爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two or three specific hobbies with brief details or reasons. Avoid repetition (e.g., mentioning brother twice) and reduce sentence fragments. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading novels because they help me relax and learn new ideas, and I like painting landscapes in my free time to express my creativity. I also play video games with my brother occasionally, which is a fun way for us to bond.

建議: Good clear response but make it more natural by removing repeated phrases and adding a brief reason or memory. Use a linking word to combine ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved reading comic books and painting with my best friend, because we enjoyed creating colorful characters and stories together.

建議: Be concise and avoid awkward tense usage. State the hobby clearly, then contrast past and present with one linking word (e.g., "although" or "now"). Limit to two to three sentences and use varied vocabulary (comic books → graphic novels, novels).

範例: Yes, I have kept two hobbies since childhood: reading and painting. Although I read comic books as a child, I now prefer novels, and I still enjoy painting landscapes in my free time.

建議: Organize the answer: start with a clear statement about shared hobbies, then give specific examples and a contrast about differences. Fix grammar (use "My mother and I" not "Me and my mother") and avoid repetition. Keep it to two or three sentences with linking words like "also" and "however".

範例: Yes, some of my hobbies overlap with my family. For example, my mother and I both enjoy reading, and my brother and I often play video games together. However, other family members prefer different activities, such as gardening or sports.

× Hobbies Yes, I do have hobbies such as reading books, painting, working along with my brother and playing games with my brother.

✓ Yes, I have hobbies such as reading books, painting, working with my brother, and playing games with him.

The original sentence has redundant words and awkward structure ('Hobbies Yes'). Remove the extra word and use parallel structure for the list. Use 'have' instead of 'do have' for natural present simple. Use 'with him' to avoid repeating 'my brother'. ID:26

× I did have hobbies when I was a child. I used to read comic books and used to do paintings along with my best friend.

✓ I had hobbies when I was a child. I used to read comic books and paint with my best friend.

Using 'did have' is unnecessary; simple past 'had' is correct. Use 'used to' plus base verb for habitual past: 'used to paint' or simply 'paint'. 'Do paintings' is unnatural; 'paint' is the correct verb. ID:5

× Yes, I do have a hobby that I'm having since childhood such as reading books and painting.

✓ Yes, I have had hobbies since childhood, such as reading books and painting.

Present perfect 'have had' is needed to express an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'I'm having' is incorrect for long-term states. Also use plural 'hobbies' because multiple activities are listed. ID:6

× When I was child I used to read comic books but nowadays I love to read novel books but the hobby remains same as a reading and for the painting it's the same.

✓ When I was a child I used to read comic books, but nowadays I love to read novels; the hobby remains the same for reading and painting.

Missing article 'a child' requires 'a'. Use plural 'novels' rather than 'novel books'. Sentence run-on fixed with punctuation and clearer phrasing. 'The hobby remains same as a reading' is awkward; use 'the hobby remains the same for reading and painting.' ID:22

× Me and my mother are having same hobbies. She loves to read as well for the gaming.

✓ My mother and I have the same hobbies. She loves to read and also enjoys gaming.

'Me and my mother' is incorrect subject order and case; use 'My mother and I'. 'Are having' is unnatural for possessions; use 'have'. 'As well for the gaming' is ungrammatical—use 'also enjoys gaming.' ID:12

× For the gaming hobbies me and my brother are having same hobbies for in the gaming session.

✓ For gaming, my brother and I share the same hobby of playing games together.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical. Use clean structure: 'For gaming, my brother and I share the same hobby' and avoid unnecessary phrases like 'in the gaming session.' Also correct subject order and 'are having' to 'share'. ID:26

× Yes we do have a same hobbies as a family members but sometime but some of the hobbies are our family members are different they they love to do different things.

✓ Yes, we have the same hobbies as family members, but sometimes some family members have different hobbies and enjoy different things.

Remove unnecessary 'do' and 'a' before 'same hobbies'. Use plural 'family members' consistently. Fix word order and redundancy ('but sometime but some', duplicated 'they'). Use 'sometimes' adverb and rephrase for clarity. ID:1