爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, reduce repetition, and give one specific detail about what you read and why. Use linking words to connect ideas. Keep answers under five sentences.

範例: Yes — I enjoy reading in my free time. I usually read contemporary novels and short stories because they help me relax after a busy day. For example, last month I finished a novel about modern city life which gave me new ideas about stress management. Reading also improves my vocabulary, so I try to read at least 30 minutes every evening.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Provide one specific memory or reason why you stopped. Use linking words to connect past and present.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often played chess with my friends after school because my father taught us the game. However, nowadays I have less free time because of work and study, so I rarely play anymore.

建議: Be concise and precise: use correct tense and clear wording (avoid unclear phrases like “in the databasing”). State the hobby and give one or two specific supporting details (what you read and how it helps). Avoid filler words.

範例: Yes, I have continued reading since I was a child. I often read fiction and biographies, which help me relax and think more clearly. For instance, I read every night to unwind before bed and to learn new perspectives.

建議: Clean up repetition and grammar: give a clear topic sentence, correct adjective/adverb use, and a specific example of a shared experience. Use linking words (for example, when, because) to make it coherent.

範例: Yes. My father and I both enjoy fishing, and we often go together to the countryside on weekends. For example, last summer we spent a day by the lake where we relaxed, caught a few fish, and talked about work — it was a great way to unwind.

× Yes I have. I do reading in a daily basis.

✓ Yes, I do. I read daily.

The original mixes 'do reading' (incorrect verb form) and awkward adverbial phrase 'in a daily basis'. Use the simple present 'I read' for habitual actions and 'daily' as the adverb. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural punctuation.

× It helps me relaxing and actually it's a lot to me avoid a case of everyday life.

✓ It helps me relax, and actually it helps me avoid the pressures of everyday life.

Use the base verb after 'helps' (help + infinitive without to or base form): 'helps me relax', not 'helps me relaxing'. The phrase 'it's a lot to me avoid a case of everyday life' is incomprehensible; replace with 'helps me avoid the pressures of everyday life' to express the intended meaning.

× Yes, I have. When I was a child I used to play chess with my friends at my playmates, but in these days I haven't any time to spend playing chess.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I used to play chess with my friends and playmates, but these days I don't have any time to play chess.

The response to 'Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?' should use past tense ('Yes, I did'). 'At my playmates' is incorrect preposition/word choice; say 'with my friends and playmates'. 'In these days' should be 'these days' for present habitual reference. Use the negative 'don't have any time' instead of 'haven't any time' in modern spoken English.

× Yes I did. Uh, I do reading in the databasing.

✓ Yes, I did. Uh, I read during my free time.

The question asks about a hobby held since childhood; initial 'Yes, I did' is acceptable, but 'I do reading in the databasing' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'I read during my free time' to convey the hobby in the present. If intent was 'database' work, clarify vocabulary; here we use 'during my free time' to fit context.

× I devote it most of my time to reading.

✓ I devote most of my time to reading.

Remove the incorrect pronoun 'it' which makes the sentence ungrammatical. 'Devote most of my time to reading' is the correct collocation.

× It allows to me relaxing and feel myself peaceful.

✓ It allows me to relax and makes me feel peaceful.

After 'allow' use direct object pronoun 'me' without 'to' before the object: 'allows me to relax'. Also use 'make' + object + adjective: 'makes me feel peaceful'. Avoid 'feel myself peaceful' which is unidiomatic.

× Yeah, my father and I have the same hobbies.

✓ Yes, my father and I share the same hobbies.

'Yeah' is informal; use 'Yes' for clearer register. 'Have the same hobbies' is understandable but 'share the same hobbies' is more natural. This change is stylistic rather than strictly grammatical.

× We we are a big fan of fishing and it helps VV it helps so relaxable, relaxing to us when we went to the countryside.

✓ We are big fans of fishing, and it helps us relax when we go to the countryside.

Remove the duplicated 'we'. Use plural 'fans' to match 'we' (subject-verb agreement). Remove stray 'VV' and 'so relaxable' which are ungrammatical; use 'helps us relax'. Match tense: if speaking generally, use present 'we go' not past 'went'.