阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, um, repetitions). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 brief supporting details using linking words. Use consistent verb forms and more precise vocabulary (e.g., "improves patience" not "level up your patience").

範例: Yes, I enjoy reading in my free time. For example, I often read comic books for relaxation and occasionally read fiction and literature to expand my knowledge and improve my patience.

建議: Give a direct clear preference sentence, then add 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Remove vague phrases and fillers. Use precise expressions like "easier on the eyes" or "more comfortable to hold."

範例: I prefer reading on paper because it feels more comfortable and is easier on my eyes. Also, paper allows me to flip pages and annotate easily, whereas screen reading often feels tiring and distracting.

建議: Answer both parts clearly with one sentence for each (when you need to read carefully and when not). Use linking words (for example, however) and give specific reasons. Avoid repetitions and unclear phrasing.

範例: I need to read carefully when studying or reading newspapers because I must understand facts and remember important information. However, I can read comic books more casually since they are mainly for entertainment.

建議: Give a concise direct answer then provide 1–2 clear reasons with linking words. Replace vague expressions like "enter in the vast realm" with concrete benefits (e.g., "understand concepts deeply"), and avoid filler words.

範例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand concepts deeply and remember information. For instance, when I study a topic in depth I can recall details better and form stronger opinions.

× I like reading whenever I get some time, I love to read comic books and sometimes I read fictional and literature books because I believe that reading books enriches your knowledge and gives us new information and it uh, it, it level up your patience.

✓ I like reading whenever I get some time. I love to read comic books and sometimes I read fiction and literature because I believe that reading books enriches our knowledge, give us new information, and level up our patience.

Errors: inconsistent verb forms and pronouns. 'Fictional' is an adjective; use the noun 'fiction'. 'Enriches your knowledge and gives us new information' mixes pronouns; use consistent 'our'. 'Gives' should be 'give' to agree with compound subject 'reading books' when recast, but here keep plural verbs for parallelism: 'enrich our knowledge, give us... and level up our patience'. Also punctuation: run-on sentence fixed into shorter sentences. Suggestion: use consistent pronouns, correct noun form 'fiction', and keep parallel verb forms in a list.

× Uh, it depends on however and whatever I'm reading, but I prefer to read on paper because it gives me a good vibe and helps me to read it properly and hold and helps me to hold easily.

✓ It depends on what I am reading, but I prefer to read on paper because it gives me a good feeling, helps me read properly, and is easier to hold.

Errors: 'depends on however and whatever' is unnatural; use 'depends on what'. 'Gives me a good vibe' is informal; use 'gives me a good feeling'. Redundant and incorrect use of 'helps me to read it properly and hold and helps me to hold easily' — simplify to parallel verbs 'helps me read properly, and is easier to hold'. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions and simplify redundant phrases for clarity.

× And I think, uh, on screen tape, uh, on screen reading is, uh, kind boring and tough for me to read, so I would.

✓ I think on-screen reading is kind of boring and difficult for me to read, so I prefer paper.

Errors: broken sentence and filler words create unclear structure. 'On screen tape' is incorrect; use 'on-screen reading'. 'Kind boring' should be 'kind of boring'. 'Tough for me to read' better as 'difficult for me to read'. The sentence ended abruptly 'so I would' — complete idea as 'so I prefer paper.' Suggestion: remove fillers, use hyphenated adjective 'on-screen', and complete the clause.

× I think whenever I'm reading, uh, my study related books and the newspapers, especially the news articles, I think I need to read carefully because it is too much important for me to gather some knowledge in my mind and what when to not It's I'd say it would be the comic books.

✓ When I read study-related books and newspapers, especially news articles, I need to read carefully because it is very important for me to learn. When I do not need to read carefully, I would say it is when I read comic books.

Errors: tense and phrasing problems and awkward expressions. 'Study related' should be hyphenated 'study-related'. 'Too much important' is ungrammatical; use 'very important'. 'To gather some knowledge in my mind' is wordy; use 'to learn'. Sentence 'and what when to not It's I'd say it would be the comic books' is jumbled; rephrase clearly: 'When I do not need to read carefully... comic books.' Suggestion: simplify sentences, correct adjective compounds, and use natural adverbs like 'very'.

× Uh, I would prefer, uh, detailed reading because it gives me the real knowledge and I can enter in the vast realm of knowledge.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it gives me real knowledge and allows me to enter the vast realm of knowledge.

Errors: unnecessary filler words and wrong preposition 'enter in' — use 'enter the realm' or 'enter into the realm' (more common 'enter the realm'). 'The real knowledge' should be 'real knowledge' (no article). Suggestion: remove fillers, use correct prepositions and articles.

× So it is important for me to read, uh, detailed reading because I want to remember and the full scenario. Uh, so that's why I prefer the details.

✓ So detailed reading is important for me because I want to remember the whole scenario. Therefore, I prefer detailed reading.

Errors: redundant and awkward phrasing ('read, detailed reading'), incorrect noun phrase 'the full scenario' should be 'the whole scenario', and 'I prefer the details' is vague — use 'I prefer detailed reading'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, choose correct determiners ('whole' instead of 'full' here), and make the final preference explicit.