爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (plural/verb forms), avoid redundancy, and limit to up to 4–5 concise sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide one specific detail or example. Also correct small mistakes: 'one of my favorite hobbies', 'walking gives me a lot of positive energy'.

範例: I have several hobbies, including swimming, playing cricket with friends, and walking. I go for a walk with my mother every day, which is the most important part of my routine. Because walking energizes me and clears my mind, I usually walk for around 30 minutes. I also swim twice a week to keep fit.

建議: Open with a direct topic sentence, fix tense and phrasing errors, and avoid repetitive words. Add one specific vivid detail (e.g., what you enjoyed about the park or a memorable game). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'especially' correctly.

範例: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child, mainly outdoor games like badminton, cricket and football. For example, on weekends I used to go to the park with my grandparents to play with friends. I especially enjoyed playing cricket because I liked batting and running between the wickets. Those afternoons helped me stay active and build friendships.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct grammar: 'one of my favorite hobbies' and use past/present tenses consistently. Avoid repetitive phrases ('that time during that time'). Give a specific detail about how often or why it remains meaningful, and use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, walking has been a hobby of mine since childhood. When I was young, I often walked to the park with my mother, which created many happy memories. Because of those early walks, I still enjoy walking daily to relax and stay healthy.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar ('family members have different hobbies', 'my parents practice yoga every day'). Explain briefly why your hobbies differ with a specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrases like 'Also talking and other hobbies.'

範例: No, my family members have different hobbies. For example, my parents practise yoga every day because it helps them relax and stay flexible. I prefer swimming because it gives me a full-body workout and refreshes me. Sometimes we share activities like walking, but our main interests are different.

× I have many hobbies such as swimming, playing cricket with my friends and walking is one of my favorite hobby.

✓ I have many hobbies such as swimming, playing cricket with my friends, and walking is one of my favorite hobbies.

Mismatch between plural 'hobbies' and singular 'hobby'; 'favorite hobby' must agree with 'hobbies' context and be plural 'hobbies'. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent plural forms and commas in lists.

× Every day I go for a walk with my mother and it is most important part of my day because walking give me lot of positive energy.

✓ Every day I go for a walk with my mother and it is the most important part of my day because walking gives me a lot of positive energy.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'most important part' and subject-verb agreement: 'walking' (singular gerund) requires 'gives'. Also 'a lot of' needs article 'a'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and ensure verb agrees with singular gerund subjects.

× Undoubtedly when I was a child that time I had many hobbies such as playing different type of games, badminton, cricket, football.

✓ Undoubtedly, when I was a child I had many hobbies such as playing different types of games: badminton, cricket, and football.

Use plural 'types' after 'different' and streamline redundant time expressions 'that time'. Add commas and conjunction for list clarity. Suggestion: avoid redundant temporal phrases and match noun number after 'different'.

× I remember especially on weekends I went to park with my grandparents for playing game with my friends.

✓ I remember that, especially on weekends, I went to the park with my grandparents to play games with my friends.

Missing 'the' before 'park'; use infinitive 'to play' not 'for playing'; plural 'games' fits context. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use articles for specific places and correct verb forms after purpose expressions.

× Walking is one of my favorite hobby.

✓ Walking is one of my favorite hobbies.

Same issue as earlier: 'one of' requires the noun to be plural ('hobbies'). Suggestion: use plural after 'one of'.

× I remember when I was a child that time I went to park for walking with my mother and it was a memorable experience because that time during that time, I walk a lot.

✓ I remember when I was a child I went to the park for walks with my mother and it was a memorable experience because at that time I walked a lot.

Remove redundant 'that time'; use 'the park' and plural 'walks' or 'for walks'; maintain past tense 'walked' to match 'was a child'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and keep consistent past tense.

× No, my family member have a different hobbies such as if I talk about my parents, they like yoga, they do yoga everyday.

✓ No, my family members have different hobbies; for example, my parents like yoga and they do yoga every day.

Use plural 'family members' and 'different hobbies' without 'a'. Also 'every day' is two words; restructure sentence and add conjunctions. Suggestion: ensure subject and noun number match and use correct spacing for 'every day'.

× However I do not love yoga because I love swimming.

✓ However, I do not enjoy yoga because I prefer swimming.

'Do not love' is grammatical but stylistically odd; 'enjoy' and 'prefer' better express contrast. Add comma after 'However'. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'enjoy' and 'prefer' and punctuate introductory adverbs.

× Also talking and other hobbies.

✓ I also enjoy talking and other hobbies.

Fragment lacking a verb and subject; make it a complete sentence by adding subject and verb 'I enjoy'. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by including subject and verb.