鞋子— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and directly answer the question first (topic sentence). Then give 1–2 clear supporting details with correct grammar and logical linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear time expressions. Use specific frequency phrases (e.g. "once a year", "every few years") and correct verb forms.

範例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't do it very often. I usually buy a new pair once a year because I choose comfortable, long-lasting shoes that still look good.

建議: Start with a clear direct answer, then give reasons using linking words (because, so). Correct verb forms and sentence structure are needed. State whether you buy online and explain why with specific detail (e.g. fit, return policy). Avoid unfinished sentences.

範例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I usually prefer buying in person because I like to try them on first. Also, when I shop in stores I can check the fit and comfort, which is important since I often buy shoes for running.

建議: Answer directly with a specific price range and then give a reason using linking words (because, so, but). Use correct grammar for amounts and comparative statements. Be concise and avoid redundancy.

範例: I usually spend around $100 or more on a good pair of shoes because I prioritise comfort. However, if a cheaper pair looks great but isn’t comfortable, I won't buy it.

建議: Give a clear preference in one sentence, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid contradictory or unclear statements and fix grammar (singular/plural, articles). Finish sentences fully.

範例: I prefer comfortable shoes, although I also care about style because I want shoes that look good and feel good. For example, I usually choose expensive sneakers because they provide better cushioning for long walks.

× Yes, I like shoes, I guess, and I am the I am the person that always likes shoes, but I am not going to buy that often.

✓ Yes, I like shoes, I guess, and I am the kind of person who is always fond of shoes, but I do not buy them very often.

The original repeats 'I am the' and uses 'that' incorrectly for people and refers to shoes with singular 'that' and 'it'. Use 'kind of person' and 'who' for people, and 'them' as plural pronoun for shoes. Also change 'not going to buy that often' to the present simple 'do not buy them very often' to match a habitual action.

× I buy it for free a whole year or longer than that five year and I am doesn't have money.

✓ I do not buy them for a whole year or sometimes for five years, because I do not have much money.

Sentence needed reordering and correct verb forms. 'I buy it for free a whole year' is unclear; use 'I do not buy them for a whole year' to show absence of purchases. 'Longer than that five year' becomes 'sometimes for five years'. 'I am doesn't have money' mixes 'am' with negative 'doesn't'; use 'I do not have much money'.

× I'm broke, but I already bought I already bought a shoes that made me comfortable and look good, so it.

✓ I'm broke, but I already bought a pair of shoes that make me comfortable and look good, so I keep them.

Remove repeated phrase and use 'a pair of shoes' (not 'a shoes'). Use present simple 'make' to describe a general property of the shoes. Add a clear clause 'so I keep them.' Also replace 'bought' repetition.

× Yes, definitely. Actually I am online businessman too, but I am not often to buy that.

✓ Yes, definitely. Actually I am an online businessman too, but I do not buy shoes often.

Missing article 'an' before 'online businessman'. 'I am not often to buy that' is ungrammatical; use 'I do not buy shoes often' for habitual frequency.

× I buy in real life because it really great for me to to try on it first and it it fit to my shoes and I buy it.

✓ I buy in person because it is really important for me to try them on first and make sure they fit before I buy them.

Use 'in person' instead of 'in real life'. Add 'it is' for grammaticality. 'Try on it' should be 'try them on' and 'fit to my shoes' is incorrect—use 'fit'. Also use consistent plural pronouns 'them' for shoes.

× But I always buy a expensive 1A comfortable one to make me.

✓ But I always buy an expensive, comfortable pair to suit me.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound 'expensive'. '1A' is unclear; replace with 'comfortable'. 'One to make me' is incomplete; use 'to suit me'.

× I am the running so I choose the comfortable and.

✓ I do a lot of running, so I choose comfortable shoes.

Original fragment 'I am the running' is incorrect; express the activity 'I do a lot of running'. Remove trailing 'and' and finish the sentence with 'shoes'.

× I usually to spend on shoes, the expensive one around $100 up, but sometimes I really want to get it a really great look, but if it's not a comfortable I am not going to wear that.

✓ I usually spend around $100 or more on expensive shoes, but sometimes I really want a great-looking pair; if they are not comfortable, I will not wear them.

Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'usually'. 'the expensive one' should be 'expensive shoes' or 'an expensive pair'. 'Around $100 up' becomes 'around $100 or more'. Use 'great-looking pair' for appearance. Use plural pronouns 'they/them' and correct conditional: 'if they are not comfortable, I will not wear them'.

× I prefer to I prefer to a comfortable shoes and fashionable shoes because it I want a nice looking shoes and a comfortable shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I want shoes that look nice and are comfortable.

Remove duplicate 'I prefer to'. Use 'comfortable shoes' and 'fashionable ones' (replace 'a comfortable shoes' which mixes article and plural). 'it I want' is incorrect; use 'because I want shoes that look nice and are comfortable'.

× But is that it's cheap, it really more better than I am have to choose.

✓ If they are cheap and comfortable, that is even better than having to choose between them.

Original is unclear and mixes forms. Use conditional 'If they are cheap and comfortable'. Replace 'more better' (double comparative) with 'even better'. Fix 'I am have to choose' to 'having to choose'.

× But I am always get expensive one because it's more comfortable.

✓ But I always buy the expensive ones because they are more comfortable.

Use 'buy' instead of 'get' for clarity, 'expensive one' should be plural 'ones' or 'an expensive pair'. Use plural 'they are' to agree with 'ones'.

× Right now I'm also wear a sneaker because sneaker is.

✓ Right now I am also wearing sneakers because they are comfortable.

Use present continuous 'am wearing' for current action. 'a sneaker' vs 'sneakers' choose plural commonly; 'because sneaker is' is incomplete—add 'comfortable' to complete the reason.