爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 答えをより自然で簡潔にするために、主語と動詞の一致、冗長な表現の削減、具体的な情報の追加（どんなジャズか、どのアーティストか、どのように気分が変わるか）に注意してください。例えば、”make me feel fun”は不自然なので“make me feel happy”や“energised”などを使い、文を2〜3文にまとめて流れを良くしましょう。接続語（for example, also）を使って論理を明確にしてください。

範例: I enjoy listening to jazz, especially classic jazz vocalists like Ella Fitzgerald, because their music energises me and lifts my mood. I also watch music videos occasionally to relax and discover new artists.

建議: 過去の習慣について述べる際は時制を一貫させ、理由を明確に伝えましょう。例えば“kept in shape”など過去形に統一し、“However”の使い方を整理して、現在と過去の違い（昔は好きだったが今は暑さで行かない等）をはっきりさせると良いです。具体的なエピソード（誰と、どのくらいの頻度で）を加えると高得点につながります。

範例: When I was a child, I often played soccer with my friends in the park, which helped me stay fit and feel energetic. Nowadays I rarely go out to play because it gets too hot during the day.

建議: 現在完了形（have had）や現在形を適切に使い、表現の自然さを高めましょう。“make me feel fun”は不自然なので“make me happy”や“excited”を使ってください。また、理由や具体例（好きなチーム、試合の雰囲気、思い出）を加えて内容を豊かにし、接続語で文章をつなぐと効果的です。

範例: I've enjoyed watching baseball since I was a child because the games are exciting and lively. I especially love going to the stadium with my family to cheer for our favourite team.

建議: 発音と文の明瞭さに注意し、タイプミスや不要な語句を省いてください（例："why matches"は意味不明、"ha very happy"は誤り）。一文目で直接答え、その後で理由や具体例（どのような雰囲気か、どのくらいの頻度で行くか）を述べ、接続語で流れをつなぎましょう。感情表現は具体的な言葉（happy→thrilled, excited）に置き換えると良いです。

範例: Yes, my family and I often go to the stadium together to watch matches. The atmosphere is thrilling and we always enjoy cheering together, which makes me feel very happy.

× Yes, my hobby is I listen to music because I'm a big fan of jazz idols which makes me feel fun and energetic.

✓ Yes, my hobby is listening to music because I'm a big fan of jazz idols, which makes me feel happy and energetic.

'My hobby is I listen to music' is incorrect. After 'My hobby is' we need a noun or gerund phrase: 'listening to music' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also 'feel fun' is not natural; use 'feel happy' or 'enjoy myself'. Use a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which makes me...' and ensure adjective 'happy' describes feelings. Suggestions: replace 'I listen to music' with 'listening to music' and 'feel fun' with 'feel happy' or 'enjoy myself'.

× I also like watching music videos because it makes me fun and feel relaxed.

✓ I also like watching music videos because they make me feel happy and relaxed.

Subject mismatch and verb form: 'it makes me fun' is incorrect (Grammar Problem Type 8) and 'it' does not correctly refer to plural 'music videos'. Use 'they make me feel' and 'feel happy' rather than 'feel fun'. Suggestions: use correct pronoun 'they' for plural and 'feel happy'/'enjoy myself' for natural expression.

× When I was a child, I enjoyed playing sports with my friends in the park, especially soccer because it made me more energetic and keep in shape.

✓ When I was a child, I enjoyed playing sports with my friends in the park, especially soccer, because it made me more energetic and kept me in shape.

After describing past time ('When I was a child', 'enjoyed'), verbs referring to that time should be past tense (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'keep in shape' should be 'kept me in shape' to match past tense and include object 'me'. Suggestions: make verbs consistent in past tense and include objects where needed.

× However, I don't like going out because it is too hot outside and it is difficult to play.

✓ However, I don't like going out because it is too hot outside and it's difficult to play.

This sentence is mostly correct but 'it is' contraction preferred for natural speech; no major grammar type from list except present tense (Grammar Problem Type 6) which is already correct. Adjusted for naturalness. Suggestions: use contracted form 'it's' for spoken style.

× Since childhood, I loved watching baseball games because it makes me feel fun and more energetic.

✓ Since childhood, I have loved watching baseball games because they make me feel happy and more energetic.

'Since childhood' indicates an action continuing to present, so present perfect is required (Grammar Problem Type 8 and 6 interplay). Use 'have loved' not simple past 'loved'. Also 'it makes me' should be 'they make me' ('baseball games' plural) and 'feel fun' should be 'feel happy'. Suggestions: use present perfect with 'since' and correct pronoun and adjective.

× Also, I like going to the stadium with my family, which makes me even more fun.

✓ Also, I like going to the stadium with my family, which makes it even more fun.

'Which makes me even more fun' incorrectly suggests the speaker becomes entertaining. The intended meaning is the experience is more fun, so use 'it' as the subject (Grammar Problem Type 8). Suggestions: change 'me' to 'it' to refer to the activity/experience.

× Yes, I often go to the stadium with my family to watch why matches.

✓ Yes, I often go to the stadium with my family to watch live matches.

'watch why matches' is ungrammatical—likely a mishearing or typo. This is a sentence structure/word choice error (Grammar Problem Type 26). Replace with 'watch live matches' or 'watch matches'. Suggestions: use the correct noun phrase 'live matches' or simply 'matches'.

× It's exciting and the atmosphere and makes me feel ha very happy, especially when we cheer together.

✓ It's exciting, and the atmosphere makes me feel very happy, especially when we cheer together.

This sentence has extra conjunctions and a typo 'ha'. The structure should be 'It's exciting, and the atmosphere makes me feel very happy' (Grammar Problem Type 26). Remove the extra 'and' and fix 'very'. Suggestions: streamline the sentence by removing the redundant 'and' and correcting typos; ensure subject 'the atmosphere' matches verb 'makes'.