爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời có nêu được một số sở thích, nhưng phần mở đầu “I am happy” không trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi. Cấu trúc câu và dạng động từ còn nhiều lỗi, chẳng hạn “listen music” nên là “listen to music”, “I usually are reading” nên là “I usually read”, và “listening with my friend” nên diễn đạt rõ là “listening to music with my friends”. Bạn nên chọn 1–2 sở thích chính, sau đó giải thích khi nào hoặc với ai bạn thực hiện chúng. Hạn chế từ đệm như “uh” và tránh liệt kê quá nhiều ý chưa hoàn chỉnh.

範例: Yes, I have a few hobbies, especially reading books and listening to music. I usually read in the evening because it helps me relax after a busy day. I also enjoy listening to music with my friends and family at the weekend.

建議: Bạn đã trả lời đúng chủ đề và đưa ra lý do, nhưng câu mở đầu không tự nhiên và bị lặp ý “watching movie”/“watch a movie”. Hãy dùng thì quá khứ đơn vì câu hỏi hỏi về thời thơ ấu: “When I was a child, I usually watched movies.” Cần sửa “a movie” thành “movies” khi nói chung, “relaxes” thành “relaxed”, và “interesting” thành “interesting” nhưng phải đặt trong cấu trúc đúng, ví dụ “I found them interesting”. Nên thêm một chi tiết cụ thể như thể loại phim hoặc thời điểm bạn xem.

範例: Yes, when I was a child, I often watched movies in my free time. I particularly enjoyed animated films because they were entertaining and helped me relax. I usually watched them with my brother at the weekend.

建議: Bạn có đưa ra được một sở thích, nhưng câu trả lời chưa nói rõ sở thích đó đã tồn tại từ thời thơ ấu và phần cuối không rõ nghĩa. Hãy mở đầu trực tiếp bằng “Yes, I have” và sử dụng cụm đúng “listening to music”, không phải “listening music”. Bạn nên giải thích sở thích này bắt đầu từ khi nào, vì sao bạn vẫn duy trì, và có thể nêu ca sĩ hoặc thể loại nhạc yêu thích. Tránh lặp từ “family” và giảm các từ đệm để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed listening to music since I was a child. I started this hobby because my parents often played music at home. I still listen to Vietnamese pop, especially songs by M-TP, when I want to relax.

建議: Bạn đã thể hiện ý “không”, nhưng câu trả lời chưa rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi về từ vựng, ngữ pháp. “I don't seem happy as family” không phù hợp; nên nói “No, my hobbies are different from those of my family members.” Cần dùng “listen to music” và “watch movies”, đồng thời tránh lặp “parents with my parents”. Hãy nêu sự tương phản cụ thể: bạn thích nghe nhạc và xem phim, còn cha mẹ thích làm gì; có thể dùng từ nối “while” hoặc “whereas” để liên kết hai ý.

範例: No, my hobbies are quite different from those of my family members. I enjoy listening to music and watching movies, whereas my parents prefer gardening and cooking. However, we sometimes watch films together because it is a good way to spend time as a family.

× reading books, listen music, uh, dancing

✓ reading books, listening to music, and dancing

The items in this list should use parallel grammatical forms. Because reading and dancing are in the -ing form, listen should also be listening.

× reading books, listen music, uh, dancing

✓ reading books, listening to music, and dancing

The verb listen is followed by the preposition to when referring to something that a person hears. The correct phrase is listening to music.

× I usually are reading books and listening with my friend and family.

✓ I usually read books and listen to music with my friends and family.

The subject I takes the verb form read, not are. Are is used with plural subjects or you, we, and they.

× I usually are reading books and listening with my friend and family.

✓ I usually read books and listen to music with my friends and family.

The adverb usually describes a regular habit, so the simple present tense is more appropriate than the present continuous. Use read and listen for habitual activities.

× I usually are reading books and listening with my friend and family.

✓ I usually read books and listen to music with my friends and family.

Listen requires the preposition to before the thing being heard. Also, with correctly shows the people who participate in the activity.

× A child who's I usually watching movie because I feel comfortable and relaxes and interesting.

✓ When I was a child, I usually watched movies because they made me feel comfortable, relaxed, and interested.

The original sentence has an incorrect clause structure and does not clearly connect the time expression with the main clause. Use When I was a child to introduce the past situation, followed by a complete main clause.

× A child who's I usually watching movie because I feel comfortable and relaxes and interesting.

✓ When I was a child, I usually watched movies because they made me feel comfortable, relaxed, and interested.

The question asks about childhood, which is a finished period in the past. Therefore, use the past-tense verb watched instead of watching.

× A child who's I usually watching movie because I feel comfortable and relaxes and interesting.

✓ When I was a child, I usually watched movies because they made me feel comfortable, relaxed, and interested.

Comfortable, relaxed, and interested are adjectives that describe a person’s feelings. Relaxes is a verb, and interesting describes something that creates interest, not the person who feels interested.

× A child who's I usually watching movie because I feel comfortable and relaxes and interesting.

✓ When I was a child, I usually watched movies because they made me feel comfortable, relaxed, and interested.

Movies are being discussed as a general hobby, so the plural form movies is more natural than the singular form movie.

× Therefore I usually watch a movie.

✓ Therefore, I usually watched movies.

Because the answer refers to a hobby during childhood, the verb should be in the past tense. Use watched instead of watch.

× Therefore I usually watch a movie.

✓ Therefore, I usually watched movies.

When talking about watching movies as a repeated childhood activity, use the plural form movies rather than a movie.

× I think uh have a hobby is listening, listening music.

✓ I think my hobby is listening to music.

The original sentence is missing the possessive determiner my and has an incorrect clause structure. The complete pattern is My hobby is followed by a noun or gerund phrase.

× I think uh have a hobby is listening, listening music.

✓ I think my hobby is listening to music.

The verb listen must be followed by to before the activity or thing being heard. The correct phrase is listening to music.

× I like uh, listening music with uh, family and family

✓ I like listening to music with my family.

Use listen to music, not listen music. The possessive determiner my is also needed before family.

× I like uh, listening music with uh, family and family

✓ I like listening to music with my family.

The sentence contains repeated and incomplete phrases. Use the clear structure I like plus a gerund phrase, such as I like listening to music.

× No, I don't seem happy as family because uh, parents with my parents

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family because my parents

The expression for comparing identical things is the same as, not seem happy as. The comparison should be between my hobbies and my family’s hobbies.

× don't like listening music and watching movie

✓ don't like listening to music or watching movies

Listen requires to before music. The plural form movies is more natural when referring to the activity in general.

× don't like listening music and watching movie

✓ don't like listening to music or watching movies

After a negative verb such as do not like, or is normally used to connect alternatives. The sentence means that the parents do not like either activity.

× therefore I don't happy

✓ Therefore, I do not share the same hobbies as them.

Happy is an adjective and cannot be used directly after do not to express possession of a hobby. Use a complete verb phrase such as do not share the same hobbies.

× No, I don't seem happy as family because uh, parents with my parents, uh, don't like listening music and watching movie, therefore I don't happy.

✓ No, I do not have the same hobbies as my family because my parents do not like listening to music or watching movies. Therefore, I do not share the same hobbies as them.

The original response combines several incomplete and unclear clauses. Dividing it into two complete sentences makes the reason and conclusion clear.