爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần nói rõ và mạch lạc hơn: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes, I enjoy swimming.), sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (tenses, articles, prepositions), tránh lặp từ, giới hạn câu không quá 4–5 câu. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, ở đâu, tần suất, lý do) và dùng từ liên kết để mạch lạc (for example, because, so).

範例: Yes, I enjoy swimming. I usually swim in the apartment pool every morning because it helps me relax and stay fit. For example, I swim for about 30 minutes before work almost every day. Because the pool is close to my flat, it’s convenient and saves time.

建議: Cần dùng thì quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ và viết câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes, I did. I liked swimming as a child.). Tránh tiếng lắp, sắp xếp ý theo thứ tự (khi học bơi, cảm giác) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (lúc mấy tuổi, ai dạy).

範例: Yes, I did. I liked swimming as a child. When I was about seven, my father taught me how to swim, and I immediately enjoyed it. Since then, I spent many summers practicing at the local pool.

建議: Cần diễn đạt rõ ý liên tục: dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc hiện tại đơn phù hợp (I have liked swimming since childhood.). Giải thích cụ thể lý do (cảm giác, lợi ích) và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (have/has, were/was). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu liên kết bằng từ nối như because or since.

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed swimming since childhood. I first tried it when I was seven, and I love the sensation of being in the water because it makes me feel calm. As a result, I still swim regularly to relax and keep healthy.

建議: Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Not really, we have different interests.). Giải thích ngắn gọn tại sao (routine, personality) và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Sửa từ vựng sai (streaming? swimming?) và tránh nói lặp từ; dùng liên từ để kết nối ý (for example, however).

範例: Not really, we don’t share all the same hobbies because our routines and personalities differ. For example, I enjoy swimming, but my mother prefers shopping at the mall. However, we sometimes spend time together when our hobbies overlap.

× Yes, I prefer swimming in our in the pools because I have I have a, a pose in my apartment.

✓ Yes, I prefer swimming in the pool because I have a pool in my apartment.

Student used incorrect and repeated articles and words ('a pose', 'the pools'). Use definite article 'the' for a specific single pool and correct noun 'pool'. Also remove repetition. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular non-specific nouns and 'the' for specific ones; say 'a pool' if introducing, 'the pool' if already known.

× So I always swimming at days.

✓ So I always swim during the day.

The original lacks the correct verb form. After 'always' use the base form 'swim' (simple present) to express habitual action. Also 'at days' is incorrect preposition; use 'during the day' or 'every day'. Suggestion: use 'always' + base verb for habitual present.

× So it's become there's an activity, there's activities which I do every every day.

✓ So it has become an activity that I do every day.

Mixes singular and plural ('there's an activity, there's activities'). Use one consistent form: 'an activity' (singular) with 'that I do every day'. Also use present perfect 'has become' to indicate a change over time. Suggestion: choose singular or plural and match verbs accordingly.

× Yes, when I was child, I prefer swimming for to be specific, when I got teach, when I was taught, umm, how to swimming immediately, I like uh, swimming at that time.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I preferred swimming. To be specific, when I was taught how to swim, I immediately liked swimming.

Errors: missing article 'a child', wrong tense 'prefer' should be past 'preferred' for childhood habit, awkward phrase 'got teach' -> 'was taught', and wrong verb form 'how to swimming' -> 'how to swim'. Also 'immediately I like' -> past 'liked'. Suggestion: use past tense for past events and infinitive 'to swim' after 'how to'.

× Yes, I still like swimming since I have a try since I were tried because I will like the feelings when I'm dipping in the water.

✓ Yes, I still like swimming since I tried it because I like the feeling of being in the water.

Problems: incorrect tense 'have a try' -> 'tried', wrong verb 'were tried', incorrect future 'will like' should be present 'like' for general preference, and awkward phrase 'dipping in the water' -> 'being in the water' or 'being immersed'. 'Since' with a past event can be followed by past simple 'tried'. Suggestion: use simple past for the event that started liking and simple present for ongoing preference.

× Note, we are, we have different interests because of the daily routines and personalities are quite different.

✓ No, we have different interests because our daily routines and personalities are quite different.

'Note' is wrong here; likely intended 'No'. Redundant 'we are, we have' and wrong structure 'personalities are quite different' needs possessive 'our'. Suggestion: use 'No' to answer negatively and concise structure: 'No, we have different interests because our daily routines and personalities differ.'

× Uh, for example, I like streaming, but my mother likes shopping in the shopping center.

✓ For example, I like streaming, but my mother likes shopping at the shopping center.

Preposition: use 'at' or 'in' for locations; both can be acceptable, but 'at the shopping center' is more natural. Also remove filler 'Uh'. Suggestion: keep sentence concise and use 'at the shopping center' for habitual actions.