聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับให้ประโยคกระชับ เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลสั้นๆ หลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดไม่ชัดเจน เช่น “lie” ที่ไม่สอดคล้องกับความหมาย และแก้ไวยากรณ์พหูพจน์/กาล เวลา ตัวอย่างเช่น ให้ใช้ ‘friends’ และ ‘work’ ในรูปที่ถูกต้อง รวมทั้งเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อมง่ายๆ เช่น because/so/and เพื่อความลื่นไหล

範例: Yes, I do. I often chat with my friends on messenger to relax after work because talking to them helps me unwind. I usually message in the evening and we share small talks or jokes.

建議: ลดคำอืออ้าและพูดให้ชัด เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ แล้วให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น เรื่องงาน กิจกรรม หรือเหตุการณ์ในวันนั้น ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อทำให้ข้อมูลเรียงลำดับและเข้าใจได้ดีขึ้น

範例: I usually talk about our day. For example, I tell them what I did at work and any interesting things I saw, and they do the same so we can catch up and relax.

建議: แก้ไวยากรณ์และใช้คำศัพท์ให้เหมาะสม เช่น ‘one friend’ และ ‘privacy’ อธิบายเหตุผลให้ชัดเจนโดยใช้ตัวอย่างสั้นๆ และเชื่อมเหตุผลด้วยคำว่า because or when เพื่อความเป็นธรรมชาติ

範例: I prefer chatting with one friend because I value privacy. For instance, I feel more comfortable discussing personal problems one-on-one rather than in a group.

建議: ปรับประโยคให้ไหลลื่นและแก้าความหมายไม่ชัด เช่น ‘express now in current time’ ใช้คำที่ถูกต้องเช่น ‘express emotions’ หรือ ‘read facial expressions’ และเชื่อมเปรียบเทียบด้วยคำว่า whereas/while เพื่อให้ชัดเจน

範例: I prefer face-to-face communication because you can make eye contact and read facial expressions, which helps understanding. While social media is convenient, it often lacks tone and non-verbal cues.

建議: เติมข้อมูลให้สมบูรณ์ อธิบายสาเหตุและผลลัพธ์สั้นๆ แก้ไวยากรณ์ เช่น ‘used to’ ถ้าเป็นเรื่องที่ผ่านมาให้ชัด หรือใช้ ‘sometimes’ ถ้าเป็นปัจจุบัน และเลิกประโยคทิ้งไม่จบ ควรให้ตัวอย่างเฉพาะเจาะจงและจบความคิดด้วย

範例: Yes, sometimes we argue, usually about money. For example, a friend once borrowed cash and didn’t return it on time, which caused tension, but we later resolved it by discussing a repayment plan.

× Yes definitely I always chat with my friend by messenger and lie and I want to relax from my works and afterwards I will talk with my friend in chat.

✓ Yes, definitely. I always chat with my friends by messenger when I want to relax from my work, and afterwards I talk with my friends in chat.

The sentence uses incorrect singular/plural forms: 'my friend' should be 'my friends' if speaking about multiple people; 'my works' is incorrect—use 'my work' for uncountable meaning. Also 'I will talk' is unnecessary future; present simple fits habitual actions. Improve by matching singular/plural nouns to intended meaning and use present simple for routines.

× Uh, maybe, uh, share our day together. I will share them by, uh, what I doing in the day and what I see in the day. That's so makes me feel, uh, relaxed and can know about that day, what days they.

✓ Uh, maybe we share our day together. I talk about what I did during the day and what I saw. That makes me feel relaxed and lets me know about their day.

Original mixes verb forms incorrectly. Use base form with subject (we share) or past simple for completed actions (I did, I saw). 'I will share them' is incorrect for habitual action. 'That's so makes me' should be 'That makes me', and 'can know about that day, what days they' is ungrammatical—use 'lets me know about their day.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb tense.

× I want to share with only one friends because I want to privacy.

✓ I want to share with only one friend because I want privacy.

Mix of singular/plural: 'one friends' is incorrect; use singular 'one friend'. 'I want to privacy' should be 'I want privacy' without article. Improve by using correct singular noun and omitting unnecessary articles.

× If I chat with group friends, it maybe can share with other people that I don't want to spread this information.

✓ If I chat with a group of friends, it may be shared with other people, which I don't want.

Use 'may' or 'might' for possibility rather than 'maybe can'. 'Group friends' should be 'a group of friends'. Passive 'be shared' expresses information being spread. Use 'which' to introduce the clause explaining the consequence.

× It's depends on on.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Redundant 'on on' and incomplete thought. Use 'It depends on the situation' or 'It depends on who it is' to complete the sentence. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'It depends' not 'It's depends'.

× I prefer face to face because it can see eye contact and that express now in current time.

✓ I prefer face-to-face communication because you can make eye contact and express yourself in the moment.

Use hyphenated 'face-to-face' as adjective/noun phrase. 'It can see eye contact' is wrong; use 'you can make eye contact'. 'That express now in current time' is awkward—use 'express yourself in the moment' to convey simultaneous expression.

× But in social media we cannot see their face, their sounds is can only see in text.

✓ But on social media we cannot see their faces or hear their voices; we can only see text.

Use 'on social media' not 'in'. 'Their face' should be plural or 'their faces' when referring to people in general. 'Their sounds is can only see in text' mixes pronouns and verbs—use 'hear their voices' and 'we can only see text' for clarity.

× Yes, it depends on the situation. I used to argue with my friend like about money.

✓ Yes, it depends on the situation. I sometimes argue with my friends about money.

'I used to argue' implies a past habit no longer true; if meaning occasional current occurrence, use 'I sometimes argue'. Also 'my friend' vs 'my friends'—use plural for general situations. Ensure tense matches intended meaning.

× They borrow my cash to buy the thing that they want to to use.

✓ They borrow money from me to buy things they want to use.

Pronoun and word order errors: 'borrow my cash' is better as 'borrow money from me'. Avoid repeated 'to'. Use plural 'things' for general purchases and 'they want to use' for relative clause.

× But I think it's the.

✓ But I think that's unfair.

Sentence is incomplete. Provide a clear completion that fits context, e.g., 'that's unfair' or 'that's the problem.' Ensure sentences are complete with subject and predicate.