走路— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to add one supporting detail. Fix verb forms and articles (e.g., “one of my favourite exercises”).

範例: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk to work every day and I also go for walks at the weekend, so walking is one of my favourite exercises.

建議: Provide a direct topic sentence, correct grammatical errors (singular/plural, tense), and use linking words for clarity. Avoid filler sounds like “umm” and give one specific example from childhood to support your statement.

範例: Yes, I often walked when I was a child because I grew up in a rural area of Thailand. For example, I walked to school every day since there was no regular public transport nearby.

建議: Correct subject-verb agreement and word choice, and organise ideas with linking words. Give two clear reasons with brief explanation or example, and avoid vague phrases like “unwise from busy days.”

範例: People like walking in parks because it is healthy and relaxing. For instance, a park walk reduces stress and is an easy form of exercise that improves fitness.

建議: Use a clear conditional sentence with correct singular/plural forms and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “calm down” instead of “wipe down”). Limit fillers and give one specific reason or detail about the park you would choose.

範例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a national park, because the quiet scenery would help me calm down after a busy week and improve my fitness.

建議: Answer directly in the past tense with correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary. Remove fillers and give a short specific detail about the walk (where exactly, what you did). Correct odd phrases like “walk along the points” and “did fit some ducks.”

範例: I recently went for a walk with my sons in the park near our house. We walked along the pond and fed some ducks, which made my youngest son very happy.

× As I work quite a lot on my daily routine because I had to, I have to walk to work and also on the weekend.

✓ Because I work a lot as part of my daily routine, I have to walk to work and also walk on weekends.

The original mixes past tense 'had to' with present-tense context and is awkwardly structured. Use present tense consistently ('work' and 'have to') and parallel verbs ('walk to work and walk on weekends'). Also reorder for clarity.'

× Walking is one of my favorite exercise actually.

✓ Walking is one of my favorite exercises, actually.

Countable noun 'exercise' needs plural 'exercises' when used after 'one of my'. Add a comma before 'actually' for natural phrasing.'

× As I grew up in a very rural areas in Thailand, I did walk a lot.

✓ As I grew up in a very rural area in Thailand, I walked a lot.

Use singular 'area' with 'a' and use simple past 'walked' rather than 'did walk' for normal past narration. Remove redundant 'did' unless adding emphasis.'

× We didn't have umm, proper transport, public transportation.

✓ We didn't have proper transport or public transportation.

Use 'or' to connect alternatives and remove extra comma. No article is needed before 'proper transport' in this general statement.'

× So if you want to go umm somewhere, mostly people walking.

✓ So if you wanted to go somewhere, most people walked.

Maintain past-tense narration ('wanted', 'walked') to match context. 'Mostly people walking' is not a complete clause; provide full verb form 'walked'. Alternatively, for present generality use 'if you want to go somewhere, most people walk.'

× I think people likes walking in parks because it's healthy, unwise from busy days and also helps them improve their physical health because it's one of the easy way for exercise.

✓ I think people like walking in parks because it's healthy, a good escape from busy days, and it helps them improve their physical health because it's one of the easy ways to exercise.

Use 'like' for plural subject 'people' (third person plural). Replace 'unwise' with 'a good escape' for intended meaning. 'One of the easy way' requires plural 'ways' and 'to exercise' is the correct infinitive phrase. Also add 'it' for clarity.'

× If I had a chance I would take a long walks in a national parks because this would help me to reduce my stress and wipe down after my busy days at work and also it would umm help me to boost my physical health in general.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a national park because this would help me reduce my stress and unwind after my busy days at work, and it would also help me boost my physical health in general.

Use 'the chance' (common idiom). 'Take a long walk' (singular) and 'in a national park' (singular). 'Wipe down' is incorrect for relaxing; use 'unwind'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help me' and place 'also' in correct position. Commas improve readability.'

× I just recently went for a walk with my sons at the parks near my house.

✓ I recently went for a walk with my sons in the park near my house.

Use 'recently' alone; 'just recently' is redundant. Use 'in the park' (singular) or 'at the parks' if multiple, but context implies one nearby park. 'Near my house' follows phrase. Both past simple 'went' is acceptable for a recent completed action.'

× We walk along the points.

✓ We walked along the paths.

Maintain past tense 'walked' to match prior sentence. 'Points' is incorrect; likely 'paths' or 'ponds' depending on meaning; 'paths' fits walking context. Use correct noun and verb form.'

× Uh, we did fit some ducks which he was very happy about it.

✓ We fed some ducks, which he was very happy about.

'Did fit' is incorrect; likely 'fed' (past tense of feed). Remove redundant 'it' after 'about'. Use a relative clause 'which he was very happy about' for clarity.'