爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện: Câu trả lời khá tự nhiên nhưng có vài lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (thời hiện tại hoàn thành "it's helped" không phù hợp với ngữ cảnh). Nên tách ý rõ ràng hơn bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn và 1-2 câu hỗ trợ cụ thể; dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc. Thêm từ vựng cụ thể về thể loại sách hoặc tần suất đọc để phong phú nội dung.

範例: I have several hobbies, including reading, swimming and playing badminton. I enjoy reading the most because it helps me relax and teaches me new things; for example, I often read contemporary novels in the evening for about an hour.

建議: Cải thiện: Có ý tốt nhưng phát ngôn bị ngắt quãng và cấu trúc không chính xác ("dream to be" và câu bị ngắt). Nên dùng cấu trúc 'used to' đúng và nối câu bằng liên từ để mạch lạc; bổ sung chi tiết ngắn gọn về lý do hoặc kỷ niệm để cụ thể hóa câu trả lời.

範例: Yes. When I was a child I used to love singing and I dreamed of becoming a singer. I joined my school choir at age eight, and I remember performing at the annual concert which made me very excited.

建議: Cải thiện: Cần loại bỏ tiếng ồ ừ (fillers) và sửa ngữ pháp ("since childhood" không cần 'a'; "is always help" sai động từ). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn rồi thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (loại sách, tần suất) với liên từ để mạch lạc.

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed reading since childhood. Reading has always helped me unwind, and I usually read a mix of fiction and non-fiction for about thirty minutes before bed.

建議: Cải thiện: Nội dung rõ ràng và cụ thể, nhưng có lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp ("it's help" nên là "it helps" hoặc "playing helps"). Có thể thêm một liên kết so sánh ngắn về việc có giống sở thích với các thành viên khác để đúng câu hỏi hơn.

範例: Yes, my younger brother and I share the hobby of playing badminton; playing helps us relax and keep fit. We usually play at school courts three to four times a week when the weather is nice, while my parents prefer walking for exercise.

× I enjoy reading, swimming and playing badminton, and I like reading the most because it's helped me relax and learn new things.

✓ I enjoy reading, swimming and playing badminton, and I like reading the most because it helps me relax and learn new things.

Present participle/present simple: 'it's helped me' mixes present perfect with general habit. Use present simple 'it helps' to describe habitual effect. Suggestion: use present simple for general truths or habitual effects. Grammar problem type's ID: 10

× For example, I often read novels in the evening.

✓ For example, I often read novels in the evening.

No change needed. The sentence correctly uses present simple 'read' to describe a habitual action. Keep as is. Grammar problem type's ID: 5

× Yes, when I was a child I used to like singing and I used to dream to be. Become a singer.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to like singing and I used to dream of becoming a singer.

Phrase structure and verb pattern: 'dream to be' is incorrect; correct pattern is 'dream of doing' or 'dream of being'. Also sentence was split incorrectly and had a period in the middle. Suggestion: combine into one sentence and use 'dream of becoming/being'. Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× Absolutely, I have a hobby that I have had since a childhood. Uh, it is reading books. Yes, reading books uh, is always help me unwind.

✓ Absolutely, I have a hobby that I have had since childhood. It is reading books. Yes, reading books always help me unwind.

Article and sentence form: 'since a childhood' is incorrect; use 'since childhood' (no article). Also 'is always help me' is grammatically incorrect: should be 'always helps me' (subject-verb agreement) or 'helps me unwind'. Suggestion: remove 'a' and use correct verb form 'helps'. Grammar problem type's ID: 22

× My younger brother and I usually play badminton together at the school because it's help us relax and keep fit.

✓ My younger brother and I usually play badminton together at school because it helps us relax and keep fit.

Third person singular: 'it's help us' is incorrect; with subject 'it' referring to playing badminton, the verb should be 'helps' (adds -s). Also 'at the school' is unnatural unless referring to a specific school; use 'at school' for general activity. Suggestion: use 'helps' and drop 'the' unless specifying. Grammar problem type's ID: 2

× We try to play 3 or 4 times a week when the weather is nice.

✓ We try to play three or four times a week when the weather is nice.

Style and number expression: numerals '3 or 4' in spoken/written English are normally written as words 'three or four'. The tense 'try to play' is correct for habitual action. Suggestion: write numbers as words in formal responses. Grammar problem type's ID: 6