阅读— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and register issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (genres, current book) using natural phrasing. Avoid overlong clauses and unnecessary words.

範例: Yes, I enjoy reading a lot. I have a small collection at home, mostly self-help books and romantic comedies. At the moment I'm halfway through A Game of Thrones and plan to buy the next book in the series.

建議: Clarify and correct sentence structure and vocabulary, keep it to two or three sentences, and use linking words (because, although) properly. Remove unclear fragments and be specific about distractions.

範例: I prefer reading on paper because I can concentrate better. When I read on a screen I'm tempted to check social media or messages, which distracts me from the book.

建議: Improve grammar and register, avoid colloquial fillers like 'literally' and unclear phrases like 'some nonsense.' Use contrasting linking words (especially, however) and give a clear example of what requires careful reading.

範例: I read carefully during exciting or intense sections, especially as the story approaches its climax, because I want to understand the characters' motives. However, I skim chapters that are repetitive or unimportant to the plot.

建議: Make your answer more concise and fix repetition and preposition errors. Use linking words (first, then) and give one specific example of what you check when scanning (blurb, first chapter, reviews).

範例: I usually scan a book first to decide if it's worth buying. For example, I read the blurb and the first chapter to get a sense of the plot, and if I like it I'll do a detailed read afterwards.

× I am actually a keen reader and in fact I have a collection of books in my home, mostly our self help books and ROM com novels as of now.

✓ I am actually a keen reader and in fact I have a collection of books at home, mostly our self-help books and rom-com novels at the moment.

Plural forms were mostly correct, but 'in my home' is more naturally 'at home' and 'as of now' is awkward; use 'at the moment'. Also 'self help' should be hyphenated 'self-help' and 'ROM com' is better written 'rom-com'. These are usage and style improvements to match natural English. ID:1

× I am currently reading the Game of Thrones and I'm halfway through and planning to buy another one.

✓ I am currently reading A Game of Thrones and I'm halfway through it and planning to buy another book.

Tense is present continuous which is fine, but reference clarity needed: say 'A Game of Thrones' or the specific title; include object pronoun 'it' after 'halfway through' and specify 'another book' to avoid ambiguity. This fixes sentence structure and clarity. ID:6

× It's preferable for me to read on paper rather than screen because on paper I can solely focus on what I'm reading.

✓ It's preferable for me to read on paper rather than on a screen because on paper I can focus solely on what I'm reading.

Omitted article before 'screen' and awkward adverb placement. Use 'on a screen' and place 'solely' after the verb for natural adverb order: 'focus solely on'. This addresses article use and adverb placement. ID:17

× On the other hand, if I'm reading on the screen, I might attempt to go on social media and check for D.

✓ On the other hand, if I'm reading on a screen, I might be tempted to go on social media and check notifications.

Original had unclear phrase 'check for D' and used 'attempt' incorrectly. 'Be tempted to' is the correct collocation for this idea. Also change 'on the screen' to 'on a screen'. This fixes sentence structure and word choice. ID:26

× It's for messages and updates from my friends will that just keeps me distracted from my goal of reading.

✓ Messages and updates from my friends just keep me distracted from my goal of reading.

Original contained extra words and wrong verb agreement: 'will that just keeps' is ungrammatical. Remove filler words and use plural verb 'keep' to agree with plural subject 'messages and updates'. This fixes pronoun/structure and subject-verb agreement. ID:12

× I get focused on the book I'm reading when the exciting or the intense part is coming up, especially when it reached its climax.

✓ I get focused on the book I'm reading when an exciting or intense part is coming up, especially when it reaches its climax.

Tense and article issues: use 'an exciting or intense part' and keep present tense consistently ('is coming up' and 'reaches'). 'Reached' (past) conflicts with present continuous. This corrects tense consistency. ID:6

× I would literally should dive in into the book to immerse myself more in what's happening.

✓ I would literally dive into the book to immerse myself more in what's happening.

Two modal-like verbs 'would' and 'should' cannot be stacked; choose one. 'Literally' is optional but kept; 'dive into' is the correct phrasal verb (remove extra 'in'). This fixes modal verb misuse and preposition usage. ID:4

× And I don't really pay much attention when it's some nonsense.

✓ And I don't really pay much attention when it's nonsense.

'Some nonsense' is informal and slightly awkward here; 'it's nonsense' is clearer. This simplifies pronoun and noun usage for natural expression. ID:12

× Well, I do scan the book first before purchasing it or before reading it because I need to know whether the book is worth reading or not.

✓ Well, I scan a book first before purchasing it or before reading it because I need to know whether the book is worth reading.

'Do scan' is unnecessary; simple present 'scan' is natural for habitual actions. Also remove redundant 'or not' at the end. This corrects unnecessary auxiliary use and refines tense. ID:8

× So before going to detail reading, I scan it first for further examination for for me to know the plot and for me to know what to expect.

✓ So before doing detailed reading, I scan it first for further examination to learn the plot and to know what to expect.

Incorrect phrase 'going to detail reading' should be 'doing detailed reading'. Remove duplicate 'for', use 'to learn'/'to know' for purpose, and avoid repeating 'for me'. This fixes preposition and phrase choice errors. ID:11}]}