct clause structure.

× When we in the evening, I always walk with my friends or with my classmates or my roommates.

✓ In the evenings, I always walk with my friends, classmates, or roommates.

Incorrect clause 'When we in the evening' lacks verb and natural word order. Use time expression 'In the evenings' and simplify list with commas and 'or' for clarity.

× We walk in the playground and enjoy our night times and chat with each other.

✓ We walk in the park and enjoy the evenings, chatting with each other.

'Playground' is odd for adults; 'park' or 'grounds' fits. 'night times' is unnatural; use 'the evenings'. Use a participle 'chatting' to link actions smoothly.

× It was a lot of fun.

✓ It is a lot of fun.

Context describes habitual or typical activity; present tense 'is' matches general statement. Use past 'was' only if referring to a specific past event.

× Yes, I did when I was a child, was a very extrovert child.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child; I was a very extroverted child.

Sentence missing subject before second clause and needs adjective form 'extroverted'. Use semicolon or separate sentences and include subject 'I'.

× So I always walk out with my parents and my grandparents.

✓ So I always walked out with my parents and grandparents.

Talking about childhood habit requires past tense 'walked' not present 'walk'. Keep 'my' optional before 'grandparents'.

× We enjoy our time when my parents get out from their workplace.

✓ We enjoyed our time when my parents got off work.

Describing past habit: use past tense 'enjoyed' and 'got off work' is a natural phrase in English; 'get out from their workplace' is awkward.

× We were a happy family.

✓ We were a happy family.

This sentence is correct as past description; no grammatical change needed.

× I think the reason why they like to work in a park because the atmosphere in a park was relaxing and the air was fresh.

✓ I think the reason they like to walk in a park is that the atmosphere is relaxing and the air is fresh.

Multiple issues: 'work' should be 'walk'; when giving a reason use 'is that' and tense consistency requires present ('is relaxing', 'is fresh') for general facts.

× There are a lot of trees and grass and waters like river or spring, so it is a good time to live far from the concrete or the tall buildings.

✓ There are many trees, grass, and bodies of water like rivers or springs, so it is nice to be away from concrete and tall buildings.

Use 'many' with countable/plural nouns, 'bodies of water' is natural, pluralize 'river/spring', and 'be away from' is idiomatic instead of 'live far from' in this context.

× I would like to take a long walk maybe beside or along the river.

✓ I would like to take a long walk, maybe beside or along a river.

Sentence is acceptable but specify 'a river' for generality; add comma for natural pause.

× For example, when I was in Hangzhou, I always work with my friends alongside the Yangtze River because the wind beside the river was cool and there's a lot of people do cycling or running.

✓ For example, when I was in Hangzhou, I always walked with my friends along the Yangtze River because the breeze by the river was cool and many people were cycling or running.

Past habitual action needs past tense 'walked'. Use 'breeze' or 'wind' consistently and past 'was'. Replace 'there's a lot of people do cycling' with 'many people were cycling' for correct structure and agreement.

× Mostly I went for a walk lately.

✓ Lately I have mostly been going for walks.

'Lately' pairs with present perfect continuous/simple; use 'have been going' or 'have gone' rather than simple past 'went' to describe recent habitual actions.

× Was a park nearby my house.

✓ It was a park near my house.

Missing subject 'It' needed. Use 'near my house' rather than 'nearby my house' for correct preposition use.

× After a long day work my mom needs to relax her body so we always went to the park after our supper.

✓ After a long day's work my mom needed to relax, so we always went to the park after supper.

Use possessive 'day's work', past tense 'needed' to match past habitual action, and omit 'her body' which is unnatural; 'after supper' is idiomatic.