爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more natural by correcting grammar and reducing redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid sentence fragments and capitalize only where appropriate.

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy reading because it lets me imagine different worlds and escape everyday life. For example, I often read fantasy and romance novels in my free time because they help me relax and spark my creativity.

建議: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood and correct grammatical errors. Provide a concise topic sentence, then give one specific example or anecdote. Replace vague phrases like "and etcetera" with concrete details.

範例: Yes, I did — I have loved reading since childhood. My mother often gave me books instead of toys, so I grew up reading fantasy and adventure novels, which sparked my imagination and made reading a lifelong hobby.

建議: Avoid repetition with earlier answers and tighten sentences. Use present perfect to link past to present and give a specific reason or brief example showing how reading influenced you.

範例: Yes, I have — I've been reading since I was a child because it helps me see different perspectives and understand characters' lives. For instance, reading novels about different cultures has made me more open-minded and curious about the world.

建議: Make sentences smoother and correct pronoun use. Start with a direct topic sentence, then contrast briefly with specifics and use a linking word such as "however" or "whereas".

範例: No, we don't. My two older brothers enjoy playing video games, whereas I prefer reading; I find it more relaxing and rewarding because it helps me unwind and learn new ideas.

× Yes I do, I enjoy reading because it lets me imagine, Daydream and escape reality.

✓ Yes I do. I enjoy reading because it lets me imagine, daydream, and escape reality.

Comma and capitalization: 'Daydream' should be lowercase 'daydream' as it is not a proper noun. Also the sentence uses a comma splice; replace the comma after 'do' with a period or semicolon and add 'and' before the last item in the list for correct parallel structure. Suggestion: Use proper sentence separation and lowercase for common nouns; keep list items parallel.

× I usually read in my alone time and I love certain genres such as romance, fantasy, fiction books.

✓ I usually read in my alone time, and I love certain genres such as romance, fantasy, and fiction.

Redundant word order: 'fiction books' is redundant when listing genres; use 'fiction'. Missing comma before conjunction improves clarity. Also include 'and' before the last item in the list for correct parallelism. Suggestion: Keep list items in the same grammatical form and add commas and conjunctions appropriately.

× Yes I do and it's still reading. Ever since I was young I remember the times where my mom would gave me books instead of toys.

✓ Yes I do, and it's still reading. Ever since I was young I remember the times when my mom would give me books instead of toys.

Incorrect past tense after 'would': 'would gave' is wrong because 'would' is followed by the base verb 'give'. Also 'where' is incorrect for referring to times; use 'when'. Suggestion: After 'would' use base verb form; use 'when' for time clauses.

× From then it interests me to read certain novels such as fantasy, romance and action, role building and etcetera.

✓ Since then I have been interested in reading certain novels such as fantasy, romance, action, and role-playing stories.

Tense and word choice: 'From then it interests me' is awkward; use present perfect 'have been interested' to show continued interest from the past to present. 'Role building' is incorrect; likely 'role-playing'. 'And etcetera' is redundant; 'etc.' should be avoided in speech lists and items should be parallel. Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions continuing to the present, choose correct compound nouns like 'role-playing', and avoid 'etcetera' in lists.

× Yes, and it is still reading because reading makes me imagine and see perspectives on different people and in life.

✓ Yes, and it is still reading because reading lets me imagine and see different people's perspectives in life.

Verb choice and preposition: 'makes me imagine and see perspectives on different people and in life' is awkward. Use 'lets me imagine' and 'different people's perspectives in life' for clearer, natural expression. Suggestion: Use 'let' for allowing imagination and possessive form for 'different people's perspectives'.

× That's why I find reading so much enjoyable ever since I was a kid.

✓ That's why I have found reading so enjoyable ever since I was a kid.

Tense consistency: 'I find reading so much enjoyable ever since I was a kid' mixes present simple with 'ever since' which requires present perfect to show continuous state from past to present. Also 'so much enjoyable' is unnatural; use 'so enjoyable' or 'very enjoyable'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions or states continuing from the past ('have found') and use natural adjective collocations.

× No, we do not share the same hobbies. My two older brothers enjoy playing games whereas myself I don't.

✓ No, we do not share the same hobbies. My two older brothers enjoy playing games, whereas I do not.

Pronoun and word order: 'myself I don't' is incorrect; 'myself' is unnecessary and causes incorrect word order. Use the subject pronoun 'I' and place the negative auxiliary 'do not' after it for correct structure. Suggestion: Use subject pronouns with correct word order: 'I do not' or 'I don't'.

× I prefer reading as it is more relaxing than playing games like that.

✓ I prefer reading because it is more relaxing than playing games.

Awkward phrase 'like that' is unnecessary and informal here. 'As' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer for giving a reason. Simplify the comparison by removing 'like that'. Suggestion: Use clear conjunctions ('because') and avoid vague phrases like 'like that'.