鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời tự nhiên và rõ ràng, nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp (số nhiều/ít), dùng linking words để mạch lạc hơn và rút ngắn để không quá dài. Thêm một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn rồi triển khai 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể sẽ tốt hơn.

範例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them every few months because I prefer high-quality pairs that last. For example, I tend to choose classic sneakers or loafers that match most outfits and are comfortable for daily use.

建議: Nội dung rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (thì, cấu trúc bị động, mạo từ) và câu ví dụ thiếu mạch lạc. Nên dùng linking words như "however" hoặc "for example" hợp lý, chỉnh sửa thì và cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên hơn.

範例: Yes, I buy most of my shoes online because it is convenient and allows me to compare styles and prices easily. However, sometimes the quality is disappointing; for example, a pair of sneakers I bought last month fell apart after only two weeks because they were made from poor materials.

建議: Ý tưởng hợp lý nhưng có lỗi thì (quá khứ/hiện tại), từ vựng lặp và một vài cụm từ không tự nhiên. Nên bắt đầu với câu chủ đề ngắn, nêu con số chung hoặc phạm vi chi tiêu, sau đó giải thích và đưa ví dụ cụ thể.

範例: I usually spend a moderate to fairly high amount on shoes because I see them as an investment. For instance, I might spend $60–$120 on a good pair of work shoes, and a bit less on casual sneakers, since durable shoes save money over time.

建議: Rõ ràng và phù hợp, có lý do và ví dụ cá nhân. Tuy nhiên câu hơi dài và lặp ý; có thể dùng linking words ngắn gọn và thay đổi từ vựng để tự nhiên hơn.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they are more practical for daily use. As a student who commutes every day, I usually wear supportive trainers or sneakers so I can walk long distances without discomfort.

× ...because the shoe I buy are usually good quality.

✓ ...because the shoes I buy are usually good quality.

The noun 'shoe' should be plural to match the plural verb 'are' and the general meaning of buying multiple shoes. Use 'shoes' to agree in number: 'the shoes I buy are'. Suggestion: make the noun plural when referring to multiple items.

× ...prefer comfortable designs that last long.

✓ ...prefer comfortable designs that last a long time.

The phrase 'last long' is informal and missing the noun 'time'. The present participle issue here is about correct expression of duration. Use 'last a long time' for clarity and correctness. Suggestion: add 'a' and 'time' to express duration.

× Oh, I think that I buy most of my shoes online because it's very convenient and I can easily compare design and price.

✓ Oh, I think that I buy most of my shoes online because it's very convenient and I can easily compare designs and prices.

Countable nouns 'design' and 'price' should be plural when referring to comparing multiple options. Adjust nouns to plural form to match meaning. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally about multiple items.

× However, sometimes the shoe turned out to be poor quality and not very durable.

✓ However, sometimes the shoes turn out to be poor quality and not very durable.

The original mixes past tense 'turned' with 'sometimes' (habitual). Use present tense 'turn' for repeated events. Also 'shoe' should be plural to match general reference. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual occurrences and plural for general items.

× For example, a pair of sneakers I bought last month fell apart after only two weeks because it made of not good material.

✓ For example, a pair of sneakers I bought last month fell apart after only two weeks because it was made of poor-quality material.

Two problems: missing auxiliary 'was' before 'made' (past passive), and awkward adjective order 'not good material'. Use past passive 'was made' and 'poor-quality' to describe material. Suggestion: use correct passive construction 'was made of' and prefer 'poor-quality' for clarity.

× I just really spent a moderate to large amount of money on shoes because I consider them an investment.

✓ I usually spend a moderate to large amount of money on shoes because I consider them an investment.

The original uses past tense 'spent' with 'just' oddly; context asks about usual spending. Use present simple 'spend' to describe habitual action. 'Just really' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and remove redundant adverbs.

× For example, I buy sturdy work shoes and couple of pairs for special acquisition.

✓ For example, I buy sturdy work shoes and a couple of pairs for special occasions.

Missing article 'a' before 'couple' and 'acquisition' is incorrect word choice; 'occasions' is the intended noun and should be plural. Fix number agreement and vocabulary. Suggestion: use 'a couple of pairs' and 'occasions' to express multiple special events.

× I prefer comfortable shoes much more because they are more practical and better for walking long distance.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes much more because they are more practical and better for walking long distances.

Use plural 'distances' or 'a long distance' with article. 'Walking long distance' is ungrammatical; 'walking long distances' expresses general activity. Suggestion: use plural noun for general activities or include article 'a' for singular.

× As a student I commute every day so I usually choose supportive trainers or sneakers when I travel so my feet don't hurt.

✓ As a student, I commute every day, so I usually choose supportive trainers or sneakers when I travel so my feet don't hurt.

Missing commas affect readability; preposition use 'when I travel' is acceptable but the sentence is run-on. Add commas and consider replacing second 'so' with 'so that' or splitting into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: add punctuation and optionally use 'so that my feet don't hurt' for clearer purpose expression.