走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Улучшите ясность и грамматику, избегайте лишних пауз и повторов. Начните с чёткого основного предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 связных и конкретных примера. Исправьте формы (stay fit, relieve stress), используйте связки (for example, in the evening) и ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений.

範例: Yes, I walk quite a lot. I walk for exercise and to clear my mind after work. For example, I often walk to nearby shops or take a 30-minute walk in the evening to relieve stress and avoid sitting too long.

建議: Отвечайте прямо на вопрос в прошедшем времени и избегайте бессмысленных вставок. Дайте одно чёткое утверждение о детстве, затем одно конкретное воспоминание. Избегайте слов-паразитов (uh) и запутанных описаний.

範例: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. I used to go for walks in the park with my family, and sometimes I rode my bike with my mother when we went shopping.

建議: Дайте логичное и связное объяснение с чёткими причинами. Используйте связки (because, so, moreover) правильно и избегайте бессвязных фраз. Приводите конкретные причины (тишина, природа, отдых) и завершайте мысль грамматически правильно.

範例: People like walking in parks because they offer a peaceful escape from urban noise and help reduce stress. Moreover, being in nature and seeing trees and birds makes people feel relaxed and refreshed.

建議: Ответьте условно на заданный вопрос (If I had the chance...) и дайте конкретное место и причину. Устраните тавтологию и бессвязные слова. Постройте ответ в 1–2 предложениях с объяснением.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Gorky Park in Astana because it has wide paths and pleasant scenery, which makes it ideal for a relaxing stroll.

建議: Внимательно следите за временем: вопрос в прошедшем (did you go) требует ответа в прошедшем времени. Дайте конкретное недавнее пример и короткую причину. Избегайте смешения условного и прошедшего.

範例: I went for a walk in the city centre last weekend. I walked along the river and sat in a small café because the weather was nice.

× Yes, I work quite a lot, especially for tour, uh, journeys and the exercise walking helps me clear my mind and stay fits.

✓ Yes, I work quite a lot, especially on tours and journeys, and the exercise of walking helps me clear my mind and stay fit.

The student used the noun 'tour' incorrectly (should be plural or prefixed 'on') and the adjective 'fits' instead of the adjective 'fit'. Use 'on tours' or 'on tour' depending on meaning; here plural 'tours and journeys' is natural. 'Stay fit' is the correct adjective phrase; 'fits' is incorrect form. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to types of activities and use 'fit' for physical condition.

× For example, I often walk to nearby shops or take a 30 minutes walk in the evening to relive stress and avoid sitting.

✓ For example, I often walk to nearby shops or take a 30-minute walk in the evening to relieve stress and avoid sitting.

Incorrect verb form 'relive' was used instead of 'relieve'. Also '30 minutes walk' needs a hyphen and singular 'minute' as a compound adjective: '30-minute walk'. Use the present simple for habitual actions, and correct verb spelling 'relieve'.

× Uh, I wasn't a child. I often went outside. I used to go for walks in the park with the my family, uh, when so when shopping with my mother under route my bike around the neck bra bar hoods.

✓ When I was a child, I often went outside. I used to go for walks in the park with my family and go shopping with my mother.

Original sentences contain tense and structure confusion and many extraneous words. 'I wasn't a child' contradicts the question; correct is 'When I was a child'. 'Used to' expresses habitual past actions. Remove unintelligible fragments ('under route my bike around the neck bra bar hoods') and keep clear past-tense phrases. Suggestion: answer directly with coherent past-tense statements and avoid filler fragments.

× People enjoy walking in parking premiere because if offers peaceful except from urban noise and the stress being surrendered by granny helps them relax and clear their minds so moreover, walking in parks a lot in diving, the contacts with nature and the.

✓ People enjoy walking in parks because it offers a peaceful escape from urban noise and stress, and being surrounded by greenery helps them relax and clear their minds. Moreover, walking in parks provides contact with nature.

Many incorrect words and forms: 'parking premiere' should be 'parks'; 'if' should be 'it'; 'except' should be 'escape'; 'being surrendered by granny' should be 'being surrounded by greenery'; 'a lot in diving' is meaningless. Sentence structure needs simplification. Use singular/plural appropriately and correct vocabulary. Suggestion: use clear nouns ('parks', 'escape', 'greenery') and standard clause order.

× I I do go for a walk lately. Park park jutsu in Astana. I live in Astana.

✓ I have been going for walks lately in Park Jutsu in Astana. I live in Astana.

'I I do go for a walk lately' mixes present simple and adverb 'lately' which pairs with present perfect; use 'have been going' or 'have gone'. 'Park park jutsu' is repetition; proper noun capitalization 'Park Jutsu'. Suggestion: use present perfect for recent activities ('lately') and correct proper names.

× If I had chance, we would take a walk in the town.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a walk in town.

Conditional sentence missing article 'the' and mismatched subject 'we' (should match speaker 'I' unless speaker means others). Use 'in town' without 'the' for general place or 'in the town' if a specific town. Suggestion: ensure conditional clauses include necessary articles and consistent subjects.