爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct word choice; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct vocabulary errors (e.g., 'envines' → 'energizes' or remove), and finish your example. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: I enjoy singing and listening to music in my free time. It relaxes me after work and helps me recharge; for example, I often listen to pop music when I feel tired or stressed. Sometimes I practice singing for an hour each evening to improve my technique.

建議: Give a clear, chronological answer with accurate tense and avoid repetition. State when you started, what you did, and a specific benefit. Use linking words like 'when' or 'since' and correct grammar (e.g., 'I have been taking lessons for four years out of a six-year program'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes. I started music lessons when I was seven and have been learning ever since. I am currently in the fourth year of a six-year program, which has helped me learn new techniques and improve my singing.

建議: Avoid repeating earlier points; answer directly and give one specific example of a childhood activity and a recent achievement. Use correct verb forms and linking words like 'and' or 'so'. Limit to 2–3 sentences and be specific about 'big platforms' (name or type).

範例: Yes, I have been involved in music since childhood and have performed regularly. For example, I recently sang at a regional music festival and received positive feedback from the audience, which encouraged me to keep performing on larger stages.

建議: Be polite and precise. Start with a direct answer, then briefly explain the difference and give a reason or example. Avoid filler words like 'yeah' and 'sort of'. Use 2–3 clear sentences.

範例: No, my family and I have different interests. My family members prefer sports, whereas I enjoy music, so I spend my free time practicing and attending concerts while they play football or go to the gym.

× I really love singing and listening to music because it envines me and relaxes me and I think I love that because it relaxes me and I usually do it in my free time after my work.

✓ I really love singing and listening to music because it energizes me and relaxes me, and I usually do it in my free time after work.

The original sentence used the nonstandard word 'envines' which is incorrect; 'energizes' conveys the intended meaning. The sentence was also repetitive ('I think I love that because it relaxes me') so it was streamlined to avoid redundancy. Combine clauses with commas and conjunctions for clarity and remove unnecessary words like 'my' before 'work' when speaking generally.

× For example, I often listen to pop music whenever I am just not feeling

✓ For example, I often listen to pop music whenever I am not feeling well.

The sentence ended abruptly and omitted the complement 'well'. Use the present simple 'am not feeling well' to express current habitual reactions. 'Just' was unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× I loved singing and listening to music since my childhood and when I was a child I started my lessons then only and now I'm in the fourth year and actually there are totals six years and I'm in the fourth year, so I think the degree will help me polish my skills and learn me new techniques.

✓ I have loved singing and listening to music since my childhood. I started lessons when I was a child, and now I'm in my fourth year of a six-year program, so I think the degree will help me polish my skills and teach me new techniques.

Use present perfect ('have loved') to express a feeling that began in the past and continues now. 'Since my childhood' requires a perfect tense. 'Started my lessons then only' is unclear; rephrase to 'started lessons when I was a child'. 'There are totals six years' is incorrect; use 'a six-year program'. 'Learn me' is incorrect verb usage; use 'teach me' or 'help me learn'. Grammar types involved: present tense usage and incorrect use of verbs/adjectives.

× As I have already told that I am really into music, so I just learned music since my childhood and doing many performances since then and now I just go to big platforms to sing and many people love my singing and my voice.

✓ As I mentioned, I have been into music since childhood. I learned music from a young age and have been performing since then. Now I sing on large platforms, and many people enjoy my singing and my voice.

Use present perfect ('have been into') to indicate a continuing state from the past to present. 'Just learned music since my childhood' mixes tenses; rephrase to 'learned music from a young age' and use present perfect continuous ('have been performing') or present perfect to show ongoing activity. 'Big platforms' is colloquial; 'large platforms' is clearer. Sentence fragments were combined into complete sentences for clarity.

× Absolutely not because none of my family members like to learn music but yeah I love and my family members are really into sports but I am not into sports because I don't like that thing sort of and yeah.

✓ Absolutely not. None of my family members like to study music; they are really into sports. I don't like sports, so I'm not interested in them.

The original had run-on clauses and unclear pronoun references ('that thing sort of'). 'Like to learn music' is unnatural; use 'study music'. Break into shorter sentences and use clear pronouns ('they' to refer to family members). Remove filler words ('yeah','sort of') for formality and clarity.