走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct word choice; use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Remove fillers (uh, umm) and correct vocabulary (suburb, surrounded by mountains and a river). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I often walk around my house because I live in the suburbs and it is surrounded by mountains and a river, which makes the walks relaxing. Walking helps me clear my mind after work.

建議: Answer directly and avoid confusion. Use past tense and relevant vocabulary (go outside, play, walk). Remove unrelated phrases like 'work' and avoid fillers. Give a brief reason with one supporting detail.

範例: Not really. When I was a child I rarely walked outside because I disliked strong sunlight and feared getting tanned. Instead, I preferred playing indoors with my friends.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct grammar (e.g., "people walk", "trees and flowers"). Give a specific reason and a linking phrase for clarity. Avoid vague phrases like 'join the view'.

範例: People like walking in parks because of the natural scenery and peaceful atmosphere. For example, parks have trees and flowers, so walking there is pleasant and relaxing and helps reduce stress.

建議: Be concise and use proper tense. Provide a clear reason why you would choose that place. Remove hesitations and correct phrasing ('when I worked in Taipei three years ago').

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk around Dorman Market because it is an old, lively market I visited while working in Taipei three years ago. I enjoyed buying fresh vegetables there and the atmosphere felt nostalgic.

建議: Answer the question directly in past tense and avoid repetition and fillers. Say where you went and give a brief reason with proper grammar (e.g., 'for digestion' -> 'to aid digestion'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Lately I went for a walk to a small park near my house. My parents and I often walk there after dinner to aid digestion and enjoy the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere.

× Yes, of course I like walking. Uh, I like walking around, umm, my house because I live in the suburb and my house is surrounded by mountains and river, so I like to work and relax.

✓ Yes, of course I like walking. I like walking around my house because I live in the suburbs and my house is surrounded by mountains and a river, so I like to walk and relax.

Errors: incorrect singular/plural 'suburb' should be plural 'suburbs' when referring to the general area; missing article before 'river'; incorrect verb 'work' used instead of 'walk' given context. Suggestion: use 'the suburbs' for residential outskirts, add 'a' before 'river' when mentioning one river, and choose the correct verb that matches meaning ('walk').

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This sentence is grammatically correct for past tense question; no change needed. Keep past simple 'did you... when you were' for past habitual actions.

× To be honest, uh, you might try who? I don't like to go outside to work because I hate sunshine. I I'm afraid I will become dark in my skin so I don't like to work.

✓ To be honest, I didn't like going outside to play when I was a child because I hated the sunshine. I was afraid my skin would become darker, so I didn't like going outside.

Errors: 'you might try who?' is unrelated and ungrammatical; 'go outside to work' is wrong contextually (work vs play/walk); tense inconsistency (mix of present and past) — use past for childhood. 'I I'm' is a typo. 'Become dark in my skin' is incorrect word order and comparative. Suggestion: remove irrelevant fragment, use past tense verbs 'didn't like', use 'going outside' (gerund) and 'darker' for comparative, and include 'the' before 'sunshine'.

× Well, uh, I guess it's because in the park there are some trees and flower, so when people walks around the park they can join the view and the atmosphere is great.

✓ Well, I guess it's because in the park there are some trees and flowers, so when people walk around the park they can enjoy the view and the atmosphere is great.

Errors: 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match 'trees'; subject-verb agreement: 'people walks' should be 'people walk'; 'join the view' is incorrect collocation — use 'enjoy the view'. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns, ensure verb agrees with plural subject, and use appropriate verbs (enjoy) with 'view'.

× If I had a chance I would take a long walk around the Dorman Market. It's a oh it's an old market and I usually buy some vegetables and foods when I worked in Taipei 3 years ago so I love it.

✓ If I had the chance I would take a long walk around Dorman Market. It's an old market and I used to buy vegetables and food there when I worked in Taipei three years ago, so I love it.

Errors: 'a chance' is acceptable but 'the chance' is more natural in this conditional; extraneous filler 'oh it's' removed. 'Dorman Market' does not need 'the' necessarily; article before 'old market' should be 'an'. Tense inconsistency: 'usually buy' with past 'worked' — use 'used to buy' to indicate habitual past action. 'foods' should be 'food' (uncountable). Write numbers as words in speech transcripts is optional but keep consistency. Suggestion: match conditional phrasing, use 'used to' for past habits, and use uncountable noun 'food'.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

Error: 'lately' is typically used with present perfect (Have you been anywhere lately?). For a past simple question use 'recently' or change verb to present perfect. Suggestion: use 'recently' with past simple or change to 'Have you gone for a walk lately?'.

× I went to work near my house recently, umm, my parents and I always uh, go go to a small park after dinner for our umm, digestion and enjoying the atmosphere and the fresh air.

✓ I went for a walk near my house recently. My parents and I always go to a small park after dinner for digestion and to enjoy the atmosphere and the fresh air.

Errors: 'went to work near my house' conflicts with walking context — use 'went for a walk'. Repetition 'go go' is a filler. 'for our digestion and enjoying' mixes noun phrases and -ing forms incorrectly. Use 'for digestion' (or better 'to aid digestion') and parallel structure 'to enjoy' after 'for'. Suggestion: keep parallel infinitive forms, remove fillers, and choose verbs that match the activity described.