爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize the answer: start with a topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then give one or two specific details or examples using linking words. Avoid filler words (um, uh) and vague phrases like "or something."

範例: I have several hobbies, but my main interests are reading and cooking. For example, I usually read contemporary novels in the evenings to relax, and at weekends I try new recipes — last week I made a Thai curry which turned out well. I also enjoy going to the park with friends to unwind.

建議: Clarify and correct repetition and grammar. Use one clear topic sentence and provide a specific reason or brief example. Remove hesitation words and avoid repeating words ("used to").

範例: Yes. As a child I liked marking my classmates' test papers because I was fascinated by teaching. For instance, I would compare answers and explain mistakes to my friends, which made me think I might become a teacher one day.

建議: Answer directly and avoid contradictions. Start with a clear statement (yes/no), then explain with specific details and use linking words like 'however' or 'but' correctly. Reduce fillers and be precise about what you enjoy in cooking.

範例: Not really — my hobbies have changed. While I used to enjoy marking classmates' papers as a child, now I focus on cooking. For example, I practice new recipes every week, like baking bread and making stir-fries, to improve my skills.

建議: Be more natural and use clearer vocabulary. Give a concise topic sentence, then provide two specific contrasting examples using linking words (for example, whereas, while). Avoid grammatical errors and filler words.

範例: No, our hobbies are quite different. For example, my brother spends his free time on his phone and often naps, whereas my parents prefer socialising and going out with friends. So we each relax in different ways.

× I remember when I used to used to be a kid, I loved checking the exams, checking the papers of other students.

✓ I remember when I used to be a kid; I loved checking the exams, checking the papers of other students.

The phrase 'used to used to' repeats 'used to' incorrectly. 'Used to' is the correct past habitual expression and should appear only once. Remove the extra 'used to' to fix redundancy and produce a grammatically correct past habitual statement.

× I have plenty of hobbies such as reading, cooking, surfing the Internet and that's what I enjoy the most in my free time.

✓ I have plenty of hobbies such as reading, cooking and surfing the Internet; those are what I enjoy most in my free time.

The original sentence mixes singular 'that's' with a list of activities, causing a mismatch between pronoun and referent. Replace 'that's' with 'those are' to agree in number with the plural activities. Also remove the unnecessary 'the' before 'most' for a more natural expression.

× For example, my brother likes to be on the phone always whenever he's free and he likes to sleep at the same time.

✓ For example, my brother is always on the phone whenever he's free, and he also likes to sleep a lot.

The phrase 'likes to be on the phone always' has unnatural word order; moving 'always' before the verb phrase ('is always on the phone') is more natural. 'At the same time' is unclear; replace with 'a lot' or a clearer phrase. Also combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for correct sentence structure.

× I talking about my mother and father umm, they like to hang out outside with their friends in their spare time.

✓ Talking about my mother and father, they like to hang out with their friends in their spare time.

The clause 'I talking about' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present participle construction; it should be 'I'm talking about' or simply 'Talking about'. Removing 'I' and starting with 'Talking about' or adding 'I'm' corrects the sentence structure. Also 'hang out outside with' is redundant; 'hang out with' is sufficient.

× I did not uh, cook when I was a kid, but now I, you know, I'm very much into cooking.

✓ I didn't cook when I was a kid, but now I'm very much into cooking.

Use the contracted past negative 'didn't' for natural spoken English and remove filler words 'uh' and 'you know' in the written correction. Ensure consistent tense usage: past simple for the childhood statement and present for current habit. Contraction is optional but more natural here.