聊天— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more fluent and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation words (umm), correct vocabulary (recent events, our lives), and keep it concise (max 4 sentences). Add one specific example to make it concrete.

範例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends about recent events and our family lives. For example, last week we discussed a local news story and how it affected my parents. Talking like this helps us stay connected.

建議: Lead with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar (children's lives, my family's daily life), reduce hesitations, and add a linking word to connect ideas (for example, because). Provide one specific detail to support your statement.

範例: Usually we talk about our family and daily routines. For example, my friend tells me about her children's experiences at school, and I share what my family did that day, which makes me feel supported.

建議: Give a clear reason using correct vocabulary (introverted or private, not insurance). Remove repetitions, use one linking word to explain cause (because/so), and keep it concise. Offer a brief example of when you choose one-to-one chats.

範例: I prefer chatting one-on-one with a close friend because I am quite private and feel safer sharing personal experiences. For example, I usually call one close friend when I want to discuss family problems.

建議: Start with a clear statement, correct word choice (like Line, Facebook), avoid filler words, and explain briefly why with a linking phrase (because). Add a short example showing a typical situation when you use social media.

範例: I prefer communicating via social media such as Line, Facebook, or Instagram because I type more easily than I speak aloud. For example, I usually message friends during work breaks when I can't make a phone call.

建議: Give a direct answer and correct phrases (I don't argue with my friends; I have a calm personality). Remove unclear words, avoid hesitation, and add a brief reason or example to support your response.

範例: No, I rarely argue with my friends because I have a calm personality and prefer to resolve disagreements quietly. For example, if we disagree, I suggest taking a break and talking later to avoid conflict.

× Yes, I like to chat with my friends about some umm news like umm recently events in society and we like to share our recently alive about our family.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with my friends about recent events in society, and we like to share recent updates about our family.

Use the gerund 'chatting' after 'like' (Verb + -ing). 'Recently events' is incorrect word order and form; use 'recent events'. 'Recently alive' is incorrect; use 'recent updates' or 'news about our family'. Also fix word order and redundancy.

× As I mentioned, we like to share our lives, uh, like umm, her son and daughter's life in school and I share my family's daily life with her. That made me feel great.

✓ As I mentioned, we like to share our lives, for example her son's and daughter's school life, and I share my family's daily life with her. That makes me feel great.

Use possessive forms 'her son's and daughter's' and parallel structure. 'That made me feel great' shifts to past; the correct present effect is 'That makes me feel great' to match 'we like' (present). 'like umm' filler removed. 'share our lives' is fine but clarify examples.

× I love chats with only my friend because I I'm I'm insurance so I only like to share my personal experience with my close friend that made me feel safe.

✓ I prefer chatting with just one friend because I am shy, so I only like to share my personal experiences with my close friend; that makes me feel safe.

Replace 'I love chats with only my friend' with 'I prefer chatting with just one friend' for naturalness. 'I I'm I'm insurance' is incorrect; likely meant 'I am shy'. Use plural 'experiences'. Change 'that made me feel safe' to present 'that makes me feel safe' to match present preference. Correct pronoun and tense consistency.

× I prefer chat with my friend through social media like lie or uh, Facebook or Instagram, uh, because I, I'm good at typing and I'm not good at speak loud.

✓ I prefer chatting with my friends through social media like Line, Facebook, or Instagram because I'm good at typing and I'm not good at speaking loudly.

Use gerund 'chatting' after 'prefer'. 'like lie' likely 'Line' (app). 'friend' plural 'friends' matches general statement. Use 'speaking loudly' (gerund + adverb) rather than 'speak loud'.

× Uh, no, I'm, I'm not overlooked with my friends because I'm a person, uh, Smith's personality and I don't like argue so.

✓ No, I don't argue with my friends because I have a calm personality and I don't like to argue.

'I'm not overlooked with my friends' is incorrect; likely intended 'I don't argue with my friends'. 'I'm a person, Smith's personality' is unclear; replace with 'I have a calm personality'. Use infinitive 'to argue' or gerund 'arguing' consistently. Simplify and clarify meaning.