爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, chia động từ và trật tự từ; làm câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn; dùng liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng; thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất/địa điểm để câu có nội dung rõ ràng hơn.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photography. It helps me capture small details and remember special moments, so I often go out with my camera at least once a week to parks or city streets.

建議: Giữ nội dung cụ thể nhưng sửa nhỏ lỗi diễn đạt và tránh tiếng ậm ừ; nối câu mượt hơn và rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn; cung cấp một kết luận rõ ràng về việc bạn còn giữ bộ sưu tập hay chỉ giữ vài món.

範例: When I was younger I collected dolls, especially Barbie dolls. Every weekend my parents would take me to the supermarket to buy a new one, and I still have one as a keepsake.

建議: Chỉnh ngữ pháp thời thì và cấu trúc câu; tránh lặp từ và làm rõ tần suất hiện tại; thêm liên từ để mạch văn tốt hơn và một ví dụ ngắn về chủ đề bạn vẽ.

範例: Yes, I have. I used to draw a lot as a child, especially animals and landscapes. Nowadays I don't have much free time because of school, but I still enjoy sketching occasionally, for example when I visit the countryside.

建議: Sửa lỗi số nhiều/sai chính tả, tránh tiếng ậm ừ, dùng liên từ để rõ ràng; cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động chung và rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn.

範例: Not really. My parents enjoy gardening and cooking, while I prefer watching movies and reading. However, we sometimes cook together at the weekend, which is a nice way to spend time as a family.

× Taking photo is one of my favorite pursuit.

✓ Taking photos is one of my favorite pursuits.

Incorrect use of noun forms and count: 'photo' should be plural 'photos' when speaking generally; 'pursuit' should be plural 'pursuits' to match 'one of my'. Use gerund phrase 'Taking photos' as a noun. Suggestion: use plural nouns after 'one of my'.

× I like it because it's help me capture small details and remember special moments and I often go out with my camera once for a while.

✓ I like it because it helps me capture small details and remember special moments, and I often go out with my camera from time to time.

Subject-verb agreement/third person singular: 'it' requires 'helps' not 'help'. 'Once for a while' is unnatural; use 'from time to time' or 'now and then'. Also missing comma before conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: use 'helps' and idiomatic time expression.

× Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?

✓ Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?

This question sentence is already correct in past tense. No correction needed. Explanation: 'Did you have' correctly uses past simple auxiliary for asking about past habits.

× When I was younger, I was really fond of collecting dolls, especially Barbie dolls.

✓ When I was younger, I was really fond of collecting dolls, especially Barbie dolls.

Sentence is correct; past tense 'was' appropriately describes past preference. No change necessary.

× For example, every weekend I would ask my parents to take me to the supermarket so they could buy one for me, and I still keep one.

✓ For example, every weekend I would ask my parents to take me to the supermarket so they could buy one for me, and I still keep them.

Pronoun agreement and reference: 'one' refers to 'Barbie dolls' (plural collection), so the correct pronoun is 'them'. If referring to a single doll kept, rephrase to 'and I still keep one of them.' Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches noun it replaces.

× Uh, just keepsake today.

✓ Uh, I just keep them as keepsakes today.

Fragment and word form: original is a fragment without subject and verb. 'Keepsake' should be plural 'keepsakes' or phrase 'as a keepsake'. Suggestion: include subject and verb and match number.

× Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?

✓ Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?

Question is grammatically correct as written; no correction needed. Tense and form are appropriate.

× Yes I have, I use it to draw a lot when I was a child and I especially like sketching animal and landscape.

✓ Yes I have. I used to draw a lot when I was a child, and I especially liked sketching animals and landscapes.

Tense consistency: 'use' should be past 'used to' to match 'when I was a child'; 'like' should be past 'liked'. Noun plurals: 'animal' and 'landscape' should be plural when speaking generally. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent for past habits and use plurals for categories.

× But nowadays I really draw because I don't have much free time with my school commitments but I still enjoy it when I get the chance.

✓ But nowadays I rarely draw because I don't have much free time due to my school commitments, but I still enjoy it when I get the chance.

Word choice and adverb placement: 'really draw' is unclear; 'rarely draw' likely intended. 'With my school commitments' is unnatural; use 'due to'. Suggestion: place adverb 'rarely' before verb and use 'due to' for reason.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This question is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× No, I don't really have the same hobby as my family.

✓ No, I don't really have the same hobbies as my family.

Number agreement: 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' to match 'my family' which implies multiple people with multiple hobbies. Suggestion: match singular/plural consistently.

× For example, my parent like gardening and cooking, but I prefer uh watching movie or reading books.

✓ For example, my parents like gardening and cooking, but I prefer watching movies or reading books.

Plural forms: 'parent' should be 'parents'; verb agreement 'like' matches plural. 'Watching movie' should be 'watching movies' to be idiomatic. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to both parents and pluralize activities.

× We sometime cook together on the weekends tour, but it is a good chance to spend time with them.

✓ We sometimes cook together on the weekends, and it's a good chance to spend time with them.

Adverb form: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to mean occasionally. 'Weekends tour' is incorrect; remove 'tour' and use 'on the weekends'. Use contraction 'it's' for natural speech. Suggestion: place adverb correctly and fix noun phrase.