爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 文の流れが不自然で語彙や文法の誤りがあるため、もっと簡潔で明確な構成にすること。まずトピック文で趣味を述べ、次に理由と具体例（週に何回作るか・得意な料理など）を一つか二つの文で示す練習をしてください。また、発音や語の選択（例："spa"は意味不明 → "Spanish"? または "soup"?）に注意し、言い直しや繋ぎ言葉（for example, usually, especially）を適切に使ってください。

範例: Yes, I enjoy cooking. I find it relaxing after a busy workday, and I usually prepare dinner three or four times a week. For example, I often make Italian dishes like pasta and risotto, and I also like trying new soup recipes.

建議: 構成は良いが、より自然にするために時制と語彙を整え、理由や頻度など具体性を加えてください。接続詞（but, however, so）を適切に使い、短く明瞭に述べる練習をしましょう。例えば"I used to"や"I haven't played... for years"の表現を使うと自然です。

範例: I used to play soccer when I was a child because I enjoyed exercising and playing with friends. However, I don't play sports much now, so I haven't played soccer for several years.

建議: 情報は伝わるが文法（完了形や過去形）、語彙（"laid"や"leading"の誤用）を直し、対比を明確にしてください。まず継続を示す表現（"I've liked reading since childhood"）を使い、例や最近の変化（どんなビジネス書か）を具体的に述べると良いです。接続詞（for example, recently, however）を使い一貫性を持たせてください。

範例: Yes, I've loved reading since I was a child. For example, I read many fantasy novels like the Harry Potter series when I was younger. Recently, however, I tend to read more business books about management and productivity.

建議: 文が断片的で時制・語法の誤りが多いです。まず簡潔に答え（Yes, I do / No, I don't）、次に誰と趣味を共有しているか、その例や影響（具体的な本のタイトルといつ読んだか）を説明してください。"recommend"の後は動詞の原形（recommend reading / recommended that I read）を使い、作者名や作品名は正確に。

範例: Yes, I share my interest in reading with my mother. She often recommended books to me when I was a teenager; for example, she suggested I read Haruki Murakami's novels, which inspired me to read more contemporary fiction.

× Yes I do, I really I'm keen on cooking because when I cook I can really consider it on on this work apart from daily entirely work.

✓ Yes, I do. I'm really keen on cooking because when I cook I can really focus on the task, apart from my daily work.

The sentence contains incorrect and repeated prepositions ('consider it on on this work', 'apart from daily entirely work'). Use 'keen on' for liking something and 'focus on the task' to express concentration. 'Apart from' should be followed by a clear noun phrase such as 'my daily work'. Also add punctuation and adjust word order for clarity.

× For example, I usually cook after working for dinner.

✓ For example, I usually cook dinner after work.

'After working' is awkward here; the idiomatic expression is 'after work'. Also 'cook dinner' is the typical collocation. Reordering improves naturalness and tense consistency.

× I cook many Italian and spa.

✓ I cook many Italian and Spanish dishes.

'Many' with countable nouns needs a plural noun; 'Italian' and 'spa' are incorrect as nouns for cuisines. Likely intended 'Italian and Spanish dishes'. Use 'dishes' to make the phrase grammatical.

× When I was a child, my hobby was playing soccer because I really liked doing exercises.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was playing soccer because I really liked exercising.

'Doing exercises' is grammatical but unidiomatic here; 'exercising' (a gerund) is more natural. The past tense 'was' and 'liked' are correct; adjust verb form for natural usage.

× However, currently I do not have a habit of doing sport, so I haven't played soccer for a long time.

✓ However, currently I do not have a habit of playing sports, so I haven't played soccer for a long time.

Use 'playing sports' rather than 'doing sport' in natural English. 'Haven't played soccer for a long time' correctly combines present perfect to indicate an action not done recently.

× Yes, I have. I like reading books since my childhood.

✓ Yes, I have. I have liked reading books since my childhood.

When referring to a continuous state from the past until now, use present perfect ('have liked') with 'since'. Simple present 'like' + 'since' is incorrect.

× When I was a child I laid so many books and like Harry Potter and the other story novels.

✓ When I was a child I read so many books, like Harry Potter and other story novels.

'Laid' is the wrong verb; the correct past tense of 'read' is 'read' (pronounced 'red'). Also use 'like' to give examples and 'other story novels' should be 'other novels' or 'other story novels' without 'the'.

× On the contrary, recently I'm leading a kind of business books and other than novel.

✓ On the contrary, recently I've been reading kinds of business books rather than novels.

'Leading' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'reading', so use present perfect continuous ('I've been reading') to show a recent change. 'A kind of business books' is ungrammatical; use 'kinds of business books' or 'business books' and 'rather than novels' is the correct contrast phrase.

× Yes, I have. My mother also like reading books since my childhood my mother told me her recommendation of books.

✓ Yes, I have. My mother also liked reading books when I was a child; she recommended books to me.

Pronoun and tense issues: 'my mother also like' should be 'my mother also liked' (past) or 'has liked' depending on meaning. 'Since my childhood' is misplaced; clarify timing. 'My mother told me her recommendation of books' is awkward; use 'she recommended books to me.'

× For example, when I was a junior high school student, my mother recommended to read Haruki Murakami's Nobel.

✓ For example, when I was in junior high school, my mother recommended reading Haruki Murakami's novels.

'Recommended to read' should be 'recommended reading' or 'recommended that I read'. 'Junior high school student' can be shortened to 'in junior high school'. 'Nobel' is incorrect; likely 'novels'. Also possessive is fine: 'Haruki Murakami's novels.'

× After that I have led them and.

✓ After that I read them.

'I have led them and.' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended 'I have read them' or simple past 'I read them.' Use 'read' (pronounced 'red') for past action; remove the trailing 'and'.