爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear, concise topic sentence naming your hobbies, then support with specific reasons and avoid repetition. Use correct verb forms and linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'and' or 'because'). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences and focus on one idea per sentence.

範例: I enjoy two main hobbies: traveling and listening to music. Listening to music helps me relax after a busy day, especially jazz and acoustic songs. I also love traveling because it lets me experience different cultures and try new foods. For example, last year I visited Spain and enjoyed learning about local customs and cuisine.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence about a childhood hobby, then give specific details and use correct verb patterns (e.g., 'I wanted to be a pilot' or 'I enjoyed playing cricket'). Use linking words like 'also' or 'because' to connect reasons and avoid unclear phrases.

範例: When I was a child, I wanted to be a pilot and I also loved playing cricket. I dreamed of flying planes because I was fascinated by engines and travel. At the same time, I played cricket with my friends almost every day because it was fun and helped me stay active.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. If you did not keep a childhood hobby, say so briefly and explain why with specific reasons and correct tense usage. Use linking words like 'because' and keep sentences short and logical.

範例: No, I don't have a hobby that I've kept since childhood. As a child I tried many activities but I was not sure what I liked most. Now, as a young adult, I have chosen music and travel because they suit my interests and lifestyle.

建議: Be clear about whether your hobbies match your family's. Avoid confusing career expectations with hobbies. Use correct grammar and specific examples, and explain how you feel about sharing hobbies with family using linking words like 'however' or 'although'.

範例: I don't really share the same hobbies as my parents. My parents want me to become a chartered accountant or run a business, which are career goals rather than hobbies. However, we do occasionally enjoy the same activities, such as watching movies together on weekends.

× I am very fond of traveling and listen to music because listen to music reduces my stress and traveling.

✓ I am very fond of traveling and listening to music because listening to music reduces my stress.

The phrase 'fond of' must be followed by a gerund (verb+ing). 'Listen' should be 'listening'. Also the second 'traveling' is redundant and causes awkwardness; removing it clarifies the sentence.

× I like to travel and explore new cultures and new places to know where the western culture and world like to I watch.

✓ I like to travel and explore new cultures and places to learn about Western cultures and see how people live.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'to know where the western culture and world like to I watch' is incoherent. Rewriting uses correct infinitives and gerunds and arranges the object of 'learn' and 'see' properly. Use 'Western cultures' (capitalized in normal writing) and 'see how people live' to convey the intended meaning.

× When I was a child, I was very fond of to make a pilot to me according to me and I would like to team member of my cricket team because I like to play cricket every day with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I really wanted to become a pilot, and I wanted to be a member of my cricket team because I liked playing cricket every day with my friends.

After 'fond of' the gerund is required; however the sentence mixes 'fond of to make a pilot to me' which is incorrect. Use 'wanted to become a pilot' for desire in the past. Also use 'be a member' and past tense 'liked playing' to match 'When I was a child'.

× No, I don't have any kind of hobby when I was a child because when I was a child I have don't know what I want to be and when I am youngsters right now, I would like to think anything to make.

✓ No, I didn't have any hobbies when I was a child because I didn't know what I wanted to be. Now that I am young, I would like to think about what to do.

Mixing present and past tenses is incorrect. 'When I was a child' requires past tense: 'didn't have' and 'didn't know' and 'wanted'. 'I have don't know' is ungrammatical. The final clause should use 'now' and 'I would like to think about what to do' for clarity.

× Oh yes, I have a same hobby like my parents should make me CA or a businessman.

✓ Oh yes, I have the same hobbies as my parents; they wanted me to become a CA or a businessman.

'a same hobby' is incorrect; use 'the same hobbies' or 'the same hobby'. Also 'like my parents should make me CA' is wrong wording. Use 'they wanted me to become' and include the article 'a' before 'businessman'. 'CA' (chartered accountant) should be clear in context.

× So I would like to anything to do with according to my parents and I want to like everything because my parents was happy.

✓ So I would like to do things according to my parents' wishes, and I try to like everything because my parents are happy.

The phrase 'would like to anything to do with according to my parents' is ungrammatical. Use 'do things according to my parents' wishes'. Subject-verb agreement: 'my parents was happy' should be 'my parents are happy' (plural subject). Use present tense 'are' if referring to their current feelings.