爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g. "sometimes", "to experiment").

範例: I have several hobbies. For example, I play badminton with my brother regularly because it keeps me fit and energized. I also enjoy experimenting with different cuisines at home, which helps me learn new recipes and relax.

建議: Use past tense consistently and give specific examples. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then explain with linking words and concrete details. Avoid repeating phrases from other answers.

範例: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. For instance, I often danced in school performances and sang popular songs for my family, which made me feel happy. I also started cooking simple dishes, a hobby I still enjoy today.

建議: Be direct and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use one clear topic sentence stating the hobby has continued since childhood, then add a specific detail about how you practice it now. Correct grammatical forms ("doing" -> "experimenting").

範例: Yes, cooking has been a hobby of mine since childhood. I started by trying simple family recipes and now I experiment with international cuisines on weekends, which keeps me creative and happy.

建議: Answer directly and use possessive and plural forms correctly. Provide one linking phrase and a brief contrast if needed. Be specific about what each family member enjoys.

範例: No, my hobbies are different from my family members'. For example, my father enjoys reading non-fiction books to stay informed, while my brother prefers playing cricket regularly to keep fit.

× Firstly, I like to play badminton with my brother regularly which keeps me fit and energizes.

✓ Firstly, I like to play badminton with my brother regularly, which keeps me fit and energizes me.

The clause 'which keeps me fit and energizes' needs the object 'me' after 'energizes' for completeness. Also add a comma before the non-defining relative clause. Placement of 'regularly' is acceptable but ensure the clause punctuation is correct.

× Even sometime I cook different cuisines just to experiments and even I love to travel in different places a lot which help me to explore new places.

✓ Sometimes I cook different cuisines just to experiment, and I also love to travel to many places, which helps me explore new areas.

Use 'Sometimes' (adverb) instead of 'Even sometime'. 'to experiment' is the correct infinitive, not 'to experiments'. Use 'also' rather than repeated 'even'. 'Travel to many places' is natural and 'which helps me explore' requires singular verb 'helps' to agree with singular 'which' referring to travelling. Avoid repetition of 'places'.

× Yes, when I was a child I was having variety of hobbies like dancing which keeps me active or even singing.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a variety of hobbies, such as dancing, which kept me active, and singing.

Use simple past 'had' rather than progressive 'was having' for habitual past. Add article 'a' before 'variety'. 'Which kept me active' should use past tense 'kept' to agree with the time frame.

× I used to sing different songs which makes me feel happy and even I love to cook different cuisines as now I am following it.

✓ I used to sing different songs, which made me feel happy, and I also loved to cook different cuisines, which I still enjoy now.

When describing past habits, use past tense 'made' and 'loved'. 'I am following it' is awkward; replace with 'I still enjoy' to indicate continuation. Ensure tense consistency between clauses.

× Yes, as I have said you earlier that when I was a child I used to cook different cuisines and doing experiments regarding different dishes.

✓ Yes, as I said earlier, when I was a child I used to cook different cuisines and do experiments with different dishes.

Use simple past 'said' not 'have said you earlier'. Remove 'you' after 'said'. After 'used to' use base verb 'do' not the -ing form 'doing'. Use 'experiments with' rather than 'regarding'.

× So cooking is a hobby which I still follow today and which makes me feel happy and I love to eat food a lot.

✓ So cooking is a hobby I still pursue today; it makes me happy, and I love eating food a lot.

Replace 'follow' with 'pursue' for natural collocation. Use a semicolon or split into clearer sentences. 'Eat food a lot' is improved to 'love eating food a lot' for correct verb form.

× No, me and my family members do not have same hobbies.

✓ No, my family members and I do not have the same hobbies.

Subject pronoun 'I' should be used, and it is polite to mention others first: 'my family members and I'. Include the article 'the' before 'same hobbies'.

× Firstly my father hobby is to read books which help him to stay updated and my brother favorite hobby is to play cricket which makes him active.

✓ Firstly, my father's hobby is reading books, which helps him stay updated, and my brother's favorite hobby is playing cricket, which keeps him active.

Use possessive forms 'my father's' and 'my brother's'. Use gerunds 'reading' and 'playing' after 'hobby'. 'Helps' and 'keeps' require third-person singular agreement. Add commas for readability.