鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response grammatically correct, concise, and directly answer frequency. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid contradictions and keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially basketball and running shoes. When I was in senior high school, I used to buy new shoes every month because I played sports a lot, so I accumulated many pairs at home.

建議: Correct tense and word choice, and use linking words to connect reasons. Be specific about advantages and one example of a site or feature. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, I buy most of my shoes online because it is easy to compare styles and colors. Also, I often get discounts or free shipping from sites like Taobao or JD, which saves me money.

建議: Provide a clear current or past spending figure and use correct grammar. Start with whether you mean now or in the past, then give a specific amount and a brief reason. Use linking words to clarify time reference.

範例: When I was in senior high school, I spent about CN¥500 on shoes each month because I prioritized buying footwear over other clothes. Now I spend much less because I already have many pairs.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then explain with two specific reasons and a brief example. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'youthful and functional' without explanation.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods and value support and cushioning. For example, I choose sneakers with good arch support rather than trendy designs, even if they are less fashionable.

× I'm big fans of basketball shoes and running shoes.

✓ I'm a big fan of basketball shoes and running shoes.

Use singular pronoun phrase 'a big fan' because 'I' requires singular agreement when expressing being one fan. The original used plural 'fans', causing mismatch. Suggestion: use 'a big fan' or 'I love' to avoid pronoun-number issues.

× When I was a Senior High School student, I almost buy a new shoes once a week, once a month, so I have accumulated various shoes in my home.

✓ When I was a senior high school student, I almost bought new shoes once a week or once a month, so I accumulated various shoes at home.

The time clause 'When I was' requires past tense 'bought' not present 'buy'. 'A new shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'new shoes'. Use 'accumulated' in past to match time context and 'at home' is natural. Also change 'once a week, once a month' to 'once a week or once a month' for clarity.

× Yes, all of my shoes were bought online because it is easy to choose different style of shoes or colors.

✓ Yes, all of my shoes were bought online because it is easy to choose different styles of shoes or colors.

Use plural 'styles' and 'colors' to match 'different'. Also 'were bought online' is acceptable past passive; ensure noun agreement: 'styles' instead of 'style'.

× Beside there are more con discount I can get when I shop online.

✓ Besides, there are more discounts I can get when I shop online.

Use 'Besides' (adverb) not 'Beside'. 'con discount' seems mistaken; use plural 'discounts'. Add comma after 'Besides' for clarity. The sentence structure improves by correcting word choice and plurality.

× When was the Senior High School student, I spent almost CN¥500 for shoes every month and I never buy a new garment because all of my money was spent on purchase shoes.

✓ When I was a senior high school student, I spent almost CN¥500 on shoes every month and I never bought new clothes because all of my money was spent on buying shoes.

Include 'I' after 'When' for proper clause. Use past tense 'spent' and 'bought' to match time. 'For shoes' better as 'on shoes'. 'A new garment' is awkward; use 'new clothes' and 'buying shoes' instead of 'purchase shoes'. Align verb forms and prepositions with standard usage.

× I prefer comfortable shoes for sure because I think a youthful and functional is the most important part of the shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes for sure because I think being youthful and functional is the most important part of shoes.

Original mixes noun phrase incorrectly: 'a youthful and functional' lacks a noun. Use gerund 'being' with adjectives 'youthful and functional' to describe qualities. Also 'part of the shoes' is unnatural; use 'part of shoes' or 'a shoe'.

× I didn't care. Uh, the appearance is fashionable or old fashioned.

✓ I didn't care whether the appearance was fashionable or old-fashioned.

Sequence of tenses: main clause is past 'didn't care', so subordinate clause should use past 'was'. Combine into one sentence with 'whether' for clarity and hyphenate 'old-fashioned'.