爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce repetition and hesitations, give a clear topic sentence, and add one specific reason or short detail. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences and use linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, I have several hobbies, such as playing the violin, doing nail art, and playing volleyball. My favourite is volleyball because I enjoy the team spirit and I play it regularly with friends on weekends. I find it a great way to stay fit and social.

建議: Finish your sentences and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and a brief reason why you liked it. Use a linking word to connect idea and result.

範例: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed painting and drawing on paper. In particular, drawing was my favourite because I loved creating characters and practising shading. As a result, I spent many afternoons sketching and improving my skills.

建議: Respond directly instead of saying short fillers. Provide a clear yes/no and a brief explanation with an example that shows continuity since childhood. Use one or two linking words to connect points.

範例: Yes, I have kept drawing since childhood. I started sketching at age six and have practised almost every year, which helped me develop a steady hand and a good eye for detail.

建議: Be more fluent and specific: state the shared hobby clearly, give details about when and how often you do it, and avoid fillers. Use linking words to make the reply coherent.

範例: Yes, my family and I share a hobby: we often play badminton together. We usually play outdoors during the summer on weekends, and it has become a regular activity that helps us bond and stay active.

× Yes, I do have a a any hobbies that I like like a playing violin, doing some nails or like playing volleyball.

✓ Yes, I do have some hobbies that I like, such as playing the violin, doing nail art, and playing volleyball.

Multiple issues: repeated words ('a a', 'like like') are fillers and should be removed; 'any' is inappropriate in affirmative sentence — use 'some'; 'playing violin' needs definite article 'the' for musical instruments; 'doing some nails' is ungrammatical — use 'doing nail art' or 'getting my nails done'; use parallel structure when listing activities and separate items with commas and 'and'. Suggestion: remove fillers, use 'some' for positive statements, add 'the' before instruments, and make items parallel.

× I think that my favorite one is playing volleyball with my friends.

✓ I think my favorite hobby is playing volleyball with my friends.

Not strictly ungrammatical but 'favorite one' is informal and slightly awkward; prefer 'favorite hobby'. Keep tense and meaning. Suggestion: use clearer noun phrase 'favorite hobby'.

× Yes, I had any hobbies when I was young like painting or drawing some something on the paper.

✓ Yes, I had some hobbies when I was young, like painting or drawing on paper.

'Any' is incorrect in affirmative past statements; use 'some'. Remove repeated filler 'some something'. 'on the paper' is unnatural — use 'on paper'. Suggestion: replace 'any' with 'some', remove fillers, and use natural preposition 'on'.

× Like my favorite one was this like drawing because I was.

✓ My favorite was drawing because I enjoyed it.

Original is a fragment with filler 'like' and an unfinished clause 'because I was.' Complete the idea by stating why: 'because I enjoyed it' or 'because I liked it.' Remove fillers and complete the sentence for clarity.

× OK.

✓ Yes, I do.

As an answer to 'Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?' a single 'OK' is not a clear response. Provide a full sentence fitting the question, such as 'Yes, I do' or 'No, I don't.' Suggestion: answer clearly and grammatically.

× Yes, I do have the same hobbies as my family members. It's a playing badminton together.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobbies as my family members. We play badminton together.

'Do have' is acceptable but 'I have' is more natural. 'It's a playing badminton together' is ungrammatical: 'It's' + noun phrase doesn't fit; use 'We play badminton together.' Remove unnecessary article 'a' and use correct subject-verb structure.

× We play. It's like usually in the summer or when we are like in the outdoors, like anyway, yeah.

✓ We usually play in the summer or when we are outdoors.

Original has fragmented sentences and many fillers ('like', 'anyway', 'yeah'). Adverb 'usually' should go before main verb 'play' or after auxiliary; 'in the outdoors' is unnatural — use 'outdoors'. Combine fragments into one concise sentence. Suggestion: remove fillers and place adverb correctly.