鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers (Yes/No and frequency), then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb tenses. Use linking words (e.g., “when,” “so”) correctly and keep to no more than 4–5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes and I used to buy them quite often when I was at college. At that time, I bought a variety of styles — high heels for parties, sneakers for everyday wear and boots for colder weather. Now I buy shoes less frequently.

建議: Clarify tense and avoid unclear phrases. Give a concise topic sentence and one reason with a specific example. Replace vague or incorrect expressions (e.g., “the wandering industry”) with clear language like “busy schedule” or “long queues.”

範例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it’s much more convenient for me. For example, I can compare styles and sizes quickly and have them delivered, which saves time when I’m busy with work.

建議: Give a precise estimate and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence stating a typical monthly amount, then briefly explain why (e.g., number of pairs or quality). Use rounded figures and one linking phrase for coherence.

範例: I usually spend around $100 to $200 per month on shoes, depending on whether I need just one pair or several. For instance, if I’m replacing worn-out sneakers and buying a dress pair, the total tends to be closer to $200.

建議: Answer directly and correct grammar. Begin with a clear preference and provide a brief reason and contrast with the past. Avoid errors like “my food more comfortable” and repetition of “for now.” Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “now”) to show contrast.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes now, because I value practicality in my daily life. However, when I was in college I cared more about fashionable shoes and often chose dressy styles for social events.

× Oh yes, I used to when I'm in college I always buy different different kind of shoes in different styles.

✓ Oh yes, I used to. When I was in college I always bought different kinds of shoes in different styles.

Mixed tense and wrong plural form: 'used to' refers to past so follow with past tense 'was' not 'I'm'. 'Buy' should be past 'bought'. 'Different kind' requires plural 'kinds'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use 'different kinds of shoes'.

× I brought high heels and sneakers and boots for some fashion

✓ I bought high heels and sneakers and boots for fashion.

Incorrect verb form: 'brought' means 'carried' but intended 'bought' (past of buy). Also 'for some fashion' is unnatural; use 'for fashion' or 'for style'. Suggestion: use 'bought' and simplify phrase to 'for fashion'.

× Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's very convenient and I don't have many time to go shopping and the wandering industry.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's very convenient and I don't have much time to go shopping, and I dislike window shopping.

Tense mostly present but quantifier error 'many time' should be 'much time' (uncountable). 'Wandering industry' is incorrect phrase; likely 'window shopping' or 'wandering around stores'. Suggestion: use 'much time' and replace unclear phrase with 'window shopping'.

× So mostly I bought shoes online.

✓ So mostly I buy shoes online.

Inconsistent tense: earlier sentence uses present 'usually buy', so 'bought' (past) is inconsistent; use present simple 'buy' to match habitual action. Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual behaviors.

× Um, let me think maybe a hundred or two hundred per wee per month.

✓ Um, let me think, maybe one hundred or two hundred per week or per month.

Typos and unclear time unit: 'wee per month' is incorrect. Also numbers should be 'one hundred' etc. Clarify whether amount is per week or per month. Suggestion: decide correct period and write clearly: 'one hundred or two hundred per week' or 'per month'.

× I can't remember exactly Uh maybe maybe about two hundred, I think.

✓ I can't remember exactly. Maybe about two hundred, I think.

Minor punctuation and repetition: keep present tense 'can't remember'. Remove duplicate 'maybe' and add sentence break. Suggestion: simplify to 'I can't remember exactly; maybe about two hundred.'

× It changed.

✓ It changed.

Short answer acceptable but ambiguous: 'It changed' is past tense matching context, no grammar error. No correction needed. Suggestion: could be more natural as 'My preference changed.'

× When I was in college, I prefer the shoe sets that looks well.

✓ When I was in college, I preferred shoes that looked good.

Tense mismatch: 'When I was in college' (past) should pair with past 'preferred'. Subject-verb agreement and adjective use: 'shoe sets' unnatural; use 'shoes'. 'Looks well' is incorrect: use past 'looked' and adjective 'good'. Suggestion: use 'preferred shoes that looked good.'

× But for now, I just want my food more comfortable, so for now, I just choose some sneakers to wear.

✓ But now, I just want my feet to be more comfortable, so I choose sneakers to wear.

Many issues: 'for now' repeated; 'want my food' is wrong word 'feet'; 'more comfortable' requires structure 'want my feet to be more comfortable' or 'prefer comfort'. Tense: present 'choose' fits current preference. Suggestion: say 'now I prefer comfort, so I choose sneakers.'