爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (um, like, maybe), use correct verbs and nouns, and give one brief supporting detail for each hobby. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I have two main hobbies: going to the gym and taking care of my appearance. I go to the gym three times a week to stay fit, and I also enjoy grooming my nose (I mean skincare and personal grooming) because it helps me feel confident.

建議: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give specific supporting details. Remove hesitations and complete the final thought. Use linking words (for example, and, because) to make it coherent. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, as a child I loved playing with my friends. For example, we often went to a nearby waterfall to swim and explore, and we played games like hide-and-seek because the area had many rocks and trees to hide behind.

建議: Start with a direct statement saying which hobby you still have, then give a reason or a brief example. Remove repetitions and fillers, and use linking words (so, because, therefore) to explain continuity from childhood to now.

範例: Yes, I have continued playing with my friends since childhood. We still meet regularly to play sports or go hiking, which keeps our friendship strong and reminds me of the games we played when we were kids.

建議: Provide a clear contrast sentence first (same or different), then give a specific example and a reason. Avoid mixed negatives and unclear phrasing. Use linking words like however or although when comparing.

範例: Not really — my hobbies are mostly different from my family's. However, my father and I both enjoy watching movies, and we often discuss films together because we like similar genres such as comedies and historical dramas.

× Yes I do have like maybe 2 hobbies which is umm going to the gym and do my own nose.

✓ Yes, I have maybe two hobbies: going to the gym and doing my own nose care.

The subject refers to two hobbies (plural) so the verb and list items should match plural form. 'which is' is incorrect for plural; use a colon or 'which are' and parallel gerund forms ('going' and 'doing') for consistency. Also 'do my own nose' is unnatural; 'doing my own nose care' or 'taking care of my nose' clarifies the meaning. Use numbers in words ('two') for formality.

× When I was a child, maybe I'm my hobby is playing with my friends, just that we like to go to the waterfall and play there and maybe playing some stuff like a.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was playing with my friends; we liked to go to the waterfall and play there and do other activities.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child') so verbs should be in the past tense ('was', 'liked'). The original mixes present tense 'I'm' and present simple 'is', which is inconsistent. Also maintain parallel structure: use verbs consistently ('play' -> 'play' or 'do other activities'). Remove filler words and incomplete fragments for clarity.

× I think playing with my friends and the hobbies that I have had since I was young, 'cause you know, nowadays I, I, I still play with my friends like that.

✓ I think playing with my friends is a hobby I have had since I was young, because nowadays I still play with my friends like that.

This sentence mixes noun phrases and clauses awkwardly. Use present perfect 'have had' for continuity from past to present and present simple 'still play' for current habitual action. Ensure the subject and verb agree: 'playing... is a hobby' (singular subject requires singular verb 'is'). Remove stuttering and informal fillers for grammatical correctness.

× I think I don't but maybe watch movie at the same hobbies that I have the same like my father 'cause my father also like to watch movie.

✓ I don't think so, but maybe I share one hobby with my father: watching movies, because my father also likes to watch movies.

Pronoun and phrase order is confused; 'I think I don't' is unclear—use 'I don't think so.' Use parallel noun forms ('watching movies') and correct verb agreement ('father also likes'). Ensure singular/plural consistency: 'movies' plural and 'likes' for third person singular. Clarify the idea with proper conjunction and punctuation.