爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence, link supporting details with appropriate connectors, and provide specific examples. Avoid redundancy and correct verb forms and articles.

範例: I have several hobbies, including reading, playing sports and listening to music. For example, I play football with my friends every weekend, which helps me relax after work and stay fit. Also, reading fiction helps me unwind and expand my vocabulary. Therefore, I think everyone should have at least one hobby to keep life interesting.

建議: Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article errors, and use linking words to connect items. Give one or two specific brief examples rather than listing many items awkwardly.

範例: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. For instance, I loved painting because it allowed me to express my creativity, and I often painted landscapes and animals. I also played football with friends after school, and my parents encouraged me to learn the piano, which I enjoyed for its discipline and challenge.

建議: Answer directly with correct tense and grammar, use one clear topic sentence and add a brief specific detail about the hobby to show depth. Avoid vague phrasing.

範例: Yes, I have kept one hobby from childhood: painting. I still enjoy painting landscapes and portraits, and I try to paint at least once a month to improve my technique.

建議: Respond clearly and grammatically, use linking words to explain similarities and differences, and give a specific example comparing hobbies. Correct noun/verb forms and word order.

範例: Yes, some of my hobbies are similar to my family’s. For example, my brother and I both enjoy painting, which we often do together on weekends. However, he prefers listening to music while I like reading, so our hobbies overlap but are not identical.

× Yes, I have several hobbies such as reading, playing sports and listening to music for enhance.

✓ Yes, I have several hobbies such as reading, playing sports and listening to music to relax.

The phrase 'for enhance' is incorrect. After activities like 'listening to music' we use an infinitive of purpose ('to relax') or a gerund with a preposition ('for relaxation'). Use 'to relax' to show purpose. Replace 'for enhance' with 'to relax' or 'for relaxation'.

× I really enjoy playing football with my friends every weekend.

✓ I really enjoy playing football with my friends every weekend.

This sentence is correct. The present simple 'enjoy' describes a habitual action; no change needed.

× I find that having hobbies helps me relax after a visit at work and it also give me the chance to meet new people and learn new skills.

✓ I find that having hobbies helps me relax after a shift at work, and it also gives me the chance to meet new people and learn new skills.

'after a visit at work' is wrong; use 'after a shift at work' or 'after work'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'it also give' should be 'it also gives' because the subject 'it' requires third-person singular. Fixed both preposition/phrase choice and verb agreement.

× Personally, I believe that everyone have should at least one of it to keep life interesting.

✓ Personally, I believe that everyone should have at least one to keep life interesting.

Multiple issues: word order and verb form. 'Everyone' is singular so use 'should have' (not 'have should'). Also 'at least one of it' is incorrect; use 'at least one' or 'at least one hobby'. Rearranged to correct word order and agreement.

× Yes, I definitely had several hobbies as a child.

✓ Yes, I definitely had several hobbies as a child.

This sentence is correct. Past simple 'had' properly describes past state.

× For example, I loved painting and during because it allowed me to express my creativity.

✓ For example, I loved painting because it allowed me to express my creativity.

The word 'during' is unnecessary and makes the sentence ungrammatical. 'Because' correctly links reason to 'I loved painting'. Remove 'during'.

× I also enjoyed playing football with my friends after school and reading comic was one of my favorite pastime.

✓ I also enjoyed playing football with my friends after school, and reading comics was one of my favorite pastimes.

Plural forms: 'comic' should be 'comics' and 'pastime' should be plural 'pastimes' if treated broadly. Added comma and conjunction for clarity. 'Reading comics was one of my favorite pastimes.'

× My parents even encouraged me to learn piano, which I really appreciated.

✓ My parents even encouraged me to learn the piano, which I really appreciated.

Add the definite article 'the' before musical instruments: 'learn the piano' or 'learn piano' is acceptable in informal speech, but 'learn the piano' is clearer. This sentence is otherwise correct.

× Yes I had that hobbies when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had that hobby when I was a child.

Errors: 'had that hobbies' mixes singular/plural—use 'hobby' singular to match 'that'. Also need article 'a' before 'child'. Corrected to past simple 'had' and proper articles.

× Painting is that and I really like it.

✓ Painting is that hobby, and I really like it.

'Painting is that' is unclear; 'that' should be linked to 'hobby'. Insert 'hobby' for clarity and add comma before conjunction. Pronoun 'it' correctly refers to 'painting'.

× Yes I had that, my brother also like to painting, reading music and more than it's really prefer him to relax and learn new skills.

✓ Yes, I do. My brother also likes painting, listening to music and more; these activities really help him relax and learn new skills.

Several errors: tense and auxiliary ('Yes I had that' should be present 'Yes, I do' to answer current similarity), subject-verb agreement ('brother also like' -> 'brother also likes'), verb forms ('like to painting' -> 'likes painting' or 'likes to paint'), 'reading music' is wrong for enjoying music; use 'listening to music'. Phrase 'more than it's really prefer him' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'these activities really help him relax and learn new skills.' Corrected tense, agreement, verb forms, and word choice.