阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and repetition, start with a clear topic sentence, and use concise supporting details. Aim for 2–4 sentences, use linking words (however, because, so) to connect ideas, and choose precise vocabulary (distracting, concentration) instead of filler. Also correct small grammatical slips (e.g., "I'm at a point" not "I'm up at a point").

範例: Yes, I used to be a real bookworm, but since social media became widespread I read much less. Because I now spend hours online, my concentration has dropped, so reading long texts feels difficult. However, I don't hate reading and hope to get back into it when I reduce my screen time.

建議: Be more concise and grammatical: open with a clear preference sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid fillers and repeated words. Use precise phrases like "more focused" and "distracting notifications".

範例: I prefer reading on paper. For example, I bought a physical book last week and found I was far more focused because my phone and web notifications on a screen kept interrupting me. So I finish more pages when I read print books.

建議: Organize the answer into a clear contrast: state the situations first, then explain why. Correct grammar ("I need to read carefully for educational books such as textbooks or lecture notes") and avoid hesitations. Give a specific example (e.g., studying for an exam) to make the point concrete.

範例: I read carefully for study materials, such as textbooks and lecture notes, because my grades depend on understanding the details. In contrast, I skim fiction for pleasure and focus only on scenes I find interesting, like dramatic moments or character development.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence then contrast both approaches. Eliminate repetitions and informal phrases ("wanna"). Use linking words (if, but, however) and be specific about when you scan versus when you read in detail. Provide a brief example of scanning strategy (headings, first and last sentences).

範例: It depends: I read in detail for textbooks and lecture notes because I need to remember facts for exams. However, for novels I often scan or skip slower passages and focus on key scenes or dialogues; for example, I read chapter summaries and the most dramatic chapters when I skim.

× Ah, yes, I used to enjoy reading.

✓ Ah, yes, I used to enjoy reading.

This sentence is correct; it uses the past habitual 'used to' to indicate a past habit. No change required.

× I used to be a bookworm, honestly, but then after social media became common, I, I saw, I, I started, I gradually started reading less and less and then eventually stopped.

✓ I used to be a bookworm, honestly, but after social media became common I gradually started reading less and less and eventually stopped.

Redundant fillers and repeated words disrupt sentence clarity. Remove repeated interjections ('I, I saw, I, I started, I') and extra conjunctions ('and then') to make a concise past-sequence description. Maintain past tense for events that happened in the past.

× Uh, so I'm up at a point where I'm, I now after spending hours and hours each day on social media, it's.

✓ I'm at a point now where after spending hours each day on social media, it's very hard for me to do anything that requires concentration.

Original has fragments and false starts; reconstruct sentence to include subject and verb and complete the thought. Ensure logical word order and remove stuttering. Use 'it's very hard for me to do' to express difficulty.

× So that's where I am right now.

✓ So that's where I am right now.

This sentence is grammatically correct as a brief statement of current status. No change required.

× I don't think I hate reading, but still, you know, anything is less much boring after social media.

✓ I don't think I hate reading, but things have become much less interesting since social media.

'Less much boring' is incorrect word order and choice. Use comparative structure 'much less interesting' or 'much less enjoyable' and 'since social media' to indicate cause/time. 'Anything' is too general; 'things' fits better.

× Right now, I would say I prefer on paper.

✓ Right now, I would say I prefer paper.

Use 'prefer X' without a preposition when referring to reading medium. 'On paper' is not wrong colloquially, but 'prefer paper' is more natural. Tense and meaning remain present.

× The reason is, uh, so recently, a week ago, I bought a physical book and I discovered that I was much concentrated and focused on when it's physical book, uh, because I was reading the same book on my screen, but I, I didn't finish.

✓ A week ago I bought a physical book and discovered that I was much more focused when reading the physical copy, because I had been reading the same book on my screen but didn't finish it.

Problems: filler words, incorrect adjective/adverb ('much concentrated' -> 'much more focused'), awkward clause order, and tense consistency. Use 'much more focused' and past perfect progressive or simple past to show earlier incomplete action ('had been reading' or 'was reading'). Place 'it' after 'didn't finish'.

× Book because there were too many, uh, attention, you know, too many attention seeking things on your screen.

✓ I didn't finish it because there were too many attention-seeking distractions on the screen.

Missing subject at start ('Book' fragment). Use a hyphenated compound adjective 'attention-seeking' and a clearer noun 'distractions'. Use definite/neutral determiner 'the screen' or 'my screen' instead of 'your screen' for consistency.

× So yeah.

✓ So yeah.

This conversational filler is acceptable as a short response; no grammatical correction needed.

× I need a three educational books like uh, educational textbooks, uh, or lecturers, uh, notes.

✓ I need to read three educational books such as textbooks or lecture notes.

Original has incorrect structure and unnecessary articles ('a three educational books') and wrong pluralization. Use 'to read three educational books' and 'lecture notes' (not 'lecturers notes'). 'Such as' or 'like' can introduce examples.

× I read those things carefully because most of the time I will be graded on that material.

✓ I read those things carefully because most of the time I am graded on that material.

Use present simple 'am graded' to express habitual or regular grading related to study materials. 'Will be graded' implies future and is less appropriate for habitual action.

× In contrast, I with fiction for, for.

✓ In contrast, I read fiction for the sole reason of pleasure.

Fragment and word order issues. Use 'I read fiction for the sole reason of pleasure' to express purpose. Remove repeated fillers.

× A sole reason of pleasure, so I don't pay close attention to the details.

✓ I read fiction solely for pleasure, so I don't pay close attention to the details.

'A sole reason of pleasure' is unnatural. Use 'solely for pleasure' and combine clauses for clarity.

× As I said above, it depends if it is lecture notes, textbooks I have to read detailed in detail if I wanna pass my exams.

✓ As I said, it depends: if it is lecture notes or textbooks, I have to read in detail if I want to pass my exams.

Problems: missing punctuation, incorrect word order ('read detailed in detail'), colloquial 'wanna' should be 'want to' in formal speech. Use 'read in detail' and insert 'or' between 'notes' and 'textbooks'.

× But yeah if it is fiction or.

✓ But if it is fiction, or similar books,

Fragment and trailing 'or.' Provide continuation to complete thought. 'Similar books' gives structure; original lacking object.

× Yeah, this kind of books I, I, I still read Italy, but sometimes I skip and just only read the most dramatic part.

✓ For this kind of book I still read it, but sometimes I skip parts and only read the most dramatic sections.

Errors: 'this kind of books' should be 'this kind of book' or 'these kinds of books'; repeated fillers, 'read Italy' is likely mispronunciation for 'read it', and 'just only' is redundant. Use plural 'sections' for parts. Maintain present habit tense.