爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Javobni sodda, aniq va grammatik jihatdan to'g'ri gaplar bilan qayta tuzing. Avvalo to'g'ri mavzu jumlasini ayting, so'ngroq vaqt va ta'rif bilan qisqacha qo'llab-quvvatlang. Masalan, 'I enjoy listening to music' kabi oddiy boshlanish, 'during the day and in the evening' kabi aniq vaqt ifodalari va 'I sometimes sing along' kabi natija yoki his-tuyg'u qo'shing. Grammatika va artikllarga (the/a) e'tibor bering hamda ortiqcha takrorlashdan saqlaning.

範例: I enjoy listening to music, which is my main hobby. I usually listen to songs during the day and in the evening to relax. Sometimes I sing along when a song makes me happy.

建議: Javobni o'tgan zamonda aniq ifoda eting va tafsilotlar uchun bir yoki ikki misol bering. 'When I was a child' so'zidan keyin past tense (had, collected) ishlating. Coin collecting haqida qayerdan topganingiz yoki ota-bobolaringiz bergan noyob buyum haqida qisqacha bayon qiling. To'g'ri kelishik va predloglarni tekshiring (from abroad, used abroad).

範例: When I was a child, I collected coins because I found them interesting. I used to search for old coins at markets, and once my grandfather gave me a few coins he had brought from abroad.

建議: Javobni qisqa va ravon qilib qaytaring, 'since' bilan boshlangan davomiylikni to'g'ri ifodalang (have had since childhood). His-tuyg'u va amaliy tafsilotlar bering, nimani topishingizni va qanday his qilishingizni ayting. Takrorlashni kamaytiring va noto'g'ri so'zlarni tuzating (coins, give me good emotions → give me pleasure).

範例: Yes, I have collected coins since childhood. I still enjoy searching for rare coins because finding something unique gives me a lot of pleasure.

建議: Javobni sodda tuting: to'g'ri taqqoslash va grammatik tuzilishga e'tibor bering (my father and I, listen to music). Bir-ikki qo'llab-quvvatlovchi tafsilot keltiring: qaysi turdagi musiqa sizga o'xshash yoki birga tinglash odatlaringiz haqida gapiring. Ko'proq bog'lovchi so'zlardan foydalaning (for example, often, usually).

範例: Yes, my father and I share the same hobby: we both enjoy listening to music. For example, we often listen to classical and traditional songs together in the car.

× After the years I have many many kind of hobbies and the most it's I use my hobbies is that listen the music.

✓ Over the years I have had many kinds of hobbies, and the one I use the most is listening to music.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. Use present perfect 'have had' to indicate experience over time. 'Many kind' should be 'many kinds' (plural). 'The most it's I use my hobbies is that listen the music' is ungrammatical; use 'the one I use the most is listening to music' to show the preferred hobby and use the gerund after 'is'. Suggestions: keep consistent tense, use plural for 'kinds', and use gerund 'listening' after 'is'.

× I use my hobbies during the day or the during the evening and sometimes I just try to sing like this music.

✓ I enjoy my hobbies during the day or in the evening, and sometimes I try to sing along to the music.

The original uses awkward phrasing and wrong preposition 'the during'; use 'in the evening'. 'Use my hobbies' is better expressed as 'enjoy my hobbies'. 'Sing like this music' is incorrect; use 'sing along to the music' or 'sing songs'. Suggestion: choose correct prepositions and common collocations such as 'in the evening' and 'sing along to'.

× When I was a child, I have hobbies, it is gathering some coins because I find it interesting and I try to looking for some coins and one time my grandfather gave me some coins that is used from in the abroad.

✓ When I was a child, I had a hobby of collecting coins because I found it interesting. I used to look for coins, and one time my grandfather gave me some coins that were used abroad.

Mixes past and present tenses. Use past tense 'had', 'found', 'used to look' for childhood activities. 'Gathering some coins' should be 'collecting coins'. 'That is used from in the abroad' is ungrammatical; correct to 'that were used abroad'. Suggestions: keep past tense consistently for past events, use 'collect' for coin hobby, and use passive past 'were used' with 'abroad'.

× Yes definitely I have hobbies that is giving some coins is since my childhood when I was child I allowed to do it and currently also I try to find some cons these use in overall because it's a give me good emotion and it's interesting for me.

✓ Yes, I have definitely had the hobby of collecting coins since my childhood. When I was a child, I was allowed to do it, and I still try to find coins used in other countries because it gives me pleasure and I find it interesting.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect forms: use 'have had ... since my childhood' (present perfect) to express a hobby continuing from the past to present. 'Giving some coins' should be 'collecting coins'. 'I allowed to do it' needs passive 'I was allowed'. 'Cons these use in overall' is unclear; interpret as 'coins used in other countries'. 'It's a give me good emotion' should be 'it gives me pleasure'. Suggestions: use present perfect for continuing states, correct verb forms and passive where needed, and use natural expressions like 'gives me pleasure'.

× If I think about this before but in my opinion my father and me have same hobbies, it is listen the music.

✓ If I think about it, in my opinion my father and I have the same hobby: listening to music.

Use 'think about it' rather than 'this before'. Pronoun order: 'my father and I' not 'my father and me' as the subject. 'Have same hobbies' should be 'have the same hobby' (if singular) or 'have the same hobbies' with 'the'. 'It is listen the music' should be 'listening to music'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement and correct gerund after 'is'. Suggestions: use correct pronoun order, include articles ('the same'), and use 'listening to music'.

× When I saw my father everywhere he listens the music and he loves listening.

✓ Whenever I see my father, he is always listening to music and he loves it.

Tense inconsistency: 'When I saw my father' (past) should match present habit 'he listens'; change to 'Whenever I see my father' for a habitual present. 'Listens the music' needs preposition 'listening to music'. 'He loves listening' is vague; 'he loves it' clarifies. Suggestions: keep tense consistent for habitual actions and use correct verb + preposition 'listen to'.