走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap doğal ancak biraz dağınık ve gereksiz tekrarlar var. Konuyu doğrudan cevapla, gereksiz ifadeleri çıkar ve sayısal detayı net bir cümlede ver. Bağlaçlar kullanarak sebepleri kısa ve mantıklı sıraya koy. Sözdizimini düzelt ve tekil/çoğul ile birim kullanımlarına dikkat et (2 kilometres yerine 2 kilometres).

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk about two kilometres a day because it helps me reduce stress and stay fit. For example, I often walk to nearby shops or around my neighborhood after work to clear my mind.

建議: Cevap açık ama dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi hataları var. Geçmiş zamana tutarlı kullan (used to, went), gereksiz tekrarları çıkar ve net neden ver. ‘Safe’ ve ‘underground’ kullanımını düzelt. Türkçede geçmişe yönelik nedenleri daha kısa cümlelerle ifade et.

範例: No, I didn't. When I was a child I usually took public transport because my family thought it was safer. For instance, we often used the metro to travel around the city, whereas now I prefer walking whenever possible.

建議: Cevap mantıklı fakat dil bilgisi hataları ve kelime tekrarları var. Fiil uyumunu düzelt (become → has become), daha doğal bağlaçlar kullan ve gereksiz resmî ifadeler yerine günlük kelimeler seç. Örnek veya kısa sonuç cümlesi ekle.

範例: People like walking in parks because it is an easy way to stay active and improve health. For example, many people walk in parks to manage their weight and reduce stress, which makes parks popular for families and seniors alike.

建議: Cevap karışık ve tutarsız; coğrafi yanlışlıklar ve tekrarlar var. ‘Chechnya’ genelde deniz kıyısıyla ilişkilendirilmez — doğru yer seçimi yap veya nedenini açıkla. Cümleleri kısalt ve duygusal sonucu net ifade et. Tekrarlardan kaçın ve modal yapılarını düzgün kullan (would like to, I would want to).

範例: If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk along a seaside promenade, for example on the coast of Amalfi. I would go alone with my dog because walking by the sea helps me relax and makes me feel more energetic.

建議: Cevap hem zaman hem miktar açısından çelişkili ve dil bilgisi hataları içeriyor. Günlük rutin ve son etkinliği ayrı cümlelerde açıkla, sayıları ve birimleri düzgün yaz (10 kilometres, 2 kilometres), ve parantezli bilgileri sadeleştir. Ayrıca kalori gibi detay verirken bağlam ekle (ör. tempoya bağlı olarak).

範例: Lately I have been trying to walk more than ten kilometres each day. Yesterday I walked about two kilometres with my family in Kansberg Park in Manila, which burned roughly 200 calories because we walked at a brisk pace.

× Walking is my favorite physical activity because it helps to reduce stress and lose weight.

✓ Walking is my favorite physical activity because it helps me reduce stress and lose weight.

The original sentence omits the object 'me' after 'helps', which reduces clarity. Use 'helps me reduce' to indicate who benefits. Also keeps present simple tense appropriate for habitual facts.

× Uh, in this way, I prefer walking when I go somewhere, and my answer is definitely yes.

✓ Uh, in this case, I prefer walking when I go somewhere, so my answer is definitely yes.

Use 'in this case' instead of 'in this way' to convey preference; 'so' connects the clauses more naturally. 'Prefer walking' is fine; no present participle change needed otherwise.

× I walk a lot in a day, approximately 2 kilometre walking alone.

✓ I walk a lot each day, approximately 2 kilometres by myself.

Use plural 'kilometres' with a numeric measure. 'In a day' is better as 'each day' and 'walking alone' should be 'by myself' for natural English.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Question is already past tense; change 'to have a walk' to the more natural 'for a walk'. No tense change required.

× Well, my answer is no.

✓ Well, my answer is no.

This sentence is acceptable as a response; no grammatical change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× When I was a child, I used to use public transportation when I go somewhere because it was very safety and uh, my family decided to go somewhere by underground.

✓ When I was a child, I used to take public transportation when I went somewhere because it was very safe, and my family decided to travel by the underground.

Use past tense 'went' to match 'used to'. 'Take public transportation' is idiomatic. 'Very safety' is incorrect; use adjective 'safe'. 'By underground' should be 'by the underground' or 'on the underground'.

× But nowadays I prefer to go somewhere with walking by walking.

✓ But nowadays I prefer to walk when I go somewhere.

Avoid redundant phrase 'with walking by walking'. Use 'prefer to walk' to express habitual present preference.

× I believe that walking in parks become more prevalent because a substantial number of people suffer from some health issues like obesity and when people go parks and do some physical activities, they can stay fit and they lose weight.

✓ I believe that walking in parks has become more prevalent because a substantial number of people suffer from health issues like obesity, and when people go to parks and do physical activities, they can stay fit and lose weight.

Use present perfect 'has become' to indicate change over time. Add 'to' in 'go to parks'. Remove 'some' before 'physical activities' for conciseness and remove extra 'they' before 'lose weight'.

× Therefore, walking in parks is essential and effectively.

✓ Therefore, walking in parks is essential and effective.

Use adjective 'effective' to describe 'walking in parks' rather than adverb 'effectively'.

× If I had a chance, probably I would go to Chechnya and I want to stay alone in there and I want to walk seaside with my dog because probably it's it makes me happy and I feel more, I feel more energetic.

✓ If I had the chance, I would probably go to Chechnya. I would like to be alone there and walk by the seaside with my dog because it would make me happy and I would feel more energetic.

Use correct conditional: 'If I had the chance, I would...' Maintain consistent conditional verbs ('would like', 'would make'). Use 'there' without 'in', 'by the seaside' is idiomatic, and remove repeated words. 'Probably' placed before the verb is more natural.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

In questions about the recent past, 'recently' is more natural than 'lately' in some varieties; both are acceptable. No tense change required. (Minor stylistic suggestion.)

× Actually, every day I try to walk over 10 kilometre and yesterday I went to a park with my family, which is Kansberg in Manila and I burned approximately 200 calories and I walked. 2 kilometre.

✓ Actually, every day I try to walk over 10 kilometres, and yesterday I went to a park with my family called Kansberg in Manila. I burned approximately 200 calories and walked 2 kilometres.

Use plural 'kilometres'. Combine clauses for fluency. 'Which is Kansberg' should be 'called Kansberg'. 'I walked. 2 kilometre.' should be 'walked 2 kilometres' as a single clause.