爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce grammatical errors, use parallel structure and concise phrasing, and avoid redundant phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, group similar activities, and use linking words if adding details. For example, say all activities in the same verb form and correct prepositions.

範例: I enjoy several hobbies. I play basketball and go to the gym to stay fit, and I also like reading books. Additionally, I often go hiking and spend time with friends, which helps me relax.

建議: Use correct tense and singular/plural agreement, and give specific examples with clear linking words. Begin with a direct answer (past tense), explain how hobbies changed, and provide brief reasons or examples to support your statement.

範例: Yes, I had different hobbies as a child. I used to spend a lot of time playing video games on the computer, but now my interests have changed because I prefer more active pursuits like basketball.

建議: Use a clear topic sentence in present perfect or simple present, and give specific benefits using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid trailing sentences; finish your ideas and provide two or three concise reasons.

範例: Yes, I have played basketball since I was a child. It helps me relax, keeps me fit, and has made me more confident when interacting with others.

建議: Correct subject pronouns and verb agreement, and organize ideas logically: state similarity, give specific example(s) of shared activities, and explain the effect on family relationships. Use linking words to connect sentences.

範例: Yes, my brother and I share several hobbies, especially playing basketball. We also like watching movies together at night, which creates a good atmosphere and makes our family feel closer.

× My hobbies are playing basketball, go to the gym, and reading books.

✓ My hobbies are playing basketball, going to the gym, and reading books.

When listing activities after a form of be ('are'), parallel structure requires the same verb form for each item. Use the gerund (-ing) form for all: 'playing', 'going', 'reading'. Suggestion: Maintain parallel gerunds when listing hobbies (playing, going, reading).

× Also, I enjoy hiking and spending time with my friends.

✓ Also, I enjoy hiking and spending time with my friends.

This sentence is grammatical; no change needed. It uses parallel gerunds correctly and fits the context. Leave as is.

× I have many hobbies in right.

✓ I have many hobbies right now.

The phrase 'in right' is ungrammatical. The correct idiom to express the present moment is 'right now'. Suggestion: Use 'right now' to indicate the current time.

× Yes, I have many hobbies when I was child, but this hobbies entirely changed right now.

✓ Yes, I had many hobbies when I was a child, but these hobbies have completely changed now.

Tense and article errors: 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. 'a child' requires the article 'a'. 'this hobbies' should be plural demonstrative 'these hobbies'. 'entirely changed right now' mixes past and present; 'have completely changed now' correctly shows that the change occurred and affects the present. Also use 'completely' instead of 'entirely' for naturalness. Suggestion: Match verb tenses and use correct articles and demonstratives.

× When I was a child my hobby was playing video games, playing computers and we are socially personal.

✓ When I was a child, my hobbies were playing video games and using computers, and I was more socially reserved.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and list structure—use plural 'hobbies' with plural verb 'were'. 'playing computers' is not idiomatic; use 'using computers' or 'playing computer games'. 'we are socially personal' is unclear; likely intended contrast about social behavior. I changed it to 'I was more socially reserved' to convey a childhood social characteristic. Add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: Use clear, idiomatic expressions ('using computers') and match plurality and tense; make sure the meaning is expressed clearly.

× Yes, I have a hobby that since I was a child, it was basketball.

✓ Yes, I have had a hobby since I was a child: basketball.

The original mixes present 'have' with past clause awkwardly and repeats the subject. Use present perfect 'have had' to indicate a hobby continuing from the past to present. Use a colon or restructure to avoid 'it was basketball'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions or states that began in the past and continue now.

× Basketball it was helps me to relax, be more confident and.

✓ Basketball helps me to relax and be more confident.

Word order and extra words: remove the unnecessary 'it was'. Use simple present 'helps' because this is a general truth/habit. Also complete the list properly with 'and' followed by the final item; remove trailing 'and'. Suggestion: Use correct word order and complete lists; avoid redundant words like 'it was'.

× My brother and me has same hobby that playing basketball as my family.

✓ My brother and I have the same hobby of playing basketball as other members of my family.

Pronoun case: 'My brother and me' should be 'My brother and I' as the subject. Subject-verb agreement: plural subject requires 'have' not 'has'. Use article 'the' before 'same hobby' and rephrase for clarity ('of playing basketball' and 'other members of my family'). Suggestion: Use correct subject pronoun 'I' and ensure verb agrees with the subject.

× We bought together to watch movies at night.

✓ We get together to watch movies at night.

'Bought together' is incorrect; likely intended 'get together' (meet). Use present simple 'get together' for habitual action. 'Bought' is past tense of 'buy' and incorrect here. Suggestion: Use idiomatic phrasal verb 'get together' to describe meeting friends or family.

× These activities helps us to improve atmosphere and feel happy.

✓ These activities help us improve the atmosphere and feel happy.

Subject-verb agreement: 'activities' is plural, so use 'help' not 'helps'. 'Improve atmosphere' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, 'help us feel happy' is more natural without 'to'. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with plural subjects and use articles where needed; prefer 'help us feel happy' or 'help us to feel happy'.