走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use present simple), avoid repetition, and add one specific detail about when or why you walk using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I walk every day. It takes me about 20 minutes to walk to work because my office is very close to home. I find walking refreshing, and it helps me stay fit and calm before starting the day.

建議: Use past tense consistently and give a clear topic sentence. Avoid filler words and provide a specific example or memory to make your answer more vivid. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

範例: Yes, I often went for walks when I was a child. Because we lived near several parks, I used to visit the nearest one every afternoon to play with friends and ride my bicycle.

建議: Give a clear reason and support it with specific points. Avoid repetition and use linking words such as 'for example' or 'because' to structure your answer. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'greenery', 'fresh air', 'open space').

範例: People enjoy walking in parks because they offer fresh air and lots of greenery. For example, parks have wide open spaces and quiet paths where visitors can relax, exercise, or spend time with family.

建議: Answer with a clear conditional sentence and give specific reasons or details about the place. Remove hesitations and repeated phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'since' to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk to the large park near my home, which is about a fifty-minute walk away. I enjoy it because it has spacious trails and lively crowds on weekends, so the atmosphere feels safe and friendly.

建議: Use correct past tense and be concise. Give one or two specific details about what you saw or did to make the answer more concrete. Use linking words such as 'there' and 'and' correctly to improve coherence.

範例: I went for a walk today to a park about fifteen minutes from my home. It was peaceful and full of greenery, and many families were there enjoying picnics and playing with their children.

× Yes I do, I work every day 20 minutes.

✓ Yes I do. I walk every day for 20 minutes.

The original mixes 'work' instead of 'walk' and omits the preposition 'for' and has punctuation issues. Use present simple 'walk' for habitual action and add 'for 20 minutes' to express duration. Also separate clauses with a period.

× Uh I go everyday, do my work by walk because it's near my home and it takes me 20 minutes because I believe walk is beneficial for our health and mental peace.

✓ I go for a walk every day because it is near my home and it takes me 20 minutes. I believe walking is beneficial for our health and mental peace.

Use 'go for a walk' for the action and place 'every day' in correct order. Use 'it is' instead of contraction 'it's' in formal speech optionally, and use gerund 'walking' as the subject after 'believe'. Avoid repeating 'because' and split into two sentences for clarity.

× In my childhood day, I do, I did a lot of work, uh, because I was living in a place and there was a lot of park, uh, so I went every day to a park.

✓ In my childhood I did a lot of walking because I lived in a place that had many parks, so I went to a park every day.

Use past tense consistently: 'did', 'lived', 'had', 'went'. 'Childhood day' is incorrect; use 'In my childhood'. Use 'many parks' and correct word order to 'went to a park every day.'

× I believe people like the nature and we can enjoy the nature in the park very well and park has parks has a lot of space where we can enjoy the nature and enjoy.

✓ I believe people like nature, and we can enjoy it very well in parks. Parks have a lot of space where we can enjoy nature.

Do not use 'the' before 'nature' in general statements. Replace repeated and awkward phrases with pronoun 'it' and plural 'parks' for generalization. Remove repetition and ensure subject-verb agreement 'Parks have.'

× I would like to take a long walk to a park which is located near my home. It takes about 50 minutes, umm 50 minutes walk from my home. It is a big park where many families and children came on every weekend. I want to.

✓ I would like to take a long walk in a park that is located near my home. It takes about a 50-minute walk from my home. It is a big park where many families and children come every weekend.

Use 'in' or 'to' consistently; 'a 50-minute walk' requires hyphenation and article 'a'. Use present simple 'come' for habitual action 'every weekend', not past 'came'. Remove incomplete sentence 'I want to.'

× Today I go for a walk to a park which is located 15 minutes away from my home.

✓ Today I went for a walk to a park that is located 15 minutes away from my home.

The question asked 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' requiring past tense. Change present 'go' to past 'went' to match the question and time reference.

× This is a big park and where and where many families came on at the Beacons.

✓ It is a big park where many families come to relax on weekends.

The original is fragmented and contains repeated 'where' and 'on at the Beacons' which is unclear. Rephrase to a coherent clause 'where many families come to relax on weekends.' Use present simple for habitual action.

× It is a peaceful and we can enjoy the greenery over there.

✓ It is peaceful, and we can enjoy the greenery there.

'Omit the article before 'peaceful' when used as an adjective describing the place: 'It is peaceful.' Remove unnecessary 'over' and simplify to 'there.' Ensure proper punctuation between clauses.