爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the sentence grammatically correct, be more concise, and add a brief reason or detail. Use a clear topic sentence, one supporting detail, and a linking word if needed. Avoid redundant phrases like “I do have” and incorrect nouns (college → colleagues).

範例: Yes. One of my main hobbies is playing badminton. I usually play every weekend with my colleagues because it helps me stay fit and relax.

建議: Correct tense and grammar, remove fillers and hesitations, and give a specific example of the kinds of games or why you liked them. Keep it to a few clear sentences and use linking words like “and” or “because.”

範例: Yes, as a child I loved playing video games. I was especially into puzzle and platform games because they challenged me and I often played them with friends after school.

建議: Reduce fillers (uh, um), correct article placement, and be slightly more specific about frequency or how the hobby has changed. Start with a direct topic sentence and add one supporting detail using a linking word like “and” or “so.”

範例: Yes. Playing video games has been my hobby since childhood, and I still play occasionally with friends when I have free time because it’s a fun way to unwind.

建議: Avoid repetition and hesitations, use clear sequence words (however, but, since), and give a concise explanation. Mention current situation briefly and possibly express a desire or plan to resume the hobby.

範例: Not really. I used to play chess with my father and I enjoyed it, but since I started studying and working full-time I haven’t had time to play. I hope to play with him again when my schedule is freer.

× One of my biggest hobby is playing badminton and I often play it every weekend with my college and my friends.

✓ One of my biggest hobbies is playing badminton and I often play it every weekend with my college friends and my other friends.

Use plural 'hobbies' after 'one of' because 'one of' refers to one item in a group; the noun must be plural. Also adjust 'my college and my friends' to 'my college friends and my other friends' for clarity and parallelism. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Yes, my biggest hobby when I was a child is playing video games.

✓ Yes, my biggest hobby when I was a child was playing video games.

The time reference 'when I was a child' places the hobby in the past, so the verb should be past tense 'was' not present 'is'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I find myself is have a very big interest in play video games and try many uh cat games and I also play it with my uh friends.

✓ I found that I had a great interest in playing video games and tried many different games, and I also played them with my friends.

Pronoun and auxiliary usage is incorrect: 'I find myself is have' should be rephrased. Maintain past tense to match 'when I was a child'. Use 'playing' after 'interest in'. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'games'. Replace vague 'cat games' with 'different games' unless specific. Ensure subject-verb consistency. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yeah, actually the, uh, playing video games, uh, has been my hobby since I was a kid and I also play it now with my friends when I have time.

✓ Yeah, actually playing video games has been my hobby since I was a kid, and I also play them now with my friends when I have time.

Use 'playing video games' without extra article 'the'. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'video games'. Sentence otherwise correctly uses present perfect 'has been' to show continuity. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Not really. Uh, I used to play chess. I used to play chess with my father and I quite like it, but since a a after a long time and I have to study and work, so I don't have time to play with my father anymore.

✓ Not really. I used to play chess with my father and I quite liked it, but after a long time, because I have to study and work, I don't have time to play with him anymore.

Maintain past tense 'liked' to refer to past habit. Remove redundant words 'a a'. Use 'after a long time' correctly and combine clauses: 'because I have to study and work' explains reason. Use pronoun 'him' to refer to 'my father' for naturalness. Avoid starting a clause with 'so' followed by another conjunction; restructure sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 12