爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (when, how often, what you enjoy). Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I enjoy playing the guitar in my free time. After school or once I finish my assignments, I usually practise for about 30–60 minutes. I like listening to different styles of music while I play because it helps me learn new techniques and stay motivated.

建議: Give a direct answer with clear reasons and specific details. Avoid unclear references and grammar errors. Use past tense consistently for childhood activities and a linking word to explain why you enjoyed it.

範例: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed playing soccer. I wanted to become a soccer player and I practised regularly at school and with friends. I also liked the social aspect because it helped me make friends and stay active.

建議: Answer directly and clearly: state the hobby and how long you've had it, then give one or two specific supporting details (who encouraged you, how often you practise). Remove fillers and finish sentences fully.

範例: Yes, I have played the guitar since I was a child because my mother bought one for my birthday. Since then I have practised regularly during free time, and sometimes my father and I play together which helps me improve.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting detail about how you share the hobby (e.g., practise together, teach each other, perform). Avoid unfinished sentences and filler words.

範例: Yes, my father and I both play the guitar and have done so since we were young. We often practise together, exchange tips on technique, and play songs we both enjoy, which makes learning more fun.

× Yes I do have my hobbies, it's guitar so whenever I have my time after school or I put my efforts on studying and assignments, I do play guitars and like enjoying like listening to music while playing guitar.

✓ Yes, I do have a hobby; it's the guitar. Whenever I have free time after school or finish my studying and assignments, I play the guitar and enjoy listening to music while I play.

Errors: incorrect use of plural 'hobbies' vs 'hobby' (only one mentioned), 'it's guitar' missing article, 'play guitars' incorrect plural, awkward 'like enjoying like listening' and wrong participle use. Grammar problem type 10 (Verb in the present participle form) applies because 'enjoying' is used incorrectly with 'like' and the gerund structure is awkward. Suggestions: use singular 'hobby' when mentioning one item; include the definite/indefinite article 'the' or 'a' before 'guitar' depending on context; use 'play the guitar' (singular instrument) not 'play guitars'; replace 'like enjoying like listening' with 'enjoy listening' and keep parallel structure 'I play the guitar and enjoy listening to music while I play.'

× Back in the days when I was young, I like to play soccer because at the time I wanted to become a soccer player due to the social medias and I wanted to get constant focus with my children. I I love because.

✓ Back in the day when I was young, I liked to play soccer because at the time I wanted to become a soccer player due to social media, and I wanted to stay focused with my teammates.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('like' present used with past context), incorrect phrase 'back in the days' should be 'back in the day', 'social medias' incorrect plural and article, confusing clause 'get constant focus with my children' and repeated 'I I love because' is incomplete. Grammar problem type 5 (Past tense issue) applies because the sentence describes past habits but uses present tense 'like'. Suggestions: use past tense 'liked' for past habits; use singular 'social media' or 'social medias' is incorrect; replace unclear phrase with 'stay focused with my teammates' or clarify intended meaning; remove the fragment 'I I love because.'

× Yes, as I mentioned before, umm since I was young, I've played guitar whenever I'm free as my mother bought the guitar in my childhood and my birthday, so it was really accessible for me to play it uh, because it's.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned before, since I was young I have played the guitar whenever I am free because my mother bought a guitar for me when I was a child and on my birthday, so it was very easy for me to access it.

Errors: tense and aspect issues ('I've played' with 'whenever I'm free' is acceptable but awkward), article errors ('played guitar' should be 'played the guitar' or 'played guitar' consistently), unclear time phrases 'in my childhood and my birthday', sentence fragment ending with 'because it's.' Grammar problem type 6 (Present tense issue) applies because present simple 'I'm free' mixes with present perfect improperly and causes awkwardness. Suggestions: use present perfect 'have played the guitar' with clear time markers, include articles ('the guitar' or 'a guitar'), rephrase 'my mother bought a guitar for me when I was a child and on my birthday' to clarify whether one or two events occurred, and complete the sentence without trailing fragments.

× Yes, I have same hobbies as my dad does, we both play guitar since we were young and we share our umm playing styles and the music we listen to while we play the guitar so it's really great to make up with my.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobbies as my dad. We both have played the guitar since we were young, and we share our playing styles and the music we listen to while we play, so it's really great to bond with him.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'same hobbies', unnecessary 'does' after 'dad', 'play guitar' requires article 'the' or 'the guitar' for consistency, awkward phrase 'make up with my' and incorrect pronoun. Grammar problem type 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns) applies because 'my' is incomplete and the referent is unclear. Suggestions: add 'the' before 'same hobbies', remove unnecessary auxiliary 'does', use 'have played the guitar' for duration, and replace 'make up with my' with 'bond with him' or 'connect with my dad' to correctly reference the family member.