爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Fix subject-verb agreement and word choice (e.g., 'hobby' → 'hobbies'; 'reading gives me courage, experience, and confidence'). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I enjoy several hobbies, but reading is my favorite. Reading gives me confidence and helps me learn about different cultures and ideas, so I often read for an hour each evening.

建議: Use past tense and a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Correct repetitive phrasing and awkward verbs (e.g., 'I participated in running competitions'). Use linking words like 'so' or 'and' to connect ideas and limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: When I was a child, I enjoyed running and often took part in school races. I liked it because it kept me healthy and taught me discipline, so I trained with my coach twice a week.

建議: Begin with a direct topic sentence in present perfect or simple present (e.g., 'Yes, I have been reading since childhood.'). Use clear linking words ('and') and correct tense and word choice ('I still enjoy reading'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'tear reading'. Provide one specific example of what you read.

範例: Yes, I have been reading since childhood and I still enjoy it. For example, I used to read fairy tales as a child and now I prefer historical novels and non-fiction about science.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement). Give a specific detail about how you share the hobby and use linking words ('so', 'therefore', 'for example'). Avoid filler words and repetition. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

範例: Yes, my sister and I both enjoy reading. We often exchange book recommendations and discuss characters and ideas, which helps us understand different perspectives.

× Well I have many hobby other than reading is my favorite hobby.

✓ Well, I have many hobbies, but reading is my favorite.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural ('hobbies') after 'many'. The original sentence also has a run-on structure; replace 'other than' with 'but' to contrast. Suggestion: use 'many hobbies' and join clauses correctly with a conjunction and comma.

× Reading give me a courage and experience and a confident.

✓ Reading gives me courage, experience, and confidence.

Use 'gives' for third person singular verb agreement and uncountable nouns 'courage' and 'experience' do not take 'a'. 'Confident' is an adjective; the noun form 'confidence' is needed. Also separate items with commas.

× When I was young, my hobby is running.

✓ When I was young, my hobby was running.

The time frame 'When I was young' requires past tense. Change 'is' to past 'was' to match the past context.

× I celebrate race competitions.

✓ I participated in races/competitive running.

'Celebrate race competitions' is incorrect word choice. For past habitual participation use 'participated in races' or 'took part in competitions'. Use past tense to match context.

× It was the most hobby when I was young, and running is my best talent when I was young.

✓ It was my main hobby when I was young, and running was my best talent then.

'Most hobby' is ungrammatical; use 'main hobby' or 'favourite hobby'. Also maintain past tense consistency: change 'is' to 'was' and avoid repeating 'when I was young' by using 'then'.

× Yes, it was reading.

✓ Yes, reading was my hobby.

The original 'Yes, it was reading.' is short but acceptable; rephrasing to 'reading was my hobby' clarifies the subject and fits context. This addresses awkward 'there/it' reference.

× Reading it's a hobby that I have when since my childhood life until now.

✓ Reading is a hobby I have had since my childhood until now.

Avoid contraction 'it's' in this formal response. Use present perfect 'have had' to show continuity from past to present. 'When since my childhood life' is redundant; 'since my childhood' suffices.

× I love reading when I was young and also now I tear reading.

✓ I loved reading when I was young and I still love reading now.

Use past tense 'loved' for past time and present 'still love' for current habit. 'Tear reading' is incorrect; replace with 'still love reading' to express ongoing interest.

× Yes, my sister have the same hobby with me.

✓ Yes, my sister has the same hobby as me.

Subject 'my sister' is singular so use 'has', not 'have'. Use the correct preposition 'as' in 'the same hobby as me'.

× She also like reading a book and some kind of day.

✓ She also likes reading books and sometimes does during the day.

Use third-person singular 'likes'. 'Reading a book and some kind of day' is unclear; likely intended 'likes reading books and sometimes reads during the day' or 'reads at certain times of the day'. Clarify meaning and use plural 'books' for general habit.

× We are sharing our opinion and our talk and uh, sharing our experience the the world that we have.

✓ We share our opinions and experiences about the world with each other.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical ('the the'). Use simple present 'share' for habitual action, use plural 'opinions' and 'experiences', and structure phrase 'about the world' and 'with each other' for clarity.