爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific hobbies with brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler phrases like 'you know' and 'maybe'.

範例: I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy travelling because it lets me explore new cultures, and I also like photography to capture memories. In addition, I play tennis and go hiking to stay fit and relax.

建議: Correct grammatical errors and give clearer, specific details. Begin with a topic sentence, then explain activities and what you enjoyed about them. Use linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes. As a child I took piano lessons arranged by my mother, so I practised the piano regularly. I also enjoyed drawing; for instance, I often drew flowers, trees and sunny scenes because they made me happy.

建議: State the hobby clearly and explain with a specific example. Eliminate hesitations and improve grammar (use 'taken photos' or 'photography'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

範例: Yes, I have practised photography since I was young. I like taking photos because they preserve happy memories; for example, I often photograph family gatherings so I can remember those moments later.

建議: Answer directly and organize with a topic sentence, then contrast or give specifics. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., 'go to the park', 'enjoy sports'). Use linking words like 'also' and 'because'.

範例: Yes, we share similar interests. For instance, my father goes to the park to exercise, and my mother and sister also enjoy various sports. We all value an active lifestyle because exercising helps us stay healthy and reduces stress.

× I always travel, go around and maybe like take photos.

✓ I always travel, go around and maybe like taking photos.

The verb 'like' followed by another verb should use the gerund form (verb + -ing) when expressing general preferences. Use 'like taking photos' rather than 'like take photos' to be grammatically correct. Suggestion: after verbs of liking/disliking use the -ing form (e.g., 'I enjoy taking photos').

× And I love any sports, maybe play tennis or go hiking.

✓ And I love all kinds of sports; maybe I play tennis or go hiking.

The phrase 'any sports' is unnatural here; 'all kinds of sports' or 'many sports' is appropriate to express general liking. Also include a subject for the verbs 'play' and 'go' to make the clauses complete. Suggestion: use natural quantifiers ('all kinds of', 'many') and include subjects ('I play').

× So I think hobby always make me very happy and I think it's meaningful things for me.

✓ So I think hobbies always make me very happy, and I think they're meaningful to me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'hobby' singular with 'make' is incorrect; either pluralize the subject ('hobbies') or change the verb ('makes'). Also 'meaningful things' is a plural noun phrase; using a pronoun agreement and a smoother preposition 'to me' is preferable. Suggestion: match singular/plural and verbs, and use 'meaningful to me.'

× my mom gave a license piano lesson.

✓ my mom gave me piano lessons.

The original phrase 'gave a license piano lesson' is incorrect and unidiomatic. Likely intended meaning is that the mother arranged or gave piano lessons to the child. Use 'gave me piano lessons' or 'signed me up for piano lessons.' Suggestion: use common collocations ('piano lessons', 'gave me lessons', 'signed me up for lessons').

× So I always play piano and I like drawing picture.

✓ So I always play the piano and I like drawing pictures.

When referring to musical instruments, use the definite article 'the' ('play the piano'). 'Drawing picture' needs plural 'pictures' or 'drawing pictures' as the gerund plus plural noun. Suggestion: 'I like drawing pictures' or 'I enjoy drawing.'

× I can draw some flower tree clothes for sun.

✓ I can draw some flowers, trees, clothes, and the sun.

The original sentence lumps nouns without proper articles or separators and uses 'for sun' incorrectly. Listing items requires commas and correct plural forms: 'flowers', 'trees', 'clothes', and 'the sun.' Suggestion: separate items with commas and use correct nouns/articles. Note: If meaning was 'draw clothes for the sun' clarify intent; assumed listing of drawing subjects.

× I always have a habit is take photo.

✓ I always have a habit of taking photos.

After 'habit of' use the gerund form 'taking.' The structure 'have a habit is take' is grammatically incorrect. Suggestion: use 'have a habit of taking photos' or 'I always take photos.'

× I think take photo is very meaningful things.

✓ I think taking photos is very meaningful.

Use the gerund 'taking' to make the clause a noun phrase. 'Things' is unnecessary; 'meaningful' alone suffices. Suggestion: 'Taking photos is very meaningful.'

× For example, if you have a very, uh, happy moment and you don't want to forget it, maybe you can take photo and remember.

✓ For example, if you have a very happy moment and you don't want to forget it, you can take a photo to remember it.

Use 'a photo' (count noun requires article) and include 'it' after 'remember' to show what is being remembered. Also remove filler 'uh' in formal correction. Suggestion: use 'take a photo to remember it.'

× my father always go work in the park or do some sports and my mom and my sister always do some sports because I think it's very healthy lifestyle and do some sports always make me relax my mind.

✓ My father always goes to work in the park or does some sports, and my mom and my sister always do some sports because I think it's a very healthy lifestyle, and doing sports always relaxes my mind.

Subject-verb agreement: third person singular subjects require verbs with -s ('father goes', 'does'). Also add preposition 'to' in 'go to work' and article 'a' in 'a very healthy lifestyle.' Replace 'do some sports always make me relax my mind' with 'doing sports always relaxes my mind' to use gerund as subject and correct verb agreement. Suggestion: ensure third person verbs have -s, include necessary prepositions/articles, and use gerund subjects when appropriate.