爱好— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words like “because” or “so” appropriately, and keep it within three sentences.

範例: I enjoy playing video games, especially League of Legends. I like it because I can play cooperatively with my friends online, which makes it social and fun. For example, we often coordinate strategies during ranked matches to improve together.

建議: Clarify tense and meaning: answer directly, correct grammar (past tense), and give a specific example. Use linking words like “but” to contrast, and avoid unclear phrases such as “short track” or “short drive” unless you explain them.

範例: When I was a child I enjoyed playing video games, but I also did short-track speed skating for a few years. For instance, when I was in elementary school my father drove me to practice every Saturday, which helped me improve my technique.

建議: Make the response coherent and meaningful: open with a clear topic sentence in present perfect or present simple, explain why you like it with specific details, and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words like “because” and give an example of what you enjoy about it.

範例: Yes, I've loved watching Gundam anime since I was in elementary school. I enjoy it because of the complex stories and mecha designs, and watching characters overcome challenges makes me feel inspired. For example, the battle strategies in one episode taught me about teamwork and perseverance.

建議: Be direct and concise: state the general situation then give a specific example linking to family. Use smoother linking phrases like “however” and correct small errors (e.g. “the same hobby”). Keep it to two or three sentences.

範例: Generally, my family members have different hobbies because we belong to different generations. However, my brother and I both enjoy playing League of Legends, so we often play together online and discuss strategies.

× Yes, in my daily routine, I love enjoying play video games such as League of Legends.

✓ Yes, in my daily routine, I love playing video games such as League of Legends.

The verb 'love' is followed by a gerund (verb + -ing) not an infinitive or 'enjoying play'. Use 'love playing' to express a habitual liking. Remove the extra word 'enjoying' and use 'playing' after 'love'.

× This is because when I play this game, I can play with my friends so I love it.

✓ This is because when I play this game, I can play with my friends, so I love it.

Sentence structure needs a comma before 'so' when joining clauses. No verb form error here beyond punctuation; the present tense 'play' is correct for habitual action. Adding a comma improves clarity and correctness.

× When I was younger, I also enjoy playing video games, but there is there was an exceptional one that is short track.

✓ When I was younger, I also enjoyed playing video games, but there was one exceptional hobby: short track.

The time clause 'When I was younger' requires past tense 'enjoyed', not present 'enjoy'. Also remove redundancy 'there is there was' and rephrase to 'there was one exceptional hobby' for clarity.

× When I was in elementary school, I took a short drive with my father's.

✓ When I was in elementary school, I took a short drive with my father.

Use 'my father' (noun) not the possessive 'my father's' which needs an object. 'My father's' would require a following noun (for example, 'my father's car'). Remove the apostrophe-s.

× I have enjoyed watching the animation of Gundam when I was oh since I was involved in elementary school.

✓ I have enjoyed watching the Gundam animation since I was in elementary school.

Mixing present perfect 'have enjoyed' with a past time clause 'when I was' is awkward. Use 'since' with present perfect to indicate a continuing action: 'have enjoyed ... since I was in elementary school'. Also reorder to natural English: 'Gundam animation' or 'the Gundam series'. Remove filler 'oh' and 'involved' which is incorrect here.

× I love it because it is. I can't feel accomplishments when I see this.

✓ I love it because it makes me feel accomplished when I watch it.

'I love it because it is.' is a sentence fragment; 'it is' needs a complement. The second sentence 'I can't feel accomplishments when I see this' is ungrammatical and awkward. Rephrase to positive: 'it makes me feel accomplished' and use 'watch it' rather than 'see this' for animations.

× I think usually our families don't have same hobbies.

✓ I think usually our family members don't have the same hobbies.

'Families' is plural and awkward here; use 'family members' or 'our family' depending on meaning. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'same hobbies'. This corrects quantifier and article use.

× This is because our generation is quite different.

✓ This is because our generations are quite different.

If comparing the student's generation with family members of different ages, plural 'generations' fits better. If meaning 'within our family' then 'the generations' may be used. Adjust pronoun 'our' remains but noun should match intended meaning.

× But I have same hobby with my brother.

✓ But I have the same hobby as my brother.

Use 'the same hobby as' to express similarity; 'have same hobby with' is non-idiomatic. 'As' is the correct preposition for comparing two people having the same hobby.

× Uh, the hobby is playing League of Legends.

✓ The hobby is playing League of Legends.

Remove filler 'Uh' in formal answers. The phrase 'is playing' is acceptable as a nominal description of the hobby. No verb change required beyond removing the hesitation.

× This is because we are same generation.

✓ This is because we are the same generation.

Add the definite article 'the' in the phrase 'the same generation'. In present tense describing a general fact, 'are' is correct; the missing article was the error.