爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a direct, concise topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then briefly expand with one specific detail for each hobby using linking words. Avoid listing with commas and improve grammar (use plural/singular correctly and parallel structure).

範例: I have several hobbies, such as reading novels, watching documentaries on television, and walking my dog. For example, I usually read fiction in the evenings to relax, I enjoy nature documentaries on weekends, and I take my dog for a long walk every morning to keep both of us active.

建議: Answer with past tense consistently and start with a clear topic sentence about the childhood hobby. Use linking words to provide a short specific example and avoid redundant phrasing. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., 'my mum gave me').

範例: Yes, I loved drawing when I was a child. My mum gave me coloring books and a box of crayons, so I spent hours sketching and filling pages with bright pictures, which helped me develop creativity early on.

建議: Start with a clear affirmative sentence and then add a concise contrast using linking words (e.g., 'although' or 'but'). Be specific about how genres changed and give a brief reason or example to make the answer richer.

範例: Yes, reading is a hobby I've had since childhood. Although I used to enjoy picture books and children's stories, now I mostly read historical fiction and non-fiction because I'm interested in history and real events.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence and then briefly explain with a specific reason and a linking phrase. Avoid repeating 'no' and improve sentence variety and grammar.

範例: No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family because they enjoy cycling and I have never learned to ride a bike. However, I often join them on walks while they go on long bike rides, so we still spend time together outdoors.

× Yes, one of my hobbies includes reading books, watching television, walking my dog.

✓ Yes, one of my hobbies is reading books, watching television, and walking my dog.

The verb 'includes' is incorrect for listing hobbies after 'one of my hobbies'. Use a copular verb 'is' or say 'my hobbies include'. Also add 'and' before the final item in a list for natural coordination. Suggestion: use 'One of my hobbies is...' or 'My hobbies include...'.

× I like to draw.

✓ I liked to draw when I was a child.

The context asks about hobbies when the student was a child, so the past tense should be used. 'I like to draw' is present tense and mismatches the time frame. Use past tense 'liked' or 'used to like' to match 'when I was a child'.

× When I was a child, my mom brought me this coloring book and she brought me a lot of crayons for me to draw.

✓ When I was a child, my mom gave me a coloring book and a lot of crayons to draw with.

Use 'gave' rather than 'brought me' to indicate gifting; 'brought' focuses on movement. Also remove the redundant pronoun 'for me' and use the correct prepositional phrase 'to draw with'. Simplify the sentence for clarity.

× So that's what I love to do back then.

✓ So that's what I loved to do back then.

The time expression 'back then' refers to the past, so the verb should be in the past tense 'loved' rather than present 'love'. Alternatively, say 'So that was what I loved to do back then.'

× Probably reading.

✓ Probably reading.

No grammatical change needed. The fragment 'Probably reading.' is acceptable as a short spoken answer. No correction required.

× I started reading at a very early age and I still read today, but the genres of the books that I read were different before.

✓ I started reading at a very early age and I still read today, but the genres of the books I read were different before.

The sentence is mostly correct but slightly wordy. Remove 'that' after 'books' for natural phrasing. 'Were different before' is understandable; alternatively use 'used to be different' to make the past contrast clearer. This is a minor stylistic adjustment rather than strict grammar error.

× No because my family loves to bike and I don't know how to ride a bike.

✓ No, because my family loves biking and I don't know how to ride a bike.

Add a comma after 'No' for clarity. Use 'biking' (gerund) or 'to ride bikes' for natural phrasing. The original 'loves to bike' is acceptable but 'loves biking' is smoother. Ensure consistent wording: 'ride a bike' or 'ride bikes'.

× So no, we don't have the same hobbies.

✓ So no, we don't share the same hobbies.

The original is grammatically acceptable in spoken English. 'We don't share the same hobbies' is a slightly more natural and formal phrasing. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammatical correction.