走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 단어 선택을 바로잡고, 중복을 없애며 명확한 이유와 예시를 하나 더 덧붙이세요. 주제문으로 바로 답한 뒤 연결어(for example, because 등)를 사용해 구체적인 이유를 제시하면 좋습니다. 발음 및 동사 형태(예: work → walk)를 교정하세요.

範例: Yes, I walk a lot because it helps me stay healthy and reduces stress. For example, I usually walk for thirty minutes after work to clear my mind and improve my fitness.

建議: 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고 'work'와 'walk'를 혼동하지 마세요. 이유를 간단히 설명한 후 구체적인 상황(예: 학교 가는 길)을 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다.

範例: Yes, I often walked around my town when I was a child because my hometown was rural and there was no public transport. For example, I walked to school every morning, which took about twenty minutes.

建議: 의도는 이해되지만 단어 선택과 문장 흐름이 많이 어색합니다. 'work' 대신 'walk'를 쓰고, 일반적인 이유(health, relaxation, scenery)를 나열한 뒤 연결어(for example, additionally)를 사용해 구체적 이유를 덧붙이세요.

範例: People like to walk in parks because it is good for both physical and mental health. For example, parks provide fresh air and pleasant scenery, which helps people relax and exercise at the same time.

建議: 가정문은 조건절을 올바르게 사용하고 동사 형태를 정확히 고치세요 (e.g., If I had the time, I would go…). 장소와 이유를 간결히 말한 뒤 구체적인 활동을 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

範例: If I had the chance, I would go to Jeju Island and take long walks along the beach. I want to enjoy the beautiful scenery and sea breeze, especially on Jeju Beach Road.

建議: 최근 일을 말할 때는 현재완료 또는 단순과거 중 하나를 선택해 일관성 있게 사용하세요. 문장을 간결하게 만들고 동사(walk)와 명사(library)의 관사 사용을 정확히 하세요. 왜 그곳을 선택했는지도 구체적으로 설명하세요.

範例: Recently I went to the library next to Lake Park. After studying there I often walked around the lake to relax and refresh my mind, which helped me concentrate better when I returned to study.

× Yes, I like working because working make me feel comfortable and I I can improve my health.

✓ Yes, I like walking because walking makes me feel comfortable and I can improve my health.

The verb must agree with the third person singular subject 'walking' which requires 'makes' not 'make'. Also 'working' should be 'walking' to match context; duplicate 'I' removed. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and choose correct gerund consistent with meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× It is very beneficial for my body and it is control my mind so I.

✓ It is very beneficial for my body and it helps control my mind.

The clause 'it is control my mind' is ungrammatical; 'help(s) control' or 'helps to control' is correct. 'Helps' agrees with singular subject 'it'. Also sentence fragment at end removed. Suggestion: use 'helps control' for smooth expression and complete the sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× Yes, I always worked around my town because my hometown was a rural area so there are there were there were no transport so I usually walked.

✓ Yes, I always walked around my town because my hometown was a rural area so there was no transportation and I usually walked.

Mixing present and past forms and redundant words. Use past tense consistently ('walked', 'was'). 'Transport' as noun should be 'transportation' or 'public transport'; 'there was no' matches singular uncountable noun. Remove duplicate 'there were'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Because working is very beneficial for health recently, so many people want improve their sales and working is the best methods to improve our health.

✓ Because walking has been very beneficial for health recently, many people want to improve their health and walking is the best method to improve it.

Use gerund 'walking' consistently; 'want improve' needs 'want to improve'. 'Methods' should be singular 'method' to agree with 'walking'. Also 'sales' is likely wrong contextually; replaced with 'health'. Suggestion: include 'to' after 'want' and match singular/plural nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× So many people usually work around the park it is.

✓ So many people usually walk around the park.

'Work' is incorrect verb here; likely 'walk'. The trailing 'it is' is extraneous. Replace with clear subject-verb-object structure. Suggestion: ensure pronouns and extra fragments are removed and use correct verb. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× If I have a time, I go to Jeju Island and I hope to work around the beach.

✓ If I have time, I will go to Jeju Island and I hope to walk along the beach.

Conditional future requires 'will' in main clause for real future possibility after 'if I have time'. 'Have a time' should be 'have time'. 'Work' should be 'walk' to match context and 'around the beach' -> 'along the beach'. Suggestion: use 'will' for future in conditional and correct verb choice. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× It is very beneficial and there are lots of beautiful scenery so I want walked around Jeju Beach Rd.

✓ It is very beneficial and there is lots of beautiful scenery so I want to walk around Jeju Beach Road.

'Want walked' is incorrect; use 'want to walk' for intention. 'There are lots of beautiful scenery' should be 'there is lots of beautiful scenery' or better 'there is a lot of beautiful scenery' because 'scenery' is uncountable. Suggestion: use 'want to' + base verb and correct agreement with uncountable nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Recently I usually went to library beside a Lake Park.

✓ Recently I usually go to the library beside a lake park.

Mixing 'recently' with 'usually went' creates tense inconsistency; use present tense 'go' for habitual actions. Include definite article 'the' before 'library' and lowercase 'lake park' or use the park's name. Suggestion: match adverbs of frequency with correct tense and include articles. Grammar_problem_type_id":6

× So I study in library and I feel tired and I go out library and work around Lake Park.

✓ So I study in the library, and when I feel tired I go out of the library and walk around the lake park.

Missing articles 'the' before 'library'. 'Go out library' should be 'go out of the library'. 'Work' should be 'walk'. Capitalization of 'Lake Park' depends on proper noun; keep consistent. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific places and correct prepositional phrases. Grammar_problem_type_id":22

× It is very beneficial and I feel.

✓ It is very beneficial and I feel refreshed.

Sentence fragment 'and I feel.' is incomplete; add an adjective to complete the thought, e.g., 'refreshed' or 'relaxed'. Suggestion: complete fragments by supplying the expected complement. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]}},{