爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more natural by using correct grammar, grouping similar items, and keeping it concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repeating ideas and long lists without connectors.

範例: Yes — I enjoy reading, especially novels and self-development books. For example, I often go to the library because it’s quiet and helps me focus. Reading has improved my communication and broadened my knowledge, so I make time for it several evenings a week.

建議: Improve grammar (past tense consistency), use clearer sequence words, and give one precise detail about why you enjoyed the hobby. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid unclear phrases.

範例: Yes, I did. I loved cycling and rode my bike every evening around our housing complex with my friends. We often stopped to chat and sometimes cycled to my mother’s workplace to pick her up, which made the rides more fun.

建議: Clarify what the hobby is (the phrase is unclear) and use correct verb forms. State the hobby in a simple topic sentence, then explain why it continues to appeal to you with one concrete example. Avoid mixed metaphors and vague words.

範例: Yes, I have kept one hobby since childhood: watching TV dramas about grammar and language learning. I find these programmes relaxing and educational, so I often take notes and keep a list of episodes I want to watch to improve my language skills.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer contrast words (e.g., "No, we have different hobbies"). Correct grammar and give one specific example of a family member’s hobby and one of your own. Use linking words like "however" or "on the other hand."

範例: No, we have different hobbies. For example, my mother enjoys trying new restaurants and shopping, while I prefer quieter activities such as reading, watching films, and visiting museums.

× 'my hobbies are reading a novel, romance and self development book.'

✓ 'My hobbies are reading novels, romance novels, and self-development books.'

'The original mixes singular and plural forms and omits hyphenation for a compound adjective. Use plural forms when listing types of books (novels, romance novels, self-development books) and hyphenate self-development. Also capitalize the first letter.'

× 'The best place reading a book is the library.'

✓ 'The best place to read a book is the library.'

'The verb form is incorrect: use the infinitive to express purpose (to read) rather than the gerund directly after "place". This correctly links place and action.'

× 'Reading can improve our skills, communication, know a lot of things and shaping the way of thinking.'

✓ 'Reading can improve our skills, communication, knowledge of many things, and shape the way we think.'

'The list mixes nouns and verb forms. Use parallel structure: nouns (skills, communication, knowledge) and then a verb phrase consistent in form (and shape the way we think). Replace "know a lot of things" with "knowledge of many things" and ‘‘shaping’’ with ‘‘shape’' to keep parallelism.'

× 'Yes I did when I was a child. I like cycling and every evening I took my bike out the garage.'

✓ 'Yes I did when I was a child. I liked cycling and every evening I took my bike out of the garage.'

'Talking about childhood requires past tense: change "like" to "liked." Also include the preposition "out of" for correct phrasal verb "took ... out of the garage."'},{

× 'Then I played with my friends strolling around complex and pick up my mom.'

✓ 'Then I played with my friends, strolling around the complex, and picked up my mom.'

'Need article before "complex" and consistent past tense for actions. Use commas for the participial phrase and change "pick up" to past tense "picked up."'

× 'Then they are followed me behind.'

✓ 'Then they followed me.'

'The original has incorrect auxiliary and redundant adverb "behind." Use simple past "followed" and omit "behind," which is unnecessary. Also remove passive-like structure.'

× 'Yes I have, I like watch grammar career until now every time I watch it likes healing for me in a week.'

✓ 'Yes I have. I like watching Grammar Career; even now, every time I watch it, it feels healing to me.'

'When expressing a continued hobby, use present perfect "I have" then a gerund for liking activities: "like watching." Use proper punctuation and change "likes healing for me in a week" to natural phrasing "it feels healing to me."'

× 'I usually take notes or have a wish list title of the drama career to be watched.'

✓ 'I usually take notes or keep a wish list of drama titles to watch.'

'Use correct verb + -ing/infinitive patterns: "keep a wish list" and "titles to watch" is natural. Replace awkward phrasing "wish list title of the drama career to be watched."'},{

× 'I think no me and my family different hobbies.'

✓ 'I don't think my family and I have the same hobbies.'

'Correct subject pronoun order is "my family and I." Use negation properly "I don't think" and express the idea as a full clause "have the same hobbies."'

× 'My my mom really like go to wall culinary and shopping.'

✓ 'My mom really likes going to culinary walls and shopping.'

'Remove duplicate "my." Use third person singular "likes," and gerund "going." Note: if "wall culinary" refers to a food court or culinary street, use a more natural noun; here corrected literally. Consider revising to "food markets" or "food courts."'

× 'Besides me I like reading a book, watch a movie and go to museum.'

✓ 'Besides me, I like reading books, watching movies, and going to museums.'

'Use parallel gerund forms for listed activities (reading, watching, going) and plural nouns (books, movies, museums). Add comma after introductory phrase.'