爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は内容が明確ですが、表現の自然さと簡潔さを改善できます。繰り返し（"playing volleyball"）が多く、文法ミス（"high school student"→"high school"や"when I have a free time"→"when I have free time"）があります。答えは冒頭で直接答え、続けて理由や頻度などの具体的な詳細を1〜2文で述べると良いでしょう。例えば、頻度やどのように楽しんでいるかを示すと自然で効果的です。

範例: Yes, I play volleyball. I started in high school and now I play two or three times a week to stay fit and socialise with friends.

建議: 答えは意味が伝わりますが、語彙や文法の誤りが多く、説明が曖昧です（"Lego is some Brooks"は意味不明）。過去の習慣を示す時は過去形を一貫して使い、具体例（どんなセットが好きだったか、誰と遊んだか）を加えると良いです。また、不自然な表現を避け、簡潔に述べましょう。

範例: When I was a child, I enjoyed playing with Lego. I especially liked building cars and houses, and my parents often gave me Lego sets for Christmas.

建議: 内容は伝わりますが、文法と語順の問題（"That spot"は不適切）や一貫性の欠如があります。まずは直接答え（はい／いいえ）を述べ、その後で具体的な例や期間（いつ始めたか、どのくらい続けているか）を簡潔に説明してください。語彙は文脈に合う単語を使い、過去の出来事は過去形で統一しましょう。

範例: Yes, I've played table tennis since I was a child. I joined my high school table tennis club and practised regularly, so it has remained one of my favourite sports.

建議: 回答は明確ですが、時制の不一致（現在形と過去形が混在）や語の重複があります。まず現在の状況を述べ、次に頻度や場所などの具体的な詳細を付け加えると良いです。例えば、"we play... and enjoy..."のように時制を現在形で統一してください。

範例: Yes. My sister and I both enjoy volleyball and we usually play in the park near our home at weekends, which is a great way to stay active together.

× Of course, my hobby is playing volleyball.

✓ Of course, my hobby is playing volleyball.

Correct sentence; 'playing' correctly follows 'hobby is' to express an activity; no change needed.

× When I was in high school student I started playing volleyball and I love playing volleyball and when I have a free time I play volleyball.

✓ When I was a high school student, I started playing volleyball, and I loved it; when I have free time, I play volleyball.

Run-on sentence and incorrect noun phrase 'high school student' without article. Use 'a high school student'. Maintain tense consistency: 'started' (past) and 'loved' (past) for historical preference; 'when I have free time' is present habitual. Add commas and fix 'a free time' to 'free time'.

× That was Lego when I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, it was Lego.

Awkward word order. Use 'When I was a child' to set time and 'it was Lego' to identify the hobby in the past; keeps past tense consistent.

× I like playing Lego.

✓ I liked playing with Lego when I was a child.

Ensure tense consistency: refer to childhood in past ('liked'). Also include preposition 'with' to correctly collocate with 'play' and 'Lego'.

× Lego is some Brooks and in Christmas my mother and father give me a lot of Lego.

✓ Lego is made of small blocks, and at Christmas my mother and father gave me a lot of Lego.

Several problems: 'some Brooks' is incorrect vocabulary—use 'small blocks'. Use 'at Christmas' not 'in Christmas'. Maintain past tense 'gave' to match childhood timeframe.

× That spot when I was a child.

✓ I was into sports when I was a child.

Original fragment 'That spot' is ungrammatical. Provide a complete sentence: 'I was into sports' correctly expresses interest in sports in the past.

× I like sports, especially table tennis.

✓ I liked sports, especially table tennis, when I was younger.

To match the context of childhood or past, change present 'like' to past 'liked' or add time phrase. If speaking about current preference, keep present. Here context asks about since childhood, so past is appropriate.

× When I was near high school student I joined table Tennis Club and I enjoyed playing.

✓ When I was in high school, I joined the table tennis club, and I enjoyed playing.

Use 'in high school' or 'a high school student' rather than 'near high school student'. Capitalization: 'table tennis' not 'Table Tennis'. Use definite article 'the' before 'table tennis club' if referring to a specific club. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Add comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation; grammatically sentence is fine otherwise.

× My sister and I like playing volleyball.

✓ My sister and I like playing volleyball.

Sentence is correct; no preposition error. No change needed.

× In weekend we play volleyball in park near my home and we enjoyed playing volleyball.

✓ On weekends we play volleyball in the park near my home, and we enjoy playing volleyball.

Use 'on weekends' for habitual actions, not 'in weekend'. Use 'the park' with 'near my home'. Maintain tense consistency: if talking about current habitual action, use 'enjoy' not 'enjoyed'.