爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and repetition, make a clear topic sentence and add one specific detail using a linking word. Aim for correct grammar (e.g., 'one of my biggest hobbies' and 'releases stress').

範例: Yes — one of my main hobbies is playing badminton. It keeps me fit and, moreover, helps me relieve stress after a long workday because the fast-paced rallies clear my mind.

建議: Avoid tense and filler errors; use a clear past-tense topic sentence and connect a specific example with a linking word. Correct awkward phrasing and reduce hesitations.

範例: Yes, when I was a child my main hobby was playing video games. For example, puzzle and strategy games helped me develop problem-solving skills because they required planning and quick decision-making.

建議: Use a concise topic sentence and smoother linking words. Fix verb forms and informal fillers ('uh'). Mention a concrete frequency or recent change to make it specific.

範例: Yes, I have enjoyed video games since childhood. However, recently I have less free time, so I usually only play with friends at the weekend, perhaps once or twice a month.

建議: Begin with a direct answer, then give two clear reasons using linking words. Remove repetition and improve cohesion by using connectors like 'because' and 'so'.

範例: Not really. I used to play chess with my father when I was a child, but because I now live far from him and have little free time, I no longer play with him.

× Yes I do uh, one of my biggest hobby now is playing badminton.

✓ Yes, I do. One of my biggest hobbies now is playing badminton.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because it follows the quantifier 'one of my biggest', which requires a plural noun. Also add appropriate punctuation and a determiner for clarity.

× I really like it because because it helps me to keep fit and release the stress after a long work day.

✓ I really like it because it helps me keep fit and relieve stress after a long work day.

The word 'because' is repeated; remove the duplicate. Use the bare infinitive 'keep' after 'helps me' (helps me keep) and 'relieve' is more natural than 'release' with 'stress'. Also omit 'the' before 'stress' in general statements.

× Yes, uh, playing video games is my, was my biggest hobby when I was in Chi in my childhood.

✓ Yes, playing video games was my biggest hobby when I was a child in China.

The sentence mixes present and past ('is, was'). Use past tense 'was' because the time reference is childhood. Also 'in Chi' seems to be 'in China' and word order 'childhood' corrected to 'a child in China' for natural English.

× Umm playing video games helped me to challenge my, uh, brain to uh, solve the puzzle and the challenges.

✓ Playing video games helped challenge my brain to solve puzzles and face challenges.

After 'helped' the to-infinitive is optional; 'helped challenge' is more concise. Use plural 'puzzles' and 'challenges' for general meaning, and 'face challenges' is a better collocation than 'solve the challenges'.

× Yes, playing video games has been my hobby, uh, since my childhood and uh, for now I don't have much time to uh, play video games, but if I have time in the weekend I will play it with my friends.

✓ Yes, playing video games has been my hobby since childhood, and at the moment I don't have much time to play, but if I have time on the weekend I will play with my friends.

'Since my childhood' is fine with present perfect 'has been'. Remove filler words and redundant 'play video games' repetition to improve fluency. Use 'at the moment' instead of 'for now'. Use 'on the weekend' (or 'at the weekend' in British English) and avoid the pronoun 'it' for 'play' — say 'play' or 'play games'.

× Not really, I used to play chess with my father when I was a kid but now since I'm not, I'm not living too near to him and I don't have much time so I don't play it anymore.

✓ Not really. I used to play chess with my father when I was a kid, but now I don't live near him and I don't have much time, so I don't play anymore.

Remove redundant 'I'm not, I'm not living'. Use simple present 'I don't live' to describe current situation. Omit 'it' after 'play' when the object is clear, and use commas to separate clauses for clarity.