爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, danh-động từ, số nhiều), cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và thêm thông tin cụ thể. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, dùng từ vựng chính xác (watch sports, various sports, martial arts), nối các ý bằng liên từ (and, also, because) và giới hạn câu không quá 5 câu. Ví dụ: nêu rõ bạn xem những môn gì, tần suất và lý do.

範例: Yes. I enjoy watching sports, especially football and basketball, and I also like martial arts. I watch matches almost every weekend because I find them exciting and a good way to relax. I also follow sports news online to keep up with scores and transfers.

建議: Cần sửa ngữ pháp quá khứ (were → was), động từ nguyên mẫu sau 'loved to' hoặc dùng gerund (playing), loại bỏ lặp từ và làm rõ ý với chi tiết cụ thể (thường chơi ở đâu, với ai, tần suất). Dùng liên từ để kết nối câu (because, so). Giữ dưới 5 câu.

範例: When I was a child, I loved playing football, basketball and badminton with my friends. We played in the local park almost every afternoon because we didn't have smartphones. Those games were a great way for us to stay active and have fun together.

建議: Cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng thì chính xác (present perfect/simple past), tránh lặp từ và sửa trật tự từ (my hobby is playing sports). Làm rõ hiện trạng (where you play, how often) và giữ câu ngắn gọn với liên từ phù hợp (but, now).

範例: Yes, I have. My hobby is playing sports and I have enjoyed it since childhood. I used to play chess and football, and now I often play badminton and basketball at school or at a local club several times a week.

建議: Cần diễn đạt mạch lạc, sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (same hobbies as my grandparents/father), dùng thì phù hợp và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về cách bạn kết hợp sở thích của họ. Tránh câu mơ hồ và lặp từ; dùng liên từ để giải thích (because, so).

範例: Yes. I share similar interests with my family: my grandfather likes badminton and my father prefers football. I enjoy both sports, so I play badminton sometimes and football at other times, depending on who I play with.

× Of course everyone have their hobbies and my hobbies is watching sport I love.

✓ Of course everyone has their hobbies, and my hobby is watching sports I love.

'Everyone' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. 'My hobbies is' should be 'my hobby is' (singular) to agree with 'is'. 'Sport' as an activity or plural here should be 'sports'. Combine clauses with a comma and 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: identify singular collective pronouns (everyone, someone) and use singular verbs and match singular/plural nouns accordingly.

× I very love watching sport.

✓ I really love watching sports.

'Very' does not modify verbs like 'love'; use adverb 'really' or 'really love'. Also 'sports' is more natural than 'sport' when listing types. Suggestion: use appropriate adverbs (really, truly) before verbs and pluralize 'sports' when referring to multiple kinds.

× Football, basketball, mixes, martial art, like why I watching?

✓ I like football, basketball, mixed martial arts; why do I watch them?

Original fragment lacks a clear subject-verb structure and mixes nouns without connectors. 'Mixes' is incorrect; likely 'mixed martial arts'. Also questions need auxiliary 'do' for present simple: 'why do I watch them?'. Suggestion: list hobbies with 'I like' then form a proper question with auxiliary verbs.

× I've spent all my free time to watching and like surf off the Internet to know about.

✓ I spend all my free time watching and surfing the Internet to learn about them.

Use 'spend time doing' (verb+ing) not 'spend time to watching'. 'Surf off the Internet' is incorrect; use 'surf the Internet' or 'browse the Internet'. 'To know about' should be 'to learn about' or 'to find out about'. Also tense consistency: present simple 'I spend' or present perfect 'I've spent'—here present simple matches habitual action. Suggestion: use 'spend + time + verb-ing' and correct verb collocations like 'surf the Internet' and 'learn about'.

× When I were a child, I loved to playing football, playing basketball, badminton with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I loved playing football, basketball, and badminton with my friends.

Use 'was' not 'were' with singular subject 'I' in past tense. 'Loved to playing' mixes infinitive and -ing; use 'loved playing' or 'liked to play'. Also include commas and 'and' to list items. Suggestion: use correct past form 'was' and choose either 'loved playing' or 'loved to play' consistently.

× Like that time we don't have a smartphone so we love to hang out.

✓ At that time we didn't have smartphones, so we loved to hang out.

Referencing the past requires past tense: 'didn't have' and 'loved'. 'A smartphone' should be plural 'smartphones' when speaking generally, or keep singular with 'a' if meaning one each. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions (at that time -> past tense) and use plural for general items.

× I love to hang out with my friends and play some sport like that sport can can bring for we fun.

✓ I loved hanging out with my friends and playing sports because those activities brought us fun.

Original mixes present and past and has ungrammatical fragments: 'can can', 'bring for we fun'. Use past tense 'loved' to match previous past context, 'playing sports' for noun phrase, and 'brought us fun' or better 'were fun'/'brought us enjoyment'. Suggestion: avoid doubled words, use correct verb forms and prepositions ('brought us enjoyment').

× Yeah, that is my hobby is, uh, playing sport.

✓ Yes, my hobby is playing sports.

Redundant 'that is' and 'my hobby is' repeated. Use 'sports' plural. 'Yeah' can be 'Yes' in formal speech. Suggestion: be concise and avoid repetition.

× Since I was a child, I love to play chess, football, but now I love to play badminton, to play basketball in my, in my school, in the club.

✓ Since I was a child, I have loved playing chess and football, but now I play badminton and basketball at my school and in a club.

With 'since' indicating from past until now use present perfect 'have loved' rather than simple present 'love'. Use 'play' for current habitual actions. Avoid repeating 'to play'. Use articles for 'a club'. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions continuing to present and parallel structures for lists.

× So yeah, I love it, love it, very love it to play.

✓ So yeah, I really love playing it.

'Very love it to play' is ungrammatical; use adverb 'really' and gerund 'playing'. Avoid repetition. Suggestion: use 'really love' + verb-ing for emphasis.

× Uh, I just think I have the same hobby with my grandparent, grandfather and father.

✓ I think I share similar hobbies with my grandparents, grandfather, and father.

'Have the same hobby with' is awkward; use 'share hobbies with' or 'have the same hobbies as'. 'Grandparent, grandfather' is inconsistent; use plural 'grandparents' or specify 'grandfather'. Suggestion: use 'share' or 'have the same hobby as' and ensure consistent noun forms.

× They just my grandfather loved to play badminton, my father loved to play football.

✓ My grandfather loved playing badminton, and my father loved playing football.

Sentence missing verb 'are' or connector; restructure to two clauses with 'and'. Use 'loved playing' for past habitual actions. Suggestion: use parallel structure and include conjunctions.

× So I just mixed this two of that to play for just now.

✓ So I combined these two hobbies and play both now.

Awkward phrasing 'mixed this two of that to play for just now'. Use 'combined these two hobbies' and 'play both now' for present habit. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'combine' and correct demonstratives 'these' for plural.